Volunteers Needed
A reluctant parent volunteers on a field trip.30 total reviews
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Beth, this deserves a six star rating, but I don't have one to give you!
Having read your profile, wherein you say you would love to improve your writing skills, I find myself amazed. Improve your skills how? You are very talented already.
There were no SpaG or typos throughout this, so not only well written, but very well edited too.
The story made me chuckle. I am familiar with these 'trips' of which you speak. I am crafty however. I didn't learn to drive until last year, hence I was never pressed into service! All I had to do was pack their gear, roust the bad-tempered little tykes from their beds - and wait for them to be picked up!
As for going to camp at 7 months' pregnant, well....you must have been totally mad! (Pregnancy does this though).
Great writing, fabulous story. I really enjoyed it.
All the best.
Kat
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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Beth, this deserves a six star rating, but I don't have one to give you!
Having read your profile, wherein you say you would love to improve your writing skills, I find myself amazed. Improve your skills how? You are very talented already.
There were no SpaG or typos throughout this, so not only well written, but very well edited too.
The story made me chuckle. I am familiar with these 'trips' of which you speak. I am crafty however. I didn't learn to drive until last year, hence I was never pressed into service! All I had to do was pack their gear, roust the bad-tempered little tykes from their beds - and wait for them to be picked up!
As for going to camp at 7 months' pregnant, well....you must have been totally mad! (Pregnancy does this though).
Great writing, fabulous story. I really enjoyed it.
All the best.
Kat
Comment Written 07-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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Kat, you really know how to boost a gal's ego. Again, I apprecaite everything you say because you are an accomplished writer yourself. You know I am engrossed your work.
Beth
Comment from *erin*
Good story. It was very humorous. I thought it odd that they would've made you go camping when you were pregnant, but what do I know. There weren't any mistakes or errors that I saw. Good job.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Good story. It was very humorous. I thought it odd that they would've made you go camping when you were pregnant, but what do I know. There weren't any mistakes or errors that I saw. Good job.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Thank your for reading and commenting. I thought that was a little over the top too but most of the possibilities for help with the campout had jobs they couldn't leave and they were desperate for anyone who happened to have a little time to spare.
Beth
Comment from jdrhye
Very funny story. I volunteered to chaperone my sons friends on a camping trip at the beach for spring break. It was a trip indeed. We got through it with lots of stories to tell of our escapades and at the end of the trip these 12 teenagaers were akined to my own children. I was now the mother to all from that day forward! Priceless. Nice job, enjoyed the read. Happy thursday.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Very funny story. I volunteered to chaperone my sons friends on a camping trip at the beach for spring break. It was a trip indeed. We got through it with lots of stories to tell of our escapades and at the end of the trip these 12 teenagaers were akined to my own children. I was now the mother to all from that day forward! Priceless. Nice job, enjoyed the read. Happy thursday.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Thank you for reading and for your nice comments. Children make like interesting.
Beth
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Yes they do, and you are much welcomed!
Comment from jojosug
Oh, what we get into s mothers! This is a lovely story, crisp and well written and it was a very enjoyable read. Glad you managed to get out of the driving!
Jo
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Oh, what we get into s mothers! This is a lovely story, crisp and well written and it was a very enjoyable read. Glad you managed to get out of the driving!
Jo
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Thank you for reading and for you nice review. Yes, those children add a whole new dimension to you life.
Comment from adewpearl
You are so preaching to the choir here - I'm the one who became the cub scout den leader because they wouldn't accept new boys if they didn't have new leaders, the one who was president for years of the PTA for kids in the gifted program, the swim club mom who judged meets - the chaperone for field trips - yeah, you and I are cut from the same cloth.
LOL I thoroughly enjoyed your stories, especially when the cop cut you some slack because he didn't want to deal with hauling you all in! LOL This was a fun read. :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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You are so preaching to the choir here - I'm the one who became the cub scout den leader because they wouldn't accept new boys if they didn't have new leaders, the one who was president for years of the PTA for kids in the gifted program, the swim club mom who judged meets - the chaperone for field trips - yeah, you and I are cut from the same cloth.
LOL I thoroughly enjoyed your stories, especially when the cop cut you some slack because he didn't want to deal with hauling you all in! LOL This was a fun read. :-) Brooke
Comment Written 04-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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Brooke, Thank you so much for your comments. I glad you understand where I'm coming from.
Beth
Comment from lkatka
I enjoy personal and honest writing. Your story is fun, lighthearted, real and well-written. There was one little word I thought you might like to look at..."soaked pots [blackened]...
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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I enjoy personal and honest writing. Your story is fun, lighthearted, real and well-written. There was one little word I thought you might like to look at..."soaked pots [blackened]...
Comment Written 04-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I'm glad you liked the story. Thanks for pointing out the word. I'll check it out.
Comment from despiser
Hi Bethshelby
I'm not sure what to make of this story. It paces well, nicely written, but sounds more like a conversation than a story. By that I mean I cannot distinguish the beginning from the end. Or perhaps that's the intention. I think extending a little longer with a more discernable ending would flesh it out to be a really good story. ie: They all arrive at their destination and something unusual happens.
All the best
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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Hi Bethshelby
I'm not sure what to make of this story. It paces well, nicely written, but sounds more like a conversation than a story. By that I mean I cannot distinguish the beginning from the end. Or perhaps that's the intention. I think extending a little longer with a more discernable ending would flesh it out to be a really good story. ie: They all arrive at their destination and something unusual happens.
All the best
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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Well, it was just a humorous essay about something that actually happened to me. I wasn't trying to tell a story. Thank you for reading and commenting. I'll take your advice into consideration.
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I gotcha, that's what i thought :)
Comment from Jazh
lol This is a great story! How dull life would be without children and the rich experiences they bring to us. You have written this well and humorously. I'm glad you didn't go to jail. Just a few suggestions:
have its rewards but you'd better - rewards[,] but
The leaders in charge are adept in knowing how to inflict you with just the right amount of guilt to prevent you from saying "no" with a clear conscience. - this is an extremely long sentence. It would flow much better if you could break it up.
pots blacked - do you mean 'blackened'?
Your descriptions of teenagers are wonderful. I take my hat off to you! :)
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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lol This is a great story! How dull life would be without children and the rich experiences they bring to us. You have written this well and humorously. I'm glad you didn't go to jail. Just a few suggestions:
have its rewards but you'd better - rewards[,] but
The leaders in charge are adept in knowing how to inflict you with just the right amount of guilt to prevent you from saying "no" with a clear conscience. - this is an extremely long sentence. It would flow much better if you could break it up.
pots blacked - do you mean 'blackened'?
Your descriptions of teenagers are wonderful. I take my hat off to you! :)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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Thanks so much for reading and pointing out a few things that need working on. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I thought I had already answered this but I must not have saved the reply.
Comment from rivki1111
You are brave to drive a bus full of people on a trip away, ehheehe :)
I enjoyed the detail of your story and found it to be very entertaining. You have style that is easy to read and I didn't notice any errors.
Thanks for sharing your story, it is one I would recommend, cheers, rebekah
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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You are brave to drive a bus full of people on a trip away, ehheehe :)
I enjoyed the detail of your story and found it to be very entertaining. You have style that is easy to read and I didn't notice any errors.
Thanks for sharing your story, it is one I would recommend, cheers, rebekah
Comment Written 04-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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Rebekah, Thank for reading and commenting. I was braver back then. I don't think I would tackle it again no matter how much of guilt trip they put me on.
Comment from patwannabe
You must be related to my daughter. Her volunteering sounds just the same. Kudus to anyone who tries to follow the lead car. Delightful! Very well written, beautiful sequences, easy to follow and very real. Enjoyed your humor, too. Good reading. Keep it up, pat wannabe
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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You must be related to my daughter. Her volunteering sounds just the same. Kudus to anyone who tries to follow the lead car. Delightful! Very well written, beautiful sequences, easy to follow and very real. Enjoyed your humor, too. Good reading. Keep it up, pat wannabe
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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Thanks, Pat
I didn't volunteer all that willing but I did get roped into it a number of time. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Beth
