A Leaf on the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "More Secrets"Autobiography of abuse
11 total reviews
Comment from medicnate
Do you think the baby could have been your dad's? That sucks, it just seems wherever you went, you were met with a new challenge, even your best friend. I'm sorry.
~medicnate~
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
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Do you think the baby could have been your dad's? That sucks, it just seems wherever you went, you were met with a new challenge, even your best friend. I'm sorry.
~medicnate~
Comment Written 05-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
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The thought crossed my mind but I really didn't want to know. I was too shocked to ever talk about it.
Comment from Lois Delaney
Boy! This even gets worse. Now with your best friend. How could your mother put up with that? I can't imagine how sick he must have been. Men are men, I guess. I don't want any part of another man as long as I live.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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Boy! This even gets worse. Now with your best friend. How could your mother put up with that? I can't imagine how sick he must have been. Men are men, I guess. I don't want any part of another man as long as I live.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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My mother never knew about Bonnie. And like you, I have spent the last 20 years single, and quite content.
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
This chapter continues an unbelievable saga of abuse. What is most interesting are the contrasts of a perceived "happy" life complete with a picket fence, poised against the hidden realities of a living hell. To be betrayed by the best friend in such a manner, is indeed, unforgivable. The story is riviting. Excellently composed. Seraph~
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2009
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This chapter continues an unbelievable saga of abuse. What is most interesting are the contrasts of a perceived "happy" life complete with a picket fence, poised against the hidden realities of a living hell. To be betrayed by the best friend in such a manner, is indeed, unforgivable. The story is riviting. Excellently composed. Seraph~
Comment Written 25-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your kind review. And, again, than you for your high rating!
Comment from Stacey Lynne Wells
Please tell me you're joking! That's disgusting! Why would she go to your Dad for money? I don't understand. Did you ever find out? Jeez! Well, I'll hope to seeya again soon.
Rachel
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2009
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Please tell me you're joking! That's disgusting! Why would she go to your Dad for money? I don't understand. Did you ever find out? Jeez! Well, I'll hope to seeya again soon.
Rachel
Comment Written 25-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2009
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I am sure he went to her...he new how to manipulate people and find their weaknesses. She was deperate, about ready to have a baby and couldn't go home. Sorry, but it is true. Thank you for your high rating, and sorry but sometimes the true can get pretty ugly.
Comment from laurelp
That is some life you have had to live. I don't know how you managed to survive. I am saddened how children are so easily the victims of abuse. But, it still goes on and now the internet is helping alot.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2009
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That is some life you have had to live. I don't know how you managed to survive. I am saddened how children are so easily the victims of abuse. But, it still goes on and now the internet is helping alot.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2009
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At least I am living prove survival is posible....glad you liked the chapter. Thanks for the high rating too.
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My meager little 5 stars can't make up for what you have gone through to write this story. But, I am reading it because it is very well written with very few errors (except for the existance of your father). I wish you the best of all possible ends to your life. I only wish you were able to tell this story to someone when you were under 10 so you wouldn't have gone through all of it.
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Not to cause you concern but it gets worse before it gets better.
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I sadly can believe that.
Comment from jodeecee
desperately looking for love in all the wrong places. (this is one've those 'sayings' duh, can't think of the word.)
"Do you know who the father is?/"/
Mom'/s/ car was not parked in the driveway
I grabbed the lamp from the nightstand and threw it at him/,/ hitting him on the side of the head.
Another great chapter!
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2009
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desperately looking for love in all the wrong places. (this is one've those 'sayings' duh, can't think of the word.)
"Do you know who the father is?/"/
Mom'/s/ car was not parked in the driveway
I grabbed the lamp from the nightstand and threw it at him/,/ hitting him on the side of the head.
Another great chapter!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2009
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Thank you, again, for your attentio to detail. I will make those correction now. Again, thank you.
Comment from adewpearl
When will it end should have a question mark
This father is one sick bastard - if not molesting his own daughter, paying another vulnerable young woman to have his way with her when she is in no position to turn down that kind of money - that is a powerful scene when she walks in on them - the people who betray her just go on and on and on.
Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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When will it end should have a question mark
This father is one sick bastard - if not molesting his own daughter, paying another vulnerable young woman to have his way with her when she is in no position to turn down that kind of money - that is a powerful scene when she walks in on them - the people who betray her just go on and on and on.
Brooke
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your review. I will go over the chapter again to see what other errors I can find. I appreciate your attention to detail.
Comment from Simon Ruddle
Smurphgirl, I take it that this story is based on things and events that you have witnessed? As such it is something of an eyeopener, with a dreadful twist towards the end. Such things make you think 'Thank heaven's thats not me' also make you aware how lucky you are that you are not them, but someone has the misfortune to have to be 'them' Also I doubt the father gave Bonnie $500 out of charity - people don't change overnight - not without a lot of duress. To change the subject a little, have you thought of exhibiting your pictures on the FanStory sister site - the art site? Surely its worth a try.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Smurphgirl, I take it that this story is based on things and events that you have witnessed? As such it is something of an eyeopener, with a dreadful twist towards the end. Such things make you think 'Thank heaven's thats not me' also make you aware how lucky you are that you are not them, but someone has the misfortune to have to be 'them' Also I doubt the father gave Bonnie $500 out of charity - people don't change overnight - not without a lot of duress. To change the subject a little, have you thought of exhibiting your pictures on the FanStory sister site - the art site? Surely its worth a try.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Thak you for your kind words. I knew giveing Bonnie money had nothing to do with generosity...he is clearly a selfish person. And yes, I do display my paintings on ArtReview. I have many that do not relate to the book ande have been well received. I appreciate that you like the ones that you have seen.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
My Gods, Valerie. Is there no end to the awful trauma you suffered as a youngster? Once more, you have written with painful honesty; your confusion and pain show through brilliantly in the way you have written this chapter.
All the best.
Kat
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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My Gods, Valerie. Is there no end to the awful trauma you suffered as a youngster? Once more, you have written with painful honesty; your confusion and pain show through brilliantly in the way you have written this chapter.
All the best.
Kat
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Thank you. Yes, there is an end but sorry, not for a while yet.
Comment from Cereal Writer
I liked the cut and dried attitude in this. The subject matter is disgusting in itself and one that needs to be studied and read about. To help the victims, and put the perpetrators away..The story has grabbed me because I sense that an emotional breakthrough must come sometime, and I want to be there. All of these situations are being dealt with as they come, without much depth, and that is really good writing because who could really deal with this type of treatment unless they "stood outside" of themselves. Her developing skills to protect herself emotionally, plus learn the horror of a friend who has not improved, only learned how to make the best of her life in the worst of ways, makes me hope for your girl. She is outraged. That is a good thing, and she keeps going, trying to understand. How difficult that she must decipher why it is so horrible to her own self, and so easy to do because those she is involved with carry on without consequence.. Hope to keep up on this, and go back also..Nice job..
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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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I liked the cut and dried attitude in this. The subject matter is disgusting in itself and one that needs to be studied and read about. To help the victims, and put the perpetrators away..The story has grabbed me because I sense that an emotional breakthrough must come sometime, and I want to be there. All of these situations are being dealt with as they come, without much depth, and that is really good writing because who could really deal with this type of treatment unless they "stood outside" of themselves. Her developing skills to protect herself emotionally, plus learn the horror of a friend who has not improved, only learned how to make the best of her life in the worst of ways, makes me hope for your girl. She is outraged. That is a good thing, and she keeps going, trying to understand. How difficult that she must decipher why it is so horrible to her own self, and so easy to do because those she is involved with carry on without consequence.. Hope to keep up on this, and go back also..Nice job..
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Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Thank you so much for your detailed critique. Yes, the subject is difficult but I felt it was necessary to speak about what it was like 60 years ago. Your comment that I am outraged is perceptive...it was my strongest defense mechanism. Thank you for your high rating.
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You are welcome. I enjoy your work and your clean emotional descriptions. I will be back..