CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from K-Patrick
You are an awesome pen pusher. Well beyond my humble comprehension. This poem is extremely touching and I hesitate to think of how it came to mind.
Couple of questions:
-- (Who wanders the streets day and night) if you changed out the wanders for 'roams' or 'lives' would it flow any better.
---(And had to create my new fate) As you mentioned there are many reason for the homeless, 'create' is not something attainable. Possibly 'control' may have worked better.
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You are an awesome pen pusher. Well beyond my humble comprehension. This poem is extremely touching and I hesitate to think of how it came to mind.
Couple of questions:
-- (Who wanders the streets day and night) if you changed out the wanders for 'roams' or 'lives' would it flow any better.
---(And had to create my new fate) As you mentioned there are many reason for the homeless, 'create' is not something attainable. Possibly 'control' may have worked better.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
Comment from Just2Write
The stories of vagrants would fill many a book. The reasons that the street has become their home is so varied. I liked how you told the story of one of them. It is so true, any one of us could take her place, at any time. None of us is immune. Rose.
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The stories of vagrants would fill many a book. The reasons that the street has become their home is so varied. I liked how you told the story of one of them. It is so true, any one of us could take her place, at any time. None of us is immune. Rose.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
Comment from justmade
People go through things and it is quite sad when we quickly jump into conclusions on -at times judge- what might have happened. This was well written for me.
Much love,
Justmade.
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People go through things and it is quite sad when we quickly jump into conclusions on -at times judge- what might have happened. This was well written for me.
Much love,
Justmade.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
I am putting a work together about the homeless here in San Diego. Their stories vary as you note. Ex., Ruth, who is 50 years old, is the daughter of a war hero who is buried in Arlington. Her son is a straight A student and is trying to earn a scholarship in mechanical engineering. Story is much more involved and deeper, but looking at her sitting on a corner with her cart next to her, you would never imagine this.
Dave
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I am putting a work together about the homeless here in San Diego. Their stories vary as you note. Ex., Ruth, who is 50 years old, is the daughter of a war hero who is buried in Arlington. Her son is a straight A student and is trying to earn a scholarship in mechanical engineering. Story is much more involved and deeper, but looking at her sitting on a corner with her cart next to her, you would never imagine this.
Dave
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
Comment from Paradox Tremors
My hat is off to ya -- most people don't realize just how close the are to being homeless. Times are getting tougher and tougher. A good write my friend.
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My hat is off to ya -- most people don't realize just how close the are to being homeless. Times are getting tougher and tougher. A good write my friend.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from Carol D Parker
Thank you for this. My daughter is homeless, and it tortures me all the time. Your poem is so full of understanding. The rhyme is great, the words are direct and clear, making it easy to read and uunderstand. I love the last verse so much. Bless you for writing it. I hope s lot of folks get to read it.
Delora
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Thank you for this. My daughter is homeless, and it tortures me all the time. Your poem is so full of understanding. The rhyme is great, the words are direct and clear, making it easy to read and uunderstand. I love the last verse so much. Bless you for writing it. I hope s lot of folks get to read it.
Delora
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sue...in my work in the hospital I came in contact and interviewed many homeless people. Both men and women. Some of the stories they told were unimaginable and very sad. Not one of them chose to live in the streets but many found themselves there due to dire circumstances. Your poem address that very well. Unless we know why the man has no shoes we should not fault him for going bare footed. A good poem that tugs at the heart.....blessings....chey
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Hi Sue...in my work in the hospital I came in contact and interviewed many homeless people. Both men and women. Some of the stories they told were unimaginable and very sad. Not one of them chose to live in the streets but many found themselves there due to dire circumstances. Your poem address that very well. Unless we know why the man has no shoes we should not fault him for going bare footed. A good poem that tugs at the heart.....blessings....chey
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from Hitcher
Quite sad and unforgiving the world of the homeless, they come from many social backgrounds from the once were rich to the always been poor and I agree it could happen to anyone and not enough is done to help these people. Great offering Sue.
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Quite sad and unforgiving the world of the homeless, they come from many social backgrounds from the once were rich to the always been poor and I agree it could happen to anyone and not enough is done to help these people. Great offering Sue.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from mushroom
how right you are, it could happen tomorrow for so many of us especially in this econimic climate, lose your job, lose your house and before you know it you're on the streets just like the lady in the picture, carrying all your worldly goods, this poem hits home
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how right you are, it could happen tomorrow for so many of us especially in this econimic climate, lose your job, lose your house and before you know it you're on the streets just like the lady in the picture, carrying all your worldly goods, this poem hits home
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from SteveI
Never be to quick to judge and never judge until you have walked a mile in another man's shoes. Your poem was very special and it should be a responisibilty for every person to read periodically and recall that we control nothing in life and that control is an illusion.
I felt sorry for myself because I had no shoes, util I met a man who had no feet.
Another great piece of writing and thought provoking words.
Steve!
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Never be to quick to judge and never judge until you have walked a mile in another man's shoes. Your poem was very special and it should be a responisibilty for every person to read periodically and recall that we control nothing in life and that control is an illusion.
I felt sorry for myself because I had no shoes, util I met a man who had no feet.
Another great piece of writing and thought provoking words.
Steve!
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009