Oh, Oh, Orange Sunflower
The tantalizing mix of the sunflowers in perfume.3 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
organically origin is tripping me up a little - doesn't seem like an adverb should be describing a noun - organically orange would work better. I'm not sure what bio is doing there either - maybe I am just reading something wrong - I will be happy to rerate this if you either explain it to me or you change something around - just let me know! :-)
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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organically origin is tripping me up a little - doesn't seem like an adverb should be describing a noun - organically orange would work better. I'm not sure what bio is doing there either - maybe I am just reading something wrong - I will be happy to rerate this if you either explain it to me or you change something around - just let me know! :-)
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Comment from MsRefusenik
This short poem about my favorite flower is so orange it made my mouth pucker. I enjoyed this zesty poem and its lovely accompanying picture. Thanks for sharing it.
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This short poem about my favorite flower is so orange it made my mouth pucker. I enjoyed this zesty poem and its lovely accompanying picture. Thanks for sharing it.
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Comment from Firefly54
organically
Origin orange bio
Orange blossom scents
The font colour is really quite hard to read on the orange, I suggest you change it. I'm not sure about those first two lines.. should be organic origin really. I wonder if you could use something like "organic and pure". I good idea tough, and a love picture for your haiku. I'll drop back and reread/rate if you decide to edit
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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organically
Origin orange bio
Orange blossom scents
The font colour is really quite hard to read on the orange, I suggest you change it. I'm not sure about those first two lines.. should be organic origin really. I wonder if you could use something like "organic and pure". I good idea tough, and a love picture for your haiku. I'll drop back and reread/rate if you decide to edit
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Humble Thanks