A Leaf on the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "God Doesn't Care"Autobiography of abuse
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Comment from Aspiring2Write
God does care for people. The worldview of this person that is shown here is perfection. Even a hundred Hail Marys could not pay the price of her pain. Only Jesus can satisfy her pain and give her comfort. I urge you to consider the grace and love of God. Look in the Bible in john 3:16-17 and you will find your answer. Wish you the best in your writing.
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God does care for people. The worldview of this person that is shown here is perfection. Even a hundred Hail Marys could not pay the price of her pain. Only Jesus can satisfy her pain and give her comfort. I urge you to consider the grace and love of God. Look in the Bible in john 3:16-17 and you will find your answer. Wish you the best in your writing.
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Comment Written 06-Nov-2021
Comment from medicnate
Now we know he was not just focused on one sister, but both. This chapter is heart breaking, to see that there was absolutely no where for her to turn, gut wrenches me. Great writing. I would give six stars, but I'm out.
~medicnate~
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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Now we know he was not just focused on one sister, but both. This chapter is heart breaking, to see that there was absolutely no where for her to turn, gut wrenches me. Great writing. I would give six stars, but I'm out.
~medicnate~
Comment Written 04-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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Thanks. A vertual 6 is a good as the real thing.
Comment from Lois Delaney
This again is so very sad. The painting is good. I can relate to some of the things you are speaking of. Like God not seeming to hear when you need Him the most.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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This again is so very sad. The painting is good. I can relate to some of the things you are speaking of. Like God not seeming to hear when you need Him the most.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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Thank you. I sincerely appreciate your comments.
Comment from Stacey Lynne Wells
There are a lot of times in our lives that we feel God doesn't care. There have been several occasions where I felt that way. But the key is to remember that he does care. Somethings take time. Believe me God knows what your Dad has been doing and your Dad will pay for it later. But until then, keep praying. Good luck to you.
Rachel
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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There are a lot of times in our lives that we feel God doesn't care. There have been several occasions where I felt that way. But the key is to remember that he does care. Somethings take time. Believe me God knows what your Dad has been doing and your Dad will pay for it later. But until then, keep praying. Good luck to you.
Rachel
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Thank you. I agree completely. Sadly children are more vulnerable and filled with doubt. Again, thank you for your high rating.
Comment from littlewriter50
Wow. The writing continues to be powerful and concise. Your descriptions of the adult reactions and your sister's reactions ring true. How sad and lonely to believe God didn't care, but how understandable.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2009
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Wow. The writing continues to be powerful and concise. Your descriptions of the adult reactions and your sister's reactions ring true. How sad and lonely to believe God didn't care, but how understandable.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your kind words. I truly value your opinion.
Comment from jodeecee
This is another very powerful chapter, how you ask the star/ your sister to ask god to help, very real, touching. These typos mostly commas are only suggestions, I don't think they would hurt, if not there.
Father Damien'/s/
It hurt my feelings that God ignored my pleas for help/,/ yet expected me to ask /for/ his forgiveness for something as trivial as losing my temper.
I did not want to go into the house/,/ /so/ I climbed up onto the roof of the chicken pen so I could think about what had just happened without any interruptions.
I told myself that if daddy focused his attention on her/,/ he would stop bothering me.
I /ever/I/ wanted to talk to her, all I had to do was look for her in the night sky.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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This is another very powerful chapter, how you ask the star/ your sister to ask god to help, very real, touching. These typos mostly commas are only suggestions, I don't think they would hurt, if not there.
Father Damien'/s/
It hurt my feelings that God ignored my pleas for help/,/ yet expected me to ask /for/ his forgiveness for something as trivial as losing my temper.
I did not want to go into the house/,/ /so/ I climbed up onto the roof of the chicken pen so I could think about what had just happened without any interruptions.
I told myself that if daddy focused his attention on her/,/ he would stop bothering me.
I /ever/I/ wanted to talk to her, all I had to do was look for her in the night sky.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Again, thank you so very much for the suggestions and your eye for detail. I do appreciate your opinion.
Comment from WRITER1
Another interesting piece, I don't like the nun I think she is a bit of a bitch. I have a friend who attended catholic school and she said there are a lot of them. You did a good job on this piece.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009
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Another interesting piece, I don't like the nun I think she is a bit of a bitch. I have a friend who attended catholic school and she said there are a lot of them. You did a good job on this piece.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009
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Thanks. Clearly, I didn't like her either.
Comment from laurelp
Such sadness, such a tragedy. I don't know how to explain the disgust I feel for the situation you were put in. I can only hope that somehow, you found healing. That you realized you were a child and unable to stop what had happened.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009
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Such sadness, such a tragedy. I don't know how to explain the disgust I feel for the situation you were put in. I can only hope that somehow, you found healing. That you realized you were a child and unable to stop what had happened.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009
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Thank you so very much for your kind words. I am currently 63 and obviously survived. I can only hope my book helps others who faced a similar experience.
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As far as age goes, I am only about 1 1/2 years behind you. I have been fortunate, in that no one every hurt me. I had one uncle/cousin that scared me enough to stay away from him. About 20 years later I was talking to my cousin and she and I had similar feelings. When we told our mothers they were shocked. "He was such a nice man" was what we both heard. I just said "and a pervert." We were lucky, because nothing went beyond comments and induendoes. And that was enough to creep me out.
Comment from badaner
I went back to read another chapter, smurphgirl. What a desperately sad, but oh so well written chapter.
Now I know for sure that I have to start from the beginning.
'Going to confession provided me with absolutely no comfort whatsoever. Father Damien did not believe me and
it was quite clear to me that God was too busy to listen to my prayers. (It hurt my feelings that God ignored my pleas for help yet expected me to ask for his forgiveness for something as trivial as losing my temper).
(Apparently, as far as God was concerned my problems were insignificant and did not warrant a response). I said the five Hail Marys, but before leaving church (I informed God I had no intention whatsoever of saying three rosaries a day for telling the truth.)
Brilliant! Brilliant! Brilliant!
A correction:
Mommy also said Diane was my guardian angel and (if I when ever I wanted to talk to her), all I had to do was look for her in the night sky.
That sentence is a bit jumbled.
badaner
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009
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I went back to read another chapter, smurphgirl. What a desperately sad, but oh so well written chapter.
Now I know for sure that I have to start from the beginning.
'Going to confession provided me with absolutely no comfort whatsoever. Father Damien did not believe me and
it was quite clear to me that God was too busy to listen to my prayers. (It hurt my feelings that God ignored my pleas for help yet expected me to ask for his forgiveness for something as trivial as losing my temper).
(Apparently, as far as God was concerned my problems were insignificant and did not warrant a response). I said the five Hail Marys, but before leaving church (I informed God I had no intention whatsoever of saying three rosaries a day for telling the truth.)
Brilliant! Brilliant! Brilliant!
A correction:
Mommy also said Diane was my guardian angel and (if I when ever I wanted to talk to her), all I had to do was look for her in the night sky.
That sentence is a bit jumbled.
badaner
Comment Written 07-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your kind words. I will take a look at the sentence and see where I can improve it.
Comment from jojosug
Yet another raw and moving chapter. I understand the offering up of a sibling in our place, I did it and then he committed suicide. It has taken me half a lifetime to absolve myself of the guilt. I really hope you have managed it. You write beautifully and so clearly capture the moment.
Jo
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009
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Yet another raw and moving chapter. I understand the offering up of a sibling in our place, I did it and then he committed suicide. It has taken me half a lifetime to absolve myself of the guilt. I really hope you have managed it. You write beautifully and so clearly capture the moment.
Jo
Comment Written 07-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009
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Thank you. Guilt clutters our mind and makes an aready confusing situation worse, especially for a child.