CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 62 "A Summer Fling"A collection of poetry
29 total reviews
Comment from LYLE
Sixteezkid,
This is a very clever haiku. I love the idea of the "bedroom eyes" which I think is very original in
describing the tail of the peacock. That high pitched cry
sent my uncle, brother, and I running through an orange grove on night, because it sounded like a woman screaming "Rape." Because it was mating season, perhaps that was what the scream really was:)
Fondly, Lyle
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Sixteezkid,
This is a very clever haiku. I love the idea of the "bedroom eyes" which I think is very original in
describing the tail of the peacock. That high pitched cry
sent my uncle, brother, and I running through an orange grove on night, because it sounded like a woman screaming "Rape." Because it was mating season, perhaps that was what the scream really was:)
Fondly, Lyle
Comment Written 24-Mar-2009
Comment from Hitcher
Feathered bedroom eyes! Loved that line friend, especially with the accompanying artwork, made me smile, I'm catching up because I've been away for three days so you'll have to excuse me for being so far behind, read you soon!
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Feathered bedroom eyes! Loved that line friend, especially with the accompanying artwork, made me smile, I'm catching up because I've been away for three days so you'll have to excuse me for being so far behind, read you soon!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
Comment from grassroots08
Okay, you win, I give up. LOL This was simply adorable (And I seldom, if ever, use that word). This is very romantic and classy rolled into one, cheers, bravo, kudos to you, my writer friend. Don
P.S. Please don't complain about the six, you deserve it.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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Okay, you win, I give up. LOL This was simply adorable (And I seldom, if ever, use that word). This is very romantic and classy rolled into one, cheers, bravo, kudos to you, my writer friend. Don
P.S. Please don't complain about the six, you deserve it.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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Awwwww...."adorable"..... didn't you ever try to resist going all soft like a girlie-girl on this one! HA!!!
So glad this touched your romantic side! I've never had a more lovely review on a haiku. I'm understanding more and more how full a haiku can be with those few words.
Thank you, Don, for all your wonderful compliments and your highest review. It has encouraged me even more. And I mean that!!
Warmest regards,
Sue
Comment from findingmyroom
How did I miss this one? Very nice haiku, great color and artwork choices. "August" is an excellent descriptor, and thanks for the notes about the behavior of peacocks.
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How did I miss this one? Very nice haiku, great color and artwork choices. "August" is an excellent descriptor, and thanks for the notes about the behavior of peacocks.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
Comment from dportwood
Impressive is a good word for the peacock and his mating call will wake the neighbors. You have written a good contest entry and I wish you well.
Duane
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Impressive is a good word for the peacock and his mating call will wake the neighbors. You have written a good contest entry and I wish you well.
Duane
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Sixteezkid ....
I compliment you on the choice and use of the word
'august' which is so cleverly placed that either of its meanings can apply.
As this is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
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Hullo Sixteezkid ....
I compliment you on the choice and use of the word
'august' which is so cleverly placed that either of its meanings can apply.
As this is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2009
Comment from LadyBrendragon
The proud peacock strutting around flashing his beautiful feathers and he tries to entice a mate. Perfect picture for your poem and keeps to the Haiku format. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009
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The proud peacock strutting around flashing his beautiful feathers and he tries to entice a mate. Perfect picture for your poem and keeps to the Haiku format. Nicely done.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009
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LadyBrendragon, thank you very much for reading and for your kind review. With regards, Sue
Comment from MercyWrites
I never thought of the peacock as having feathered bedroom eyes, but now that you mentioned it, it does. I love poems about that proud majestic peacock, and I like your intake on that beatiful bird. I found your author notes interesting.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009
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I never thought of the peacock as having feathered bedroom eyes, but now that you mentioned it, it does. I love poems about that proud majestic peacock, and I like your intake on that beatiful bird. I found your author notes interesting.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009
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MercyWrites, It's amazing what nature will do in order to procreate and keep the species going. The big fan sure would be enticing to the female! Thanks for your very kind review. Glad you enjoyed this piece. With regards, Sue
Comment from rmdelta
nicely written Sue. Very strong and with great desriptives throughout the work. An enjoyabole read and quite easy for even me to understand. Well done, my friend.
Reggie
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2009
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nicely written Sue. Very strong and with great desriptives throughout the work. An enjoyabole read and quite easy for even me to understand. Well done, my friend.
Reggie
Comment Written 06-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2009
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In the homocide detective world, you had to put a lot of clues together. Don't you find it frustrating that once in awhile you come across a haiku that makes you have to put your badge on again? LOL!!! Glad this one didn't. Thanks much for the review, Reg. :-) Sue
Comment from mmichelle97219
Now this one is very pretty. I thought it expressive, vivid, and it works both on the literal and metaphorical levels. Nice one. Good luck in the voting booth.
Michelle
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009
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Now this one is very pretty. I thought it expressive, vivid, and it works both on the literal and metaphorical levels. Nice one. Good luck in the voting booth.
Michelle
Comment Written 06-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009
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Michelle, so glad you liked this haiku. Thank you for your kind compliments and review. With regards, Sue