Comment from John A Catania

Average

This story eats my inner soul as i am a relaist and know things like this truely happen.I also see that people sometimes write to get things off their mind so they can cope. I can only pray they seek forgiveness in the lord as this is a heart breaking tale of how child abuse reaches its worst. God bless me and my current thoughts for I know what i do.

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 Comment Written 31-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Dec-2017

Thanks. I am pleased this moved you.

Comment from Jade Lawson

Excellent

Indeed Valerie is starting to realize that what her father is been doing to her it is not what normal dads would do to their children. She can't seem him in the same way she did anymore and feels disgusted with his actions.

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013

This is where my world begins to fall apart.

Comment from maxic59

Excellent

I'm glad this one is a small chapter. Your writing describes and shows how you felt.
Your last chapter was so full of fun and laughter, but realty is always there for you.
onya mate :)
cheers max

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009

Thanks. I didn't think I needed to dwell on it.

Comment from medicnate

Excellent

A very short, yet powerful chapter. We now know just what kind of man daddy is and we would like to reach in through the computer and castrate him. oops, sorry, got carried away. I shall read on. Great writing here. I didn't see any problems.

~medicnate~

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009

Thanks. Just a note, I did all the illustrations for this book too. I don't plan on including them if I publish, but wanted to use them on this site.

reply by medicnate on 04-Apr-2009

Speaking of illustrations. I like your illustration of the little girl in the window. Read my short story Lexie and the Star Princess. If you think you could illustrate that, I would love to collaborate with you and see if we could get it published as a children's book. Just a thought.

~medicnate~

Comment from Lois Delaney

Excellent

I will continue to read. This is so sad. I can't imagine it. My father was so good to me, however, I do worry about how one blocks out things. Why I worry about it, I have no idea.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009

Thank you for your kind words. Children find unique ways to cope when they have no one to direct them. Often this coping mechinism continues throughout their lives. I am pleased you want to read more, despite the difficult subject. Thank you for your high rating.

Comment from Stacey Lynne Wells

Excellent

Well, what your Dad is doing is wrong. Something needs to be done about it. I wish the best of luck to you. I hope the situation has been resolved. I can't wait to read more. Keep writing!

Rachel

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009

I am amazed at your stamina...you've read a lot. Thanks for your comments and words of encouragemet. They are sincerely appreciated.

Comment from jodeecee

Excellent

"Good morning sweetie/./" I did not respond.

Suddenly, /D/daddy appeared in the doorway.
Again 'suddenly' do a search with your processing software for the word, it will highlight it through out your document, then you can mix it up a bit, like all of a sudden, right away, out of nowhere, materialized, eh-
anyway, on to the next,

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009

I was recently told that Mommy and Daddy require capitalization becuse they are used as "names". I will research this to determine if this is in fact true. Thanks for the suggestion to seach for the word "suddenly"...I know I use it too much. Thank you for your support and considerable effort you have show for my book.

Comment from laurelp

Excellent

A shorter chapter this time. Much more serious. Very well done. You denote her disgust very well. I have never understood people like your father and your neighbor. Hurting a child is beyond my understanding. I find it a miracle that you can write about it so many years later.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009

Again, thank you for your kind words. For me, writing was a form of therapy. Difficult, but necessary.

Comment from DecrepitOldBag

Good

Painful as it would have been, you could have used your amazing descriptive talents a bit more on this brief chapter. You have described your feelings extremely well though. Your writing imparts the vileness of what your father was doing to you, and your absolute rejection of it. I am sorry if I seem over critical here; don't be discouraged. All the best. Kat

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009

Thak you. I appreciate you opinion and will look over the chapter again. I value all suggstions. Again, thank you.

Comment from The Rivaling Mimic

Excellent

This was short and I liked that most about it. I confess I'm not always up to reading longer pieces but do sop to see what's in store. This I enjoyed. Good post.

The Rivaling Mimic

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009

Thank you. Yes, many of my chapters are unfortunately long.