A Leaf on the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Secrets"Autobiography of abuse
18 total reviews
Comment from Siouxsun
"No one ever keeps a secret so well as a child." SO TRUE
--Victor Hugo
1. You have a displaced "I" after the background information.
Now enters the sick feeling in my stomach.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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"No one ever keeps a secret so well as a child." SO TRUE
--Victor Hugo
1. You have a displaced "I" after the background information.
Now enters the sick feeling in my stomach.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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I was born at a time when everything within the home was a secret...the family never talked about anything that might even remotely suggest there might be a problem.
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So was I and there were a lot of secrets!
Comment from Jade Lawson
Valerie and her mother seem to have a good relationship and she hates school like a few girls do.
That's horrible what her father told her. that's why she was so afraid to go to school alone.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Valerie and her mother seem to have a good relationship and she hates school like a few girls do.
That's horrible what her father told her. that's why she was so afraid to go to school alone.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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It was actually my father that told me the stories.
Comment from Gungalo
Boy I would say she was really worried about it and late for school every day because of it. Poor little tyke, if only she had been left alone. Sigh.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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Boy I would say she was really worried about it and late for school every day because of it. Poor little tyke, if only she had been left alone. Sigh.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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I was a very serious and frightened child. I felt like a stranger in my own home.
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I can see why too.
Comment from jgirlie152
This amazes me, the fact that you have kept secrets from everyone at such a young age. Oh, I get it alright. But in so many other ways you were such a nice little girl, and no
one could get you to tell whatever you didn't want them to know. A big load for a little girl. This is quite a story you are telling.
Joan
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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This amazes me, the fact that you have kept secrets from everyone at such a young age. Oh, I get it alright. But in so many other ways you were such a nice little girl, and no
one could get you to tell whatever you didn't want them to know. A big load for a little girl. This is quite a story you are telling.
Joan
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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I had to teach myself what to do and as a child I was easily swayed by adults. I felt like I was all alone in a very big world filled with nothing but adults.
Comment from Summer Falls
You gave me chills when I read about the horrible scare tactics your father used to keep the horrible secret. I know you did not say the secret was horrible...but I can tell. So you did a fine job of that.
This is so well written. The older sister is so cold, and I don't understand why. I love how mother wakes with a tickle.
I should be going to bed, but I cannot stop reading. Okay... one more chapter. lol.
Summer
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2009
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You gave me chills when I read about the horrible scare tactics your father used to keep the horrible secret. I know you did not say the secret was horrible...but I can tell. So you did a fine job of that.
This is so well written. The older sister is so cold, and I don't understand why. I love how mother wakes with a tickle.
I should be going to bed, but I cannot stop reading. Okay... one more chapter. lol.
Summer
Comment Written 16-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2009
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Thanks. I am glad you liked this chapter...if like is the correct word. Yes, my older sister was very cold and indiferent. I go into this in later chapters.
Comment from maxic59
Children minds are tainted at such a young age. The adult mind / mouth can do so much dammage.
your paintings are excellent
Well done
onya mate:)
cheers max
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Children minds are tainted at such a young age. The adult mind / mouth can do so much dammage.
your paintings are excellent
Well done
onya mate:)
cheers max
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Thanks. Next to writing, painting is my second passion.
Comment from c_lucas
Adults can become wrapped up in their false ideas of authority. Evil adults can easily mold the mind of the young to benefit themselves.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Adults can become wrapped up in their false ideas of authority. Evil adults can easily mold the mind of the young to benefit themselves.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Very true. Children are literally at the mercey of the adults.
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Even well meaning adults can be cruel.
Comment from medicnate
Another great chapter. Here we start to learn just who daddy is. His reign of terror seems to be beginning. I fear the worst.
ominously ( you used this word a couple of times in close paragraphs. Not that I care, It's just something I noticed.)
Great job here.
~medicnate~
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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Another great chapter. Here we start to learn just who daddy is. His reign of terror seems to be beginning. I fear the worst.
ominously ( you used this word a couple of times in close paragraphs. Not that I care, It's just something I noticed.)
Great job here.
~medicnate~
Comment Written 04-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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Thanks for the high review and I'll take a look at the chapter to see if I can find another work fo ominously....
Comment from Lois Delaney
This is so sad. I can't even imagine a man doing this to his own child.
I found one itsy nit.
tears were starting to well up (the second t is missing)
I will continue, but my heart is already breaking.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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This is so sad. I can't even imagine a man doing this to his own child.
I found one itsy nit.
tears were starting to well up (the second t is missing)
I will continue, but my heart is already breaking.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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Keep in mind, I survived. Sadly, it is a lifelong battle but without giving away any secrets, it has a good ending.
Comment from Stacey Lynne Wells
Oooooo, I do not like Sister Superior. If I were you, I would have called her Snot Nose Inferior! LOL! That's what she is. Well, good chapter. I'll be looking forward to read what happens next. I really like how you start out and then unfold the life journey you had. Best of luck to you in your venture, and Boooooooo to Sister Superior!
Rachel
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Oooooo, I do not like Sister Superior. If I were you, I would have called her Snot Nose Inferior! LOL! That's what she is. Well, good chapter. I'll be looking forward to read what happens next. I really like how you start out and then unfold the life journey you had. Best of luck to you in your venture, and Boooooooo to Sister Superior!
Rachel
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Thank you. I am pleased you like it.