CSP: A Collection of Poems
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37 total reviews
Comment from Firefly54
You've been very busy... This is an ideal subject for a rictameter, and you've done it very well. Easy and pleasant to read with a very nice flow
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You've been very busy... This is an ideal subject for a rictameter, and you've done it very well. Easy and pleasant to read with a very nice flow
Comment Written 02-Feb-2009
Comment from malachi1206
Penance the cornerstone of forgiveness great content couldn't agree more not overly familiar with the form but this was an excellent write malachi1206
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Penance the cornerstone of forgiveness great content couldn't agree more not overly familiar with the form but this was an excellent write malachi1206
Comment Written 02-Feb-2009
Comment from darrenchelseafan86
Another deep poem.
I enjoy reading your work, They are very clever.
I like that fact that to release ones guilt and shame, you would need to commit acts that would bring on guilt and shame.
A good discussion point would be, What has the character in the poem done to seek penance.
thanks for the read.
Darren
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2009
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Another deep poem.
I enjoy reading your work, They are very clever.
I like that fact that to release ones guilt and shame, you would need to commit acts that would bring on guilt and shame.
A good discussion point would be, What has the character in the poem done to seek penance.
thanks for the read.
Darren
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2009
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You lost me when you said, "I like that fact that to release ones guilt and shame, you would need to commit acts that would bring on guilt and shame." Maybe it's because writing on that like this is more difficult to interpret. One needs to undergo self-examination about what they had done wrong and serve penance to the aggrieved (the party in which they did wrong to - whether intentionally or not). That way they can release their guilt, knowing they acknowledged it and either asked for forgiveness or offered restitution. Is that how you interpreted it? As that is what was meant. There is no single character in this poem. It is just about the definition of penance and what the outcome of it can be. So that I know you did not misunderstand the meaning, please clarify a bit more about your comment. Thanks very much for your excellent review. Always welcomed and appreciated. Sue
Comment from Curt Mongold
I think you really captured the meaning of penance in this work cuz. It is a succinct and and telling description of how we can move on past our mistakes. I love the format, it really compliments the word use too.
Sincerely,
Curt
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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I think you really captured the meaning of penance in this work cuz. It is a succinct and and telling description of how we can move on past our mistakes. I love the format, it really compliments the word use too.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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Yes, I've fallen in love with this form and want to write a few more. Want to stick to the theme of virtues, attributes, etc. Thanks very much for your review. Always respect them. Sue
Comment from Oatmeal
Sixteezkid,
The theme was good. The descriptive words you chose were very good. Telling things very plain and simple. Formatting was well done.
There were no errors to be found.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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Sixteezkid,
The theme was good. The descriptive words you chose were very good. Telling things very plain and simple. Formatting was well done.
There were no errors to be found.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
Comment from chaswriter
Sue - Nicely crafted poem of humility and righting those wrongs done in the past. Still don't know how you can write in such a tightly structured format. Well done. Charlie
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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Sue - Nicely crafted poem of humility and righting those wrongs done in the past. Still don't know how you can write in such a tightly structured format. Well done. Charlie
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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I didn't know I could write anything before November. The formats are a great teaching tool to learn to cull unnecessary words. Something that can help any writer. Hone, hone, hone! HA! Thanks for your review, Charlie. Always, Sue
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
You did a wonderful job with the structure of this poem--keeping within form--while presenting a complete message. I found no errors. Good job.
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You did a wonderful job with the structure of this poem--keeping within form--while presenting a complete message. I found no errors. Good job.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
Comment from rhymelord
This form of writing is new to me and I really have to work at it. That said, I can appreciate the skill required to hold, not only the syllable count, but also to maintain a metre that does not jar and still present an integrated whole.
Congratulations.
Regards
Reg
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This form of writing is new to me and I really have to work at it. That said, I can appreciate the skill required to hold, not only the syllable count, but also to maintain a metre that does not jar and still present an integrated whole.
Congratulations.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
Comment from skye
Your poem is well crafted, saying so many true things in these short, well written lines.
I like the idea of penance, of sorrow for things gone wrong.
Well done.
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Your poem is well crafted, saying so many true things in these short, well written lines.
I like the idea of penance, of sorrow for things gone wrong.
Well done.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
Comment from Dreamdancer
Hello wonderful lady,
You have this form down to the letter! I like the message this write contains and would it be nice if the world could seek penance all at once... Awesome write my friend and thank you for sharing... Dreamdancer
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Hello wonderful lady,
You have this form down to the letter! I like the message this write contains and would it be nice if the world could seek penance all at once... Awesome write my friend and thank you for sharing... Dreamdancer
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009