CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 78 "I'm 5 and a half"A collection of poetry
38 total reviews
Comment from kristikim
Hello,
I am just not taking my rules into consideration for this contest, anymore. I feel a bit disrespected, but nonetheless...
I was too strict about the form, asking for rhyme and quatrains... when in the poem, from the voice of a child, I should have let it be free form, if desired.
Your poem is 44 lines, although the contest required a maximum of 32, which you quoted in your author's notes.
I will simply be more careful next time I write a contest.
I did enjoy your poem, and kept waiting for something horrific... I was very satisfied, at the end, that there was nothing - and you did seem to actually have a happy childhood!
Thank you for your entry,
kristikim
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Hello,
I am just not taking my rules into consideration for this contest, anymore. I feel a bit disrespected, but nonetheless...
I was too strict about the form, asking for rhyme and quatrains... when in the poem, from the voice of a child, I should have let it be free form, if desired.
Your poem is 44 lines, although the contest required a maximum of 32, which you quoted in your author's notes.
I will simply be more careful next time I write a contest.
I did enjoy your poem, and kept waiting for something horrific... I was very satisfied, at the end, that there was nothing - and you did seem to actually have a happy childhood!
Thank you for your entry,
kristikim
Comment Written 30-Jan-2009
Comment from TerryRodgers
I'm giving you five stars for your work. Excellent poem. It was enjoyable and understandable. The poem flowed well and the rhymes were correct. Great job.
Good luck in your writing.
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I'm giving you five stars for your work. Excellent poem. It was enjoyable and understandable. The poem flowed well and the rhymes were correct. Great job.
Good luck in your writing.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2009
Comment from shimmeringlights
Some nice experiences you shared in this poem about your childhood. Well written, tight rhyme, good meter and flow. Nothing to dilike, Good luck in the contest.
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Some nice experiences you shared in this poem about your childhood. Well written, tight rhyme, good meter and flow. Nothing to dilike, Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2009
Comment from bard owl
What a delightful poem. Your words fairly skip down the page! I don't know if this is autobiographical, but I hope it is. You describe a childhood that everyone should have - one they can remember with happiness. The rhythm and rhyme were flawless. This one gets my vote. Blessings to you and best of luck in the contest, Linda
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What a delightful poem. Your words fairly skip down the page! I don't know if this is autobiographical, but I hope it is. You describe a childhood that everyone should have - one they can remember with happiness. The rhythm and rhyme were flawless. This one gets my vote. Blessings to you and best of luck in the contest, Linda
Comment Written 29-Jan-2009
Comment from Nanny 6
Your child like prose was perfect for the contest. I enjoyed looking back with you, as I related to some of those incidences myself. Your poem made me smile. Good luck in the contest. Judy
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Your child like prose was perfect for the contest. I enjoyed looking back with you, as I related to some of those incidences myself. Your poem made me smile. Good luck in the contest. Judy
Comment Written 29-Jan-2009
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
Your poem is well written and is a pleasure to read. Barbie was my favorite doll, too. Wasn't she everybody's?! Good luck in the contest.
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Your poem is well written and is a pleasure to read. Barbie was my favorite doll, too. Wasn't she everybody's?! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2009
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a nice children's poem. The diction is appropriate for the little ones. The rhymes are good, the rhythm too. I can only wish you luck in the contest. kudos
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This is a nice children's poem. The diction is appropriate for the little ones. The rhymes are good, the rhythm too. I can only wish you luck in the contest. kudos
Comment Written 29-Jan-2009
Comment from Nicnac
This is CHARMING!
What a delightful poem. I love the child's point of view.
The Ethop fables are so fun <-- this put a huge smile on my face. Adorable! Ethop LOL Fun children's language.
Your cute poem flows smoothly and has a joyous, lighthearted feel. It was quite enjoyable to read.
Best wishes in the contest.
~Nic
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This is CHARMING!
What a delightful poem. I love the child's point of view.
The Ethop fables are so fun <-- this put a huge smile on my face. Adorable! Ethop LOL Fun children's language.
Your cute poem flows smoothly and has a joyous, lighthearted feel. It was quite enjoyable to read.
Best wishes in the contest.
~Nic
Comment Written 29-Jan-2009
Comment from FredCollingwood
If I keep reviewing you, you're going to think I like your poetry. This is awesome. It brought me back in time. Great job.
Fred
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If I keep reviewing you, you're going to think I like your poetry. This is awesome. It brought me back in time. Great job.
Fred
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I liked your poem but I'm terrified of lightning bugs so that was something that I would have hated if I would have been you. Anyways, good luck in the contest
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I liked your poem but I'm terrified of lightning bugs so that was something that I would have hated if I would have been you. Anyways, good luck in the contest
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009