The 18th Hole
Contest prompt -- rhymed poem life changing event35 total reviews
Comment from Quakergirl
im sad more people dont give you 6 star ratings. i think your poem definently deserves them. i love it (as you can tell). i dont have a single complaint. it is beautiful.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2011
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im sad more people dont give you 6 star ratings. i think your poem definently deserves them. i love it (as you can tell). i dont have a single complaint. it is beautiful.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2011
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Thank you very much. You are so generous and kind. I really appreciate your very kind words and gift of six.
Comment from mmichelle97219
it is an interesting metre, and in this poem the loose rhyme works well. Overall a good read. Good luck in the voting booth.
happy writing.
Michelle
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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it is an interesting metre, and in this poem the loose rhyme works well. Overall a good read. Good luck in the voting booth.
happy writing.
Michelle
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Thank you so much for the kind review.
Comment from fictionwriter
Truely wonderful. I'm not a golfer and I hope that horses are waiting for me. This poem flowed really well and painted the perfect picture of the avid golfer. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Truely wonderful. I'm not a golfer and I hope that horses are waiting for me. This poem flowed really well and painted the perfect picture of the avid golfer. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Thank you so much for the kind and thoughtful comments and review.
Comment from Hitcher
I liked your upbeat approach to death skye, faith in an afterlife can give that to a person. Sorry but I'm not much of a golfer myself but can see that you love it and think you did a great job with your poem, it was a real pleasure to read. I have had a go but kinda always got stuck at the 19th hole and just ended up watching, ha ha.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2009
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I liked your upbeat approach to death skye, faith in an afterlife can give that to a person. Sorry but I'm not much of a golfer myself but can see that you love it and think you did a great job with your poem, it was a real pleasure to read. I have had a go but kinda always got stuck at the 19th hole and just ended up watching, ha ha.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2009
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Thank you very much. I do not golf at all, but took the brothers when they were young to practice. I did not even know about the 19th hole until this week. LOL
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Then the quality of your poem is even better friend, i'll hang out with you at the 19th hole anytime friend, ha ha.
Comment from chaswriter
skye - This is a beautiful tribute to a golfer who has gone to the ultimate fairway. I was surprised that you did not title this 'The 19th Hole'. Kind of seems appropriate. I enjoyed it. Charlie
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2009
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skye - This is a beautiful tribute to a golfer who has gone to the ultimate fairway. I was surprised that you did not title this 'The 19th Hole'. Kind of seems appropriate. I enjoyed it. Charlie
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2009
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Thank you very much. I did not know about the 19th hole... I am not a golfer, but he was. LOL
Comment from grassroots08
This was a warmly told personal poem. I was an interesting way to look at life in the hear after. I enjoyed your lines. No nits do I see. Cheers, Don
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2009
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This was a warmly told personal poem. I was an interesting way to look at life in the hear after. I enjoyed your lines. No nits do I see. Cheers, Don
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2009
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Thanks for stopping by and giving such kind comments. I appreciate it very much.
Comment from bard owl
What an upbeat look at death. Thank you for entering the contest, by the way. This is an excellent entry. The death of a loved one always changes life forever. But rather than being a sadness, death will eventually be a reunion of kindred souls. Excellent imagery. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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What an upbeat look at death. Thank you for entering the contest, by the way. This is an excellent entry. The death of a loved one always changes life forever. But rather than being a sadness, death will eventually be a reunion of kindred souls. Excellent imagery. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Thank you very much for the kind and thoughtful review. It was a really good contest.
Comment from dportwood
I like this nicely rhymed poem and the message of hope to meet again in the fairway in the sky. I wish you well in the contest.
Duane
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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I like this nicely rhymed poem and the message of hope to meet again in the fairway in the sky. I wish you well in the contest.
Duane
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Thank you very much for another wonderful review.
Comment from AlvinTEthington
A touching poem about heaven being doing what we enjoyed the most on earth. Good execution of the abab rhyme scheme. However, the irregular meter threw me off. I know you don't call it any metered form, but I think it would be stronger in ballad form (8/6/8/6 iambic meter.) That's just a personal preference, though I did find some off-meter jarring. Good juxtaposition of picture and poem.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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A touching poem about heaven being doing what we enjoyed the most on earth. Good execution of the abab rhyme scheme. However, the irregular meter threw me off. I know you don't call it any metered form, but I think it would be stronger in ballad form (8/6/8/6 iambic meter.) That's just a personal preference, though I did find some off-meter jarring. Good juxtaposition of picture and poem.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Thanks for the encouraging and positive review. I will try to redo the meter. It is very hard for me to do.
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Who wrote this? One place it says "skye", whose profile I couldn't find, and the response is from Teri7. What's going on?
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Skye ... me... wrote this. Wonder what is going on.
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I don't know, but now your name does show in the directory. If you want to talk about this more, write me at AlvinTEthington@aol.com
The Private Message system on this site is not secure.
Comment from wierdgrace
oh what a way to say words to the one you love, I use to golf, if was the one thing my husband and I learned after the kids were gone, great poem and perfect for the contest. good luck, and well written as always.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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oh what a way to say words to the one you love, I use to golf, if was the one thing my husband and I learned after the kids were gone, great poem and perfect for the contest. good luck, and well written as always.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Thanks for the encouraging and positive review.
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always
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you are welcome
