CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 105 "Morning Glory"A collection of poetry
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Comment from jlsavell
Sixteezkid, you have manged to write a wonderful trilonet, Your depiction of the snow is beautifully painted with an artistic pen....best wishes on the contest..jlsavell
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Sixteezkid, you have manged to write a wonderful trilonet, Your depiction of the snow is beautifully painted with an artistic pen....best wishes on the contest..jlsavell
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Nice entry into the contest...somehow lessened the blow of our recent very cold weather and snow!!! lol. Good luck in the contest. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
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Nice entry into the contest...somehow lessened the blow of our recent very cold weather and snow!!! lol. Good luck in the contest. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
Comment Written 02-Feb-2009
Comment from Pen&Ink
Hi 60's kid!
Beyond the fact that I enjoyed reading your poem, I found the structure interesting. I've seen the usual sonnets with three quatrains and a couplet, or two sextets and a couplet, but I don't think I've ever seen four triplets and a couplet. Another thing I noticed was the rhyming of each line with its corresponding line in the other verses. Pretty tricky.
Ray
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Hi 60's kid!
Beyond the fact that I enjoyed reading your poem, I found the structure interesting. I've seen the usual sonnets with three quatrains and a couplet, or two sextets and a couplet, but I don't think I've ever seen four triplets and a couplet. Another thing I noticed was the rhyming of each line with its corresponding line in the other verses. Pretty tricky.
Ray
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
Comment from JoAnna Lee
Wonderfully done! Did the three lined verses need to rhyme too? I noticed your did... and very nicely, not forced. Great descriptions throughout.
Thanks for sharing,
I wish you well in the contest.
Donna
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Wonderfully done! Did the three lined verses need to rhyme too? I noticed your did... and very nicely, not forced. Great descriptions throughout.
Thanks for sharing,
I wish you well in the contest.
Donna
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
Comment from Josipher32
To me, this format was executed perfectly throughout. After careful consideration of all the rules of the format, I see you handled well the rhyming scheme, the correct number of lines and triplets, plus the ending rhyming couplet.The use of iambic tetrameter measure was also well done. If I had a sixer, I would award.
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To me, this format was executed perfectly throughout. After careful consideration of all the rules of the format, I see you handled well the rhyming scheme, the correct number of lines and triplets, plus the ending rhyming couplet.The use of iambic tetrameter measure was also well done. If I had a sixer, I would award.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
Comment from Showboat
Hi Six,
I love poems about snow. I love to see it frosting the trees and rooftops with thick layers of white. So peaceful.
Reminds me of days gone by when I lived in NYC. Today I live in Palm Springs, CA, 85 today, lovely smell of flowers and someone is mowing the lawn. The ying and the yang.
Hugs,
Gayle
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Hi Six,
I love poems about snow. I love to see it frosting the trees and rooftops with thick layers of white. So peaceful.
Reminds me of days gone by when I lived in NYC. Today I live in Palm Springs, CA, 85 today, lovely smell of flowers and someone is mowing the lawn. The ying and the yang.
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
Comment from DrCarter2001
Nicely written and you definitely fulfilled both the trilonnet form and the contest specifications. Nice imagery -- I could feel the snow under my feet and in my hands as I read it. Well done.
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Nicely written and you definitely fulfilled both the trilonnet form and the contest specifications. Nice imagery -- I could feel the snow under my feet and in my hands as I read it. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
Beautiful presentation; fits the contest rules very well; a well written Trilonnet and strong contest entry; good imagery too; best wishes in the voting booth!
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Beautiful presentation; fits the contest rules very well; a well written Trilonnet and strong contest entry; good imagery too; best wishes in the voting booth!
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
Comment from NightWriter
"Morning Glory" is one of the nicest poems I've read about a blizzard. Beautifully written and reads so smooth from beginning to end. Well done.
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"Morning Glory" is one of the nicest poems I've read about a blizzard. Beautifully written and reads so smooth from beginning to end. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
Comment from AlvinTEthington
The imagery in this is quite good and strong. Good use of simile ("like sculptures carved" and "like a cake.") Although I find this form somewhat contrived (which is no reflection on you, but on the person who invented the form), you execute it well. You follow one of the rhyme schemes well. Excellent juxtaposition of picture and poem.
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The imagery in this is quite good and strong. Good use of simile ("like sculptures carved" and "like a cake.") Although I find this form somewhat contrived (which is no reflection on you, but on the person who invented the form), you execute it well. You follow one of the rhyme schemes well. Excellent juxtaposition of picture and poem.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009