Comment from LadyBrendragon

Excellent

I love the image of the water flowing down the mountain creeks and this could also represent the flow of people, whose live run together, more and more people becoming one group, one community. That is what your poem makes me think of.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009

I do appreciate your fine review! Thank you!
Jan

Comment from RenieReader

Excellent

Breathtaking, Jani! I love the haiku message and the wonderful artwork that inspired it. Great job, my friend. You are becoming quite the expert in poetry. The images your work evokes are splendid. Good luck.

Hugs,
Renie

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009

Thank you so much for your comments.
Hugs,
Jan

Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman

Excellent

Oh this is lovely Jani, the title caught my eye; wondering why you didn't find a haiku contest to enter this one in :-) love it! Happy New Year to you and your family too :-)

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009

Thank you! :-) I'm a little tired of entering contests.
Hugs,
Jan

Comment from Dave M

Excellent

Jan,

This is an excellent haiku, and the picture you borrowed from Fan Art Review fits it perfectly. I couldn't find anything to criticize.

Dave M

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009

Thank you, Dave. Glad you enjoyed it.
Hugs,
Jan

Comment from Sue-z-Q

Excellent

Hi Jan:
I can understand why you find the picture inspiring. It's and interesting view, but those churning rapids look ferocious. Not the sort of spot where I'd want to be caught in a kayak.

Your haiku is well thought out and put together. I enjoyed reading it.

How is the kidding season going?

Have a great day.
Sue-z-Q

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009

Thank you so much! The kidding season is going, but oh, so, slowly! We have only six goats fresh, one live kid and 350 plus goats looking like they're going to burst any day!
Thanks for the great review.
Jan

Comment from Judian James

Excellent

Really nice piece Jani and it can be taken as it stands with provided photos or as a profound metaphor on mankind, our courses of existence and how we come together in the end ... perhaps. excellent

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009

Thank you, Jude. Much appreciated.
Hugs,
Jan

Comment from Lokman

Excellent

Hi Jan,
Another beautiful image with words to match--there is something so beautiful about the idea of many becoming one.
Sgea

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009

Thank you, Shea! :-)
Hugs,
Jan

Comment from Lady & Louis

Excellent

Ahahah, there are so many meanings that could be read into this one, as well as the "straight" nature subject. The one that hits me (and you will be sooo surprised at this) is the "many paths, one destination" idea of spiritual growth. The path doesn't matter so much, they're all from the same source and leads back there ...

Hugs!
Louise xxxx

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009

Thanks, Louise.
Hugs,
Jan

Comment from mmichelle97219

Excellent

Second review

The last line works much better now.
Hugs
Michelle
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Although I know what you are getting at the last line just does't mesh well with the other lines for me. Maybe the next one.

Happy writing
Michelle

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009

I talked to Al, who is an expert on haiku, and I;ve changed the last line. Any better? Thanks for the honest review. I appreciate it.
Hugs,
Jan

reply by mmichelle97219 on 11-Jan-2009

Review and rating updated. The last line works much better now.
Michelle

Comment from hyway94

Excellent

I see water like this when I'm driving around. Most of the time, if in the summer you find the white waters just full of people raving down them.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009

Thank you so much for your comments. I do appreciate them, very much.
Hugs,
Jan