CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is beautiful. Written in simple poetic diction, it has a strong theme that is well developed and understandable. It is clear from the poem that love has swept the persona off his or her feet and so the guards have been let go. Good poem in praise of Love's power.Kudos.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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This is beautiful. Written in simple poetic diction, it has a strong theme that is well developed and understandable. It is clear from the poem that love has swept the persona off his or her feet and so the guards have been let go. Good poem in praise of Love's power.Kudos.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Perp, thanks for such a very kind review. Very happy that you enjoyed it! Much appreciated, Sue
Comment from cmay44
You go girl!
One fine poem after the other. It may not be a triolet but it's wonderful anyway. I personally truly enjoyed the rhythm and structure. And the color and artwork are perfect for it.
God bless
love from
Carolyn
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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You go girl!
One fine poem after the other. It may not be a triolet but it's wonderful anyway. I personally truly enjoyed the rhythm and structure. And the color and artwork are perfect for it.
God bless
love from
Carolyn
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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I'm trying to go, girl!! Loving to learn and learning to love on this uphill road to poetry! Your encouragement is SO appreciated. Thank you for your most kind review! With my warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Mapleson
Emotive poetry that follows a good meter. The rhyming scheme is refreshing as is still present, but does not follow a typical pattern as described in the author notes. If you didn't add this helpful comment, I would have ranked it lower due to the unconventional rhyme scheme.
Kind Regards,
Mapleson
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Emotive poetry that follows a good meter. The rhyming scheme is refreshing as is still present, but does not follow a typical pattern as described in the author notes. If you didn't add this helpful comment, I would have ranked it lower due to the unconventional rhyme scheme.
Kind Regards,
Mapleson
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Mapleson, hoping my notes did not confuse you. I set out to write a triolet, but due to the creative process, abandoned that format and went with the rhyming scheme that now is there. I love unconventional, as long as it is understood! A very free feeling, indeed. Thank you SO much for your very kind review and specific comments. With regards, Sue
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No, your note was clear and helpful.
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Thanks for your reply!
Sue
Comment from Gerald Shuler
This has a great "feel" for the futility of guarding oneself against falling in love. The words were skillfully selected, the emotions were fiercely poignant. I would love to write with this kind of flare.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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This has a great "feel" for the futility of guarding oneself against falling in love. The words were skillfully selected, the emotions were fiercely poignant. I would love to write with this kind of flare.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Gerald, thank you so much for this very generous review and your specific comments on the work. And thank you for your most kind compliments!! With regards, Sue
Comment from Chris Edwards
Hi there SIXTEEZKID, I read this piece and thought to myself...This is a woman that is crying out for help?? your writing is full of frustration but rhynes excellently as does your meter.
Best wishes,
Chris.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Hi there SIXTEEZKID, I read this piece and thought to myself...This is a woman that is crying out for help?? your writing is full of frustration but rhynes excellently as does your meter.
Best wishes,
Chris.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Not help....just resignation to the fact that I can build all the fences to guard from hurt again, but love does come around again. And, that is a beautiful thing! Thanks so much for your very generous review! With regards, Sue
Comment from skye
Your artwork says so much.. and then this beautiful poem continues the conversation... and the imagery just shines out.
Openings... all sorts, real and emotional.
Very well done.
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Your artwork says so much.. and then this beautiful poem continues the conversation... and the imagery just shines out.
Openings... all sorts, real and emotional.
Very well done.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
Comment from Poetic Friend
A triolet it may not be, but a profound write it is.
Very strong emotions were expressed in the opening. It definitely got my attention.
The artwork complements your well-written poem.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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A triolet it may not be, but a profound write it is.
Very strong emotions were expressed in the opening. It definitely got my attention.
The artwork complements your well-written poem.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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Poetic Friend, what a great compliment and review. Thank you so much for all your very kind comments. So glad you liked this work! With regards, Sue
Comment from Eternal Muse
Very well written poem. I haven't written a Triolet in a while and forgot the structure - but thank you for the author's notes and clarifying that it is not a triolet because one line deviates from the rule. I loved the energy and momentum here, it charges and energizes, just from reading it!
Now caving, craving, my heart pounds
You're my exception to the rule
Those lines set the pace and have a energizing power, I swear. Very well written. Interesting image to ponder over when interpreting the poem.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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Very well written poem. I haven't written a Triolet in a while and forgot the structure - but thank you for the author's notes and clarifying that it is not a triolet because one line deviates from the rule. I loved the energy and momentum here, it charges and energizes, just from reading it!
Now caving, craving, my heart pounds
You're my exception to the rule
Those lines set the pace and have a energizing power, I swear. Very well written. Interesting image to ponder over when interpreting the poem.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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Yeltel, this is an awesome review. I really appreciate it. Thanks for all your very specific remarks. Always so informative, helpful and encouraging. So glad you liked this one! With regards, Sue
Comment from kassey
Triolet or not, it is a lovely verse and has great rhythm and rhyme.
"Now caving, craving, my heart pounds"
"You're my exception to the rule.
Excellent, Kay
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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Triolet or not, it is a lovely verse and has great rhythm and rhyme.
"Now caving, craving, my heart pounds"
"You're my exception to the rule.
Excellent, Kay
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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Kay, so glad you liked this one and I appreciate your most kind review and specific comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue. Not sure whether acrostics of these repeat thingies ar my least fav poetry forms. That's nothing ta do with its merits. Great alliteration and rhyme make this a very well thought-out and skilful write.
Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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Hi, Sue. Not sure whether acrostics of these repeat thingies ar my least fav poetry forms. That's nothing ta do with its merits. Great alliteration and rhyme make this a very well thought-out and skilful write.
Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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Ray, love your "repeat thingies" - Ha!! At least you're honest about not caring for them. I really wanted to book-end this poem, though. So glad you liked it and thanks for your specific comments. With regards, Sue