CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Moira's Amethyst
The absolute first thing I noticed about your writing ability is that your presence employs the utmost amount of creative energy which in turn paints a decent amount of imagery for the reader. That I like. I have nothing to critique and noticed no spag issues. I thank you for sharing. Please, take care.
Poetry's Protege
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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The absolute first thing I noticed about your writing ability is that your presence employs the utmost amount of creative energy which in turn paints a decent amount of imagery for the reader. That I like. I have nothing to critique and noticed no spag issues. I thank you for sharing. Please, take care.
Poetry's Protege
Comment Written 23-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Protege, I am most humbled by your words. As I have only just started to write, it feels mostly like I have only just begun to speak. Your most generous review and comments are so appreciated. With regards, Sue
Comment from eveeator
excellent, I love your thought about divorce and the trauma on the family members, no hope at one stage, then growth, then brightness and then the future still fragile but hope and growth, excellent writing and easy to see why already an all time best, keep well regards yvonne
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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excellent, I love your thought about divorce and the trauma on the family members, no hope at one stage, then growth, then brightness and then the future still fragile but hope and growth, excellent writing and easy to see why already an all time best, keep well regards yvonne
Comment Written 23-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Yvonne, thank you so much for your awesome review and great comments! So kind of you. Much appreciated, Sue
Comment from CARoseKlix
I assume family is the "it" in this phrase - "We call it Fragile." Or do you mean the future? or hope? or ? Maybe it's not completely clear to me.
Although family is presented as a complete unit which blew up, this doesn't explore the fact that each person in that whole has his/her own dreams which may or may not be included in the family's collective dreams.
I like the way you've likened divorce to a nuclear explosion. That is very clever.
Blessings.
Rose
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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I assume family is the "it" in this phrase - "We call it Fragile." Or do you mean the future? or hope? or ? Maybe it's not completely clear to me.
Although family is presented as a complete unit which blew up, this doesn't explore the fact that each person in that whole has his/her own dreams which may or may not be included in the family's collective dreams.
I like the way you've likened divorce to a nuclear explosion. That is very clever.
Blessings.
Rose
Comment Written 23-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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My meaning was the Future looks fragile (because of the timing - when we just got past the worst, our hearts feel the future is fragile. But is to portend that hope is on the horizon). Hope that resonates with you.
I hear you about how each person is an individual, but in a quite unexpected divorce, the whole family reels, collectively. Like when a bomb hits a building, everyone is going to be of the same mind at the time: SHOCK! Anyway, just wanted you to hear how I felt at the time. Thank you so much for your great review and all your specific comments. Much appreciated...and Sincerely, Sue
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You are welcome.
Rose
Comment from NightWriter
"Nuclear Family and the Divorce" is a very creative poem looking at the impact of divorce and how destructive it can be. Very well written with perfect rhythm.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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"Nuclear Family and the Divorce" is a very creative poem looking at the impact of divorce and how destructive it can be. Very well written with perfect rhythm.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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NightWriter, I want to thank you for your very generous remarks and review. So much appreciated. Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from raw form
Very interesting metaphor I've never heard divorce and the affect put quite this way. my parents seperated when I was five years old however I was happy about getting away from my father. we have a good relationship now but I was scared of him back then thats what flashed across my minds eye reading your work Good Stuff!
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Very interesting metaphor I've never heard divorce and the affect put quite this way. my parents seperated when I was five years old however I was happy about getting away from my father. we have a good relationship now but I was scared of him back then thats what flashed across my minds eye reading your work Good Stuff!
Comment Written 23-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Yes, the children's welfare and happiness comes first!! We bring them into this world and owe them everything we can give. Happy you have a good relationship with your father now. Sometimes it takes people a long time to "wise up" or realize and appreciate what they have. Thank you so much for your great review and sharing! Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from Just2Write
I liked the comparison of a nuclear blast and the blowing apart of a nuclear family. For them, the devastation is that real, or surreal, as your poem illlustrates. Divorce is such a norm these days. Whatever happened to the meaning of vows? The world is full with disillusion and broken families. Thanks for this view into what destruction that brings.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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I liked the comparison of a nuclear blast and the blowing apart of a nuclear family. For them, the devastation is that real, or surreal, as your poem illlustrates. Divorce is such a norm these days. Whatever happened to the meaning of vows? The world is full with disillusion and broken families. Thanks for this view into what destruction that brings.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Yes, it is all too familiar and "acceptable", isn't it? Priorities ALL screwed up, if you ask me. Thank you very much for your very generous review and all your comments. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Poetic Friend
Great usage of metaphor-- nuclear. The famiy dynamics have changed so much over past decades, leading to many divorces.
You have quite a few great lines in this poem, especially in the last stanza.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Great usage of metaphor-- nuclear. The famiy dynamics have changed so much over past decades, leading to many divorces.
You have quite a few great lines in this poem, especially in the last stanza.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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So glad you like the last stanza; it's fragile, yet we know there is hope. I am very glad you liked this work. Thank you so much for your generous review and all your comments. Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from lathunder
Very well written. It is exactly how it happens and the mass destruction that is left behind is awful. I don't understand why we can't fight harder to stay together. I guess no one wants to work for their marriage anymore. It's just easier to walk away. How sad.
L.A.Thunder
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Very well written. It is exactly how it happens and the mass destruction that is left behind is awful. I don't understand why we can't fight harder to stay together. I guess no one wants to work for their marriage anymore. It's just easier to walk away. How sad.
L.A.Thunder
Comment Written 23-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Some feel the grass is greener on the other side, I suppose....yet the "family" is the greenest of them all! Thanks so much for your generous review and comments. So glad you liked this poem. Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from dtimes3
My question is "How many generations to beyond?" Those of us at ground zero are totally destroyed with no chance of recovery and those at various distances carry great stigmas into their future. How many generations to wipe out the pain. "The sins of the fathers" (and mothers, since we're all equal now) require seven generations to remove. That is one heavy burden. Great thought provoking poem. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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My question is "How many generations to beyond?" Those of us at ground zero are totally destroyed with no chance of recovery and those at various distances carry great stigmas into their future. How many generations to wipe out the pain. "The sins of the fathers" (and mothers, since we're all equal now) require seven generations to remove. That is one heavy burden. Great thought provoking poem. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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We can stop the pain when we give priority to our own children and let them know they are the most special of all! The healing does take time, but "hope" in life is a gift we need to take. Thank you so much for your great review and all your comments...Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from mildredmolanki
Hi, I liked your play on words in using 'nuclear' family to open the link between divorce and the trauma of an explosion...both short and long term. It works well for imagery and for capturing the emotional 'devastation'.
Kind regards MM.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Hi, I liked your play on words in using 'nuclear' family to open the link between divorce and the trauma of an explosion...both short and long term. It works well for imagery and for capturing the emotional 'devastation'.
Kind regards MM.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Ahhhhh...you caught my double entendre! Cool! Didn't want to be too "cutsie" with it, but thought it worked since the whole poem is a metaphor. Thanks for highlighting that. Thank you for your great review and comments. So glad you liked it.....Most sincerely, Sue