Searching For Christopher
A letter to the nephew I've never met54 total reviews
Comment from redrider6612
This was beautifully written and heartbreaking. I hope one day Christopher will decide to contact you.
A few suggestions:
I longed to take you in and raise you[,] but Diane decided
non-related --unrelated
The family who is adopting him[,] agreed to call him Christopher.
Your uncle[,] John[,] would love to meet you, too.
It was especially sad that your sister couldn't ever have another child. My heart goes out to you and your family.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2008
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This was beautifully written and heartbreaking. I hope one day Christopher will decide to contact you.
A few suggestions:
I longed to take you in and raise you[,] but Diane decided
non-related --unrelated
The family who is adopting him[,] agreed to call him Christopher.
Your uncle[,] John[,] would love to meet you, too.
It was especially sad that your sister couldn't ever have another child. My heart goes out to you and your family.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review. Question - are you saying I should remove the commas around uncle and John? I know they are correct. :-)
Jan
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Actually, if you capitalize Uncle, you could remove both commas.
Comment from adewpearl
I think it is worded just right because it communicates so well that you miss this boy you were never allowed to meet.
People often forget that these decisions impact others greatly, like grandparents and aunts, people not given a voice in the decision but who suffer for it. I do hope Christopher has had a wonderful life with his adopted family.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2008
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I think it is worded just right because it communicates so well that you miss this boy you were never allowed to meet.
People often forget that these decisions impact others greatly, like grandparents and aunts, people not given a voice in the decision but who suffer for it. I do hope Christopher has had a wonderful life with his adopted family.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much. This is exactly what I hope for too. I hope he has a wonderful family. I really appreciate your kind words.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from Zaphod
I read the note and I think that this is perfect as it is. I really can't see any other way in putting something of the intensity down. It cuts to the point, and I hope that one day Chris will read this.
Great write.
All the best,
Z
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
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I read the note and I think that this is perfect as it is. I really can't see any other way in putting something of the intensity down. It cuts to the point, and I hope that one day Chris will read this.
Great write.
All the best,
Z
Comment Written 08-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
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Thanks, Z. I sure hope so, too!
Jan
Comment from Shane Marquardt
I thought this was a beautiful post. I appreciate your sharing something very personal for you. I do not have any suggestions for you because I thought the way you voiced your story was the best part of it - it was personal and from the heart.
Thank you and good luck
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
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I thought this was a beautiful post. I appreciate your sharing something very personal for you. I do not have any suggestions for you because I thought the way you voiced your story was the best part of it - it was personal and from the heart.
Thank you and good luck
Comment Written 08-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
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Thank you, Shane. I really appreciate your kind words.
Jan
Comment from fayesh
This was a lovely, well written letter, and it deeply expressed an aunt's love for the nephew she missed. I think that if you finally connect with your nephew, it will be unexpected and joyous.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
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This was a lovely, well written letter, and it deeply expressed an aunt's love for the nephew she missed. I think that if you finally connect with your nephew, it will be unexpected and joyous.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review. I really appreciate your comments. :-)I hope so!
Jan
Comment from brightside1099
You have tapped into a wonderful network of people all across the world. Maybe someone will spread your words in the right place. Stranger things have happened.
As for the story, I really don't know how you can improve it. You have made a honest, generous offer of friendship and family. He may have to get a little older to appreciate what you've done.
Good luck in finding this missing piece of your family puzzle.
BB
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
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You have tapped into a wonderful network of people all across the world. Maybe someone will spread your words in the right place. Stranger things have happened.
As for the story, I really don't know how you can improve it. You have made a honest, generous offer of friendship and family. He may have to get a little older to appreciate what you've done.
Good luck in finding this missing piece of your family puzzle.
BB
Comment Written 08-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
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Many thanks, BB. I appreciate your kind words.
Jan
Comment from joan marie
It is so wonderful to feel that much love. I hope he finds out someday how much he is loved. My tears fall for all that don't have anyone who cares. Those who are abandoned for whatever reason will always feel abandoned unless they have someone like you to be there. I know if I was him I would want to know you. joan marie
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
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It is so wonderful to feel that much love. I hope he finds out someday how much he is loved. My tears fall for all that don't have anyone who cares. Those who are abandoned for whatever reason will always feel abandoned unless they have someone like you to be there. I know if I was him I would want to know you. joan marie
Comment Written 08-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much, Joan Marie. I really appreciate your very sweet words of support.
Hugs,
Jan
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It just broke my heart. I wish my father had wanted me in the loving way you wish to be with Christopher. We talk now but he was never a parent. I like the format of letter writing because sometimes that is the perfect form for saying what you need to say. jm
Comment from honeytree
This writing is sad and really I cannot understand someone giving up their baby and sometimes this maybe necessary.I feel very sad for this mother in not being able to have children.
Your reply Janilou explains your chosen words. I enjoyed this read very much, sad and this does happen.
"After Nan died in 2004, my father) remarried. My step-mother's daughters are both adopted and neither of them have ever tried to find their biological families. Perhaps you have no desire to make contact. I won't know until I find you.
Even if I find you and you choose not to meet us, at least you will know how much you've been loved and missed all the years of your life."
Wonderful writing ,sad but this can and does happen.
I loved everyword written
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2008
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This writing is sad and really I cannot understand someone giving up their baby and sometimes this maybe necessary.I feel very sad for this mother in not being able to have children.
Your reply Janilou explains your chosen words. I enjoyed this read very much, sad and this does happen.
"After Nan died in 2004, my father) remarried. My step-mother's daughters are both adopted and neither of them have ever tried to find their biological families. Perhaps you have no desire to make contact. I won't know until I find you.
Even if I find you and you choose not to meet us, at least you will know how much you've been loved and missed all the years of your life."
Wonderful writing ,sad but this can and does happen.
I loved everyword written
Honeytree.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2008
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Thank you for the review and for giving me your thoughts on improvements.
I can't say "him" where you tell me to delete "you" because this is a letter written to the adopted son, Christopher. I am talking to him, so it has to be "you." I did try to tweak some of the other things you mentioned and hope that makes it clearer.
Thanks again. :-)
Jan
Comment from darkgreennights
Oh Phooey Jan, that was a heartbreaking piece. I wish real life wasnt so darn...impossible for want of a better word. In fiction she would have been rewarded with three.point nine obnoxious children and a husband who would never have such a small ugly spirit as well. A beautifully written piece.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2008
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Oh Phooey Jan, that was a heartbreaking piece. I wish real life wasnt so darn...impossible for want of a better word. In fiction she would have been rewarded with three.point nine obnoxious children and a husband who would never have such a small ugly spirit as well. A beautifully written piece.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much. :-)
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
I felt so sad in reading this diary/letter. It is never an easy choice when it comes to adoption....my neice gave up a child that my sister wanted desperately to take and raise. We have no knowledge of the child's whereabouts or anything. It is a heartache that does not go away. I wonder if someday he will come to find his biological mother. Great and moving writing. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2008
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I felt so sad in reading this diary/letter. It is never an easy choice when it comes to adoption....my neice gave up a child that my sister wanted desperately to take and raise. We have no knowledge of the child's whereabouts or anything. It is a heartache that does not go away. I wonder if someday he will come to find his biological mother. Great and moving writing. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
Comment Written 08-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much, Susanne. The very thought of him reading that letter tears me apart! I am glad you enjoyed reading this.
Hugs,
Jan
