Searching For Christopher
A letter to the nephew I've never met54 total reviews
Comment from raimie
How can you ever suggest a correction to something that is clearly part of someone's soul. If there was any spag, I did not see it. I saw only great love. My mother found her sisters daughter she gave up for adoption, 25 yrs after the fact. I hope you find your Christopher as we found our Laura. The joy is indescribable.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2008
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How can you ever suggest a correction to something that is clearly part of someone's soul. If there was any spag, I did not see it. I saw only great love. My mother found her sisters daughter she gave up for adoption, 25 yrs after the fact. I hope you find your Christopher as we found our Laura. The joy is indescribable.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much. How wonderful to hear of your success. You give my heart hope. Bless you!
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from chaswriter
Jan - Very touching and I could feel your heartstrings vibrating in this one. What a sad day to give up a child. I hope you find your nephew some day.
One comment: I don't think that I would write dialogue in a letter such as this. It reads more like a story than a letter. But that's me.
I enjoyed it. Charlie.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2008
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Jan - Very touching and I could feel your heartstrings vibrating in this one. What a sad day to give up a child. I hope you find your nephew some day.
One comment: I don't think that I would write dialogue in a letter such as this. It reads more like a story than a letter. But that's me.
I enjoyed it. Charlie.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2008
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Thank you, Charlie. You are probably right on the dialogue. I will tweak it when I get a chance.
Jan
Comment from Sue-z-Q
Hi Jan:
Letters coming straight from a loving heart can seldom be improved upon.
Try running a "personal ad" in an Australian newspaper if that's what they call those ads down under. Not that it's a sure thing that Christopher is still living there, but a few particulars like being adopted and born in Dec. 1984, the fact that his extended family wants to meet him. Include info on how to contact you or tell the adoption agency. It may get the attention of someone who knows of him or possibly even his whereabouts whether he sees the ad himself or not.
I saw no spag in this piece and enjoyed reading it. It's nicely written and I wish you lots of luck in your quest to find him.
Sue-z-Q
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2008
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Hi Jan:
Letters coming straight from a loving heart can seldom be improved upon.
Try running a "personal ad" in an Australian newspaper if that's what they call those ads down under. Not that it's a sure thing that Christopher is still living there, but a few particulars like being adopted and born in Dec. 1984, the fact that his extended family wants to meet him. Include info on how to contact you or tell the adoption agency. It may get the attention of someone who knows of him or possibly even his whereabouts whether he sees the ad himself or not.
I saw no spag in this piece and enjoyed reading it. It's nicely written and I wish you lots of luck in your quest to find him.
Sue-z-Q
Comment Written 09-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2008
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That is a good idea, Sue. I will try that. I know he was born in Darwin, so I might have a better chance of finding him by doing that, than in the bigger cities.
So glad you liked this one.
Thanks for the wonderful review!
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from Kym Jade
Adoption, is a very hard thing. We both have a few adopted cousins; one knew her background all along and had a relationship with her father. I must have been very hard for the rest of the family when your sister gave up her baby. After all by 1984 most girls kept their babies and brought them up. We're sorry your sister has never been able to have another child, I know a number of people who have had the same problem. Hope you get some word about what happened to your nephew.
Love and blessings
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Adoption, is a very hard thing. We both have a few adopted cousins; one knew her background all along and had a relationship with her father. I must have been very hard for the rest of the family when your sister gave up her baby. After all by 1984 most girls kept their babies and brought them up. We're sorry your sister has never been able to have another child, I know a number of people who have had the same problem. Hope you get some word about what happened to your nephew.
Love and blessings
Comment Written 09-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for your kind words. It was very hard, being Christopher was my parent's first grandchild.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from jsbridgeford
I don't think you need to improve on a letter from the heart. If your interest is in moving this to a short story, then I would suggest changing the voice. I'm the mother of two adopted children. This past year, my daughter met her birth family..and so did I. I had kept in touch with them through the years. At 16, I gave my daughter an album with pictures and cards that her birthmom had sent through the years. I've never regretted my choice to do this. My daughter was elated. It's a wrenching decision to place a child for adoption. Your sister did what she thought best at the time...but if she ever decides to change her mind...best of luck in your search.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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I don't think you need to improve on a letter from the heart. If your interest is in moving this to a short story, then I would suggest changing the voice. I'm the mother of two adopted children. This past year, my daughter met her birth family..and so did I. I had kept in touch with them through the years. At 16, I gave my daughter an album with pictures and cards that her birthmom had sent through the years. I've never regretted my choice to do this. My daughter was elated. It's a wrenching decision to place a child for adoption. Your sister did what she thought best at the time...but if she ever decides to change her mind...best of luck in your search.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for your review. I really appreciate it. :-) Thank you for sharing your experience with me and bless your heart for loving your daughter enough to give her that gift.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
Your wording is fine and needs no improvement you say it as it is from the heart. what a sad tale, for your sister not being blessed with more children and for you who had no choice in the decisions made. Have you tried face book or my space? It is a bit of a long shot but most young adults these days seem to be on there. specially facebook which seems to be flavour of the year. I was found my two nieces on face book recently. They are my husbands sisters girls, and when we seperated 18 years ago we lost contact. The re union was fantastic but very emotional. It took me 6 years of searching but i never gave up and it was worth it! I hope you find him one day soon x
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Your wording is fine and needs no improvement you say it as it is from the heart. what a sad tale, for your sister not being blessed with more children and for you who had no choice in the decisions made. Have you tried face book or my space? It is a bit of a long shot but most young adults these days seem to be on there. specially facebook which seems to be flavour of the year. I was found my two nieces on face book recently. They are my husbands sisters girls, and when we seperated 18 years ago we lost contact. The re union was fantastic but very emotional. It took me 6 years of searching but i never gave up and it was worth it! I hope you find him one day soon x
Comment Written 09-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for your review. I really appreciate it. :-) I have never tried Facebook, or MySpace but that is a wonderful idea! Thank you! I will try it. So glad to hear of the fabulous reunion within your family and for sharing the hope with me.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from Janelle
Janilou this is such a heart wrenching piece. This type of situation can affect so many people, not just the mother and child. I do hope you find him and I realy hope his mother relents and agrees to meet with him when and if you do. You sound like such a caring, compassionate person he is lucky to have you as his aunt. A well written piece that I hope spawns another one with a happy ending. Regards, Jan
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Janilou this is such a heart wrenching piece. This type of situation can affect so many people, not just the mother and child. I do hope you find him and I realy hope his mother relents and agrees to meet with him when and if you do. You sound like such a caring, compassionate person he is lucky to have you as his aunt. A well written piece that I hope spawns another one with a happy ending. Regards, Jan
Comment Written 09-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much. I've often wondered if she would, if we found him first. I appreciate your kind words.
Jan
Comment from MercyWrites
Janilou, I'm going to have save you in my fanlist. Your real life stories always have effect on me. I certainly
do hope you find him, and I hope your sister changes her mind. God bless.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Janilou, I'm going to have save you in my fanlist. Your real life stories always have effect on me. I certainly
do hope you find him, and I hope your sister changes her mind. God bless.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Thank you. I am so glad you enjoy my writing that much.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from SilverFoxes
Jan, this moved me. Especially this part -
I dream of meeting you one day, of knowing the answers to all the questions floating around in my heart. Are you happy? What do you do for fun? Your job? Did they treat you well? What do you like? What do you hate? Would you like to meet all your cousins? Is there anything you need to know or would like to know about your biological background? Do you know how much I love you?
I can only join you in hoping he does know.
Silverfoxes
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Jan, this moved me. Especially this part -
I dream of meeting you one day, of knowing the answers to all the questions floating around in my heart. Are you happy? What do you do for fun? Your job? Did they treat you well? What do you like? What do you hate? Would you like to meet all your cousins? Is there anything you need to know or would like to know about your biological background? Do you know how much I love you?
I can only join you in hoping he does know.
Silverfoxes
Comment Written 09-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Wow! Thank you so very much for this wonderful six star review! You made my night. Many, many thanks.
I am honored to read how much you enjoyed this work.
Jan
Comment from wierdgrace
This is so emotional and from the heart, I would not change this a bit. I wanted to help you find this wonderful young man, I hope you do meet him some day, and if you do please write fs. I would love to hear about your reunion. dont change a thing.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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This is so emotional and from the heart, I would not change this a bit. I wanted to help you find this wonderful young man, I hope you do meet him some day, and if you do please write fs. I would love to hear about your reunion. dont change a thing.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for your review and kind words.
Hugs,
Jan
PS If I ever find him, my friends on FanStory will be the second ones to know! :-)
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u r so welcome
