Foxtales From The Front Porch
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Mentor - The Very Cool Mister Rath"Stories told from the heart
16 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is another enjoyable chapter from you that brought back memories of my 12th grade english teacher. one week we would do english, the next week literature. i loved the literature weeks, where i aced a thesis on Chaucer--94 due to typographical errors.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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this is another enjoyable chapter from you that brought back memories of my 12th grade english teacher. one week we would do english, the next week literature. i loved the literature weeks, where i aced a thesis on Chaucer--94 due to typographical errors.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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the teachers of our past!
Comment from stephonavich
Fantastic in getting the reader to visualize Mister Rath and getting involved in the story instantly! Although, it did seem Mister Rath was "gazing" one too many times. Use that unique "voice" you have to change one of those and it would flow smoother and not draw attention that we are actually reading this and that it's not implanted in our head. Otherwise, great writing!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Fantastic in getting the reader to visualize Mister Rath and getting involved in the story instantly! Although, it did seem Mister Rath was "gazing" one too many times. Use that unique "voice" you have to change one of those and it would flow smoother and not draw attention that we are actually reading this and that it's not implanted in our head. Otherwise, great writing!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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thanks for the review. I'll re-read and possibly edit.
Comment from fionageorge
I loved this chapter, which was well written, with great use of dialogue. It taught a lesson, but oh, you presented that so well, with humour, emotion, and vivid imagery. I loved it. The dialogue was excellent and moved the story along at a great pace.
Thanks for sharing.
Warmest regards
Marijke
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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I loved this chapter, which was well written, with great use of dialogue. It taught a lesson, but oh, you presented that so well, with humour, emotion, and vivid imagery. I loved it. The dialogue was excellent and moved the story along at a great pace.
Thanks for sharing.
Warmest regards
Marijke
Comment Written 06-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Thank you, most of my work is creative non-fiction, and like O.Henry, I suspect it has long been written in my head and heart before it goes to paper!
Comment from Kelly Shackelford
There was a great chapter! You were able to keep the pace moving at a nice, brisk trot and did a super job at characters.
I look forward to reading more of your work
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2010
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There was a great chapter! You were able to keep the pace moving at a nice, brisk trot and did a super job at characters.
I look forward to reading more of your work
Comment Written 03-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2010
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thank you. Smokey's Lesson is another true story, as is The Broomstick Bazooka
Comment from toni guerrero
Avery good story and very amusing. It brought a smile to my face. Thank for sharing.Good dramatic scenes and good concise statements. Good work. I would recommend your writing to othres to read. Keep on writing your good work.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2010
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Avery good story and very amusing. It brought a smile to my face. Thank for sharing.Good dramatic scenes and good concise statements. Good work. I would recommend your writing to othres to read. Keep on writing your good work.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2010
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thank you. In this same anthology is Smokey's Lesson which is another true story, as is The Broomstick Bazooka
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You are so welcome.
Comment from apelle
very meaningful and inspirational writing.
i like your your use of words ..
some sentences are truly outstanding
thanks for a good read and good luck
adina
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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very meaningful and inspirational writing.
i like your your use of words ..
some sentences are truly outstanding
thanks for a good read and good luck
adina
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you. Some of my use of words stems back to the Cool Mr. Rath!
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You may also enjoy my spoof on the news in my "Sergeant Gus" last chapter in this same book compilation.
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
The narration and story is good and contains twists and turns.
Loved the way it un folds. A beautiful treat to read it.
With best wishes and keep writing Loved it
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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The narration and story is good and contains twists and turns.
Loved the way it un folds. A beautiful treat to read it.
With best wishes and keep writing Loved it
Comment Written 11-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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Thank you.
The two chapters ahead of this are from a few years earlier in my life. I usually write in creative non-fiction.
Comment from jgirlie152
Oh, but I loved your Foxtales chapter starring the eminent Mr. David Rath. I remember a similar teacher, though admittedly not quite so dramatic, who entertained us with her wit. Will have to read your previous chapters, and hopefully will delight me as much as this.
Joan
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Oh, but I loved your Foxtales chapter starring the eminent Mr. David Rath. I remember a similar teacher, though admittedly not quite so dramatic, who entertained us with her wit. Will have to read your previous chapters, and hopefully will delight me as much as this.
Joan
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Thanks, do enjoy! The Broomstick Rubberband Bazooka story shows why I probably needed Mister Rath to channel some of that gone awry intellect!
Comment from Tallteller
You write very well, very well, indeed! English teachers were always my favourite and as a boy as I was very fond of a few. You evoke pleasant memories mixed in with those of the pains of puberty; the school ball with all its hopes of paradise that end, with despair, in that empty space upon the dance floor.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2010
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You write very well, very well, indeed! English teachers were always my favourite and as a boy as I was very fond of a few. You evoke pleasant memories mixed in with those of the pains of puberty; the school ball with all its hopes of paradise that end, with despair, in that empty space upon the dance floor.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2010
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Thanks. I tried to do justice to Mister Rath's excellent vocabulary skills. Our High School lost him to a community college just a few years after I had him for "Masterpiece Literature!"
Comment from anabelle
LOL! What a wonderful tale of vulnerability and success. Very well done. I especially liked the: You Will Survive!'. True of anything in life, it just doesn't seem possible at the darkest of times. Really inspiring read.
Thanks for sharing.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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LOL! What a wonderful tale of vulnerability and success. Very well done. I especially liked the: You Will Survive!'. True of anything in life, it just doesn't seem possible at the darkest of times. Really inspiring read.
Thanks for sharing.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 03-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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thanks. You might also like "Drive-in Banshees" and "Sergeant Gus" in my compilation book.
