Little One
Making peace with one's inner child60 total reviews
Comment from NadineM
Your poem is heartwarming, empowering, deeply intense, moving, truthful and direct! I love your healing message to all who read this as a personal conversation...
Your words are well-written and compose a beautiful message of hope and inspiration!
God bless you for reaching out to those hearts in need.
Thank-you for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2008
  |
Your poem is heartwarming, empowering, deeply intense, moving, truthful and direct! I love your healing message to all who read this as a personal conversation...
Your words are well-written and compose a beautiful message of hope and inspiration!
God bless you for reaching out to those hearts in need.
Thank-you for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2008
-
NadineM, this is a piece that kept insisting on being written this morning after I had some bloodwork done at the doctor's office. It was written at a Chick Fil-A while I ate a chicken biscuit with one hand and wrote with the other. I am both humbled and honored at the reception it has received since I came home and posted it. Thank you so much for your kind words and exceptional rating. Love, Jan
Comment from Alexander E Poet
Very descriptive and full of imagery and life and just beautiful poem and bit sad There was no error. No typos. Nothing to change. I look forward to your next write
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2008
 |
Very descriptive and full of imagery and life and just beautiful poem and bit sad There was no error. No typos. Nothing to change. I look forward to your next write
Comment Written 23-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2008
-
Thank you, Alexander. It was one of those pieces that demanded to be written. Love, Jan
Comment from boberto
Hi Rdfrdmom2. Very emotional, touching verse. One of the benefits of having some means of release---writing, painting, music, crafts----whatever, but some way to do it. Not IDing oneself, often will facilitate the effort. I like the verse and the message---the "reaching out" words you used. To be honest though, the rhyme scheme, to me, got a little too much "sing-songy". It distracted me somewhat. Remember please, my opinion.
boberto
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
|
Hi Rdfrdmom2. Very emotional, touching verse. One of the benefits of having some means of release---writing, painting, music, crafts----whatever, but some way to do it. Not IDing oneself, often will facilitate the effort. I like the verse and the message---the "reaching out" words you used. To be honest though, the rhyme scheme, to me, got a little too much "sing-songy". It distracted me somewhat. Remember please, my opinion.
boberto
Comment Written 23-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
-
since you are doing the review, it's your opinion that counts, my friend. Boberto, I'm the first to admit I do free verse much better than I do rhyming work. It started off rhyming so I felt I had to stick with it. Thanks for your insights and kind review. hope you are feeling better. love, jan
-
Thank you so much for your confidence. Also, thanks I am feeling better--knock wood, like my head.
boberto
Comment from c_lucas
I have had the misfortune to deal with the crumbled personality left by the sex fiend we have labeled a pedophile.
I do not consider these molester of children to be sick. I would not feel guilty of giving a pedophile the death sentence for taking a productive life from a young person. Your poem has some merit. Thank you.
Those times you yearn to play and run
Participate in all the childhood fun
Stolen from you years ago
By a pedophile so vile and low
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
|
I have had the misfortune to deal with the crumbled personality left by the sex fiend we have labeled a pedophile.
I do not consider these molester of children to be sick. I would not feel guilty of giving a pedophile the death sentence for taking a productive life from a young person. Your poem has some merit. Thank you.
Those times you yearn to play and run
Participate in all the childhood fun
Stolen from you years ago
By a pedophile so vile and low
Comment Written 23-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
-
Thank you, c_lucas. I believe them to be incurable. This piece was one of those that began nagging at me and would not let me go until I stopped and put it on paper. Love, Jan
-
You're welcome, Jan. My mother, born in 1906, told us of an incident in her childhood. A child molester was locked in an outhouse and the building was burned. It was a very swift justice.
-
I would say that was similar to Turkish justice. Wow!
-
No, it was a group of angry fathers of both colors. Mother did not know if the Sheriff, or Judge was present.
Comment from EllenV
Such a beautifully written poem that is sure to give encouragement and comfort to those suffering from a lost childhood due to abuse.
I almost feel guilty in saying that I had a wonderful childhood with two great parents. But I have a deep compassion for those who didn't.
A great write.
ellen
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
|
Such a beautifully written poem that is sure to give encouragement and comfort to those suffering from a lost childhood due to abuse.
I almost feel guilty in saying that I had a wonderful childhood with two great parents. But I have a deep compassion for those who didn't.
A great write.
ellen
Comment Written 23-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
-
EllenV, please don't feel guilty. There are reasons for everything that happens in life. If I could change my childhood, I wouldn't, because I know it all worked together to make me who I am now, and that's just fine. Thanks for your review and comments. This piece was one of those that began nagging at me and would not let me go until I stopped and put it on paper. Love, Jan
Comment from Costa J John
This is a very deep topic that has been tackled rather gracefully. It has dark undertones, and is a bold attempt to be soothing. Good work.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
|
This is a very deep topic that has been tackled rather gracefully. It has dark undertones, and is a bold attempt to be soothing. Good work.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
-
Thank you, Costa John. This piece was one of those that began nagging at me and would not let me go until I stopped and put it on paper. Love, Jan
Comment from aviddbrut
very good poem, with a simple rhyming pattern which does not detract from the message of the poem. you offer very good words here... important words...words many need to hear deep in their souls. thanks for putting them together in a beautiful way. david
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
|
very good poem, with a simple rhyming pattern which does not detract from the message of the poem. you offer very good words here... important words...words many need to hear deep in their souls. thanks for putting them together in a beautiful way. david
Comment Written 23-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
-
Thanks, David. It was one of those that began nagging at me and would not let me go until I stopped and put it on paper. Love, Jan
Comment from charissw
Very well said. Great imagery to help even the unaffected reader relate to the ever prevalent problem of abuse. You captured the essence of what a child things and feels after the experience of being violated. Kudos!
As a reviewer, there is nothing I can add or take away from this work. It is great as is! Thanks for sharing.
Blessings, Chariss
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
|
Very well said. Great imagery to help even the unaffected reader relate to the ever prevalent problem of abuse. You captured the essence of what a child things and feels after the experience of being violated. Kudos!
As a reviewer, there is nothing I can add or take away from this work. It is great as is! Thanks for sharing.
Blessings, Chariss
Comment Written 23-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
-
Thanks, charissw. It was one of those that began nagging at me and would not let me go until I stopped and put it on paper. Love, Jan
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
My dear Jan,
This is a gorgeous tribute to Megs's (lol) plight, her struggle with lack of support, her courage to reach out to others, and her future growth as a woman. I feel that Megs will prevail victorious in this quest and my hat is off to you for your unrelenting devotion and friendship to this fine young woman. This six star review is for both you and she.
I love you both,
Penny
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
|
My dear Jan,
This is a gorgeous tribute to Megs's (lol) plight, her struggle with lack of support, her courage to reach out to others, and her future growth as a woman. I feel that Megs will prevail victorious in this quest and my hat is off to you for your unrelenting devotion and friendship to this fine young woman. This six star review is for both you and she.
I love you both,
Penny
Comment Written 23-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
-
Thanks, Penny. We love you, too. I was able to read it to her this morning right after I finished writing it. I think she was stunned. It was one of those that began nagging at me and would not let me go until I stopped and put it on paper. Love, Jan
-
Thank you for saying so. You both mean a lot to me.
Pen
Comment from Lejunna
I had to give the best rating that I could. I love that you do what you do. I hope that you keep doing what you do. We need to help thouse who can't speek for themselves.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
|
I had to give the best rating that I could. I love that you do what you do. I hope that you keep doing what you do. We need to help thouse who can't speek for themselves.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
-
Thanks, Lejunna. I can't help but do what I do as it is what God has called me to do. This poem was one of those that began nagging at me and would not let me go until I stopped and put it on paper. Love, Jan
