Comment from venusanblue

Excellent

This is a lovely heartfelt story. It conveyed much love and hope. I love the lost and found coin, very profound. I enjoyed.
A lovely blessing story.
HUgs, V,xx

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2008

Comment from Janet65

Excellent

Hi Art, This is beautiful, and full of lovely imagery. I hope I understand it as to its meaning. This reads as if the narrator is talking to one who is depressed, and/or given up on himself and others -- even life. I know the feeling.

This is so well written, with no spag. It flows well although I'm not sure it is poetry or just a short piece of prose written with deep feeling. Which ever it is, it is a great work.
Thank you for sharing,
Janet65

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2008

Comment from Dave M

Excellent

Diana,

This is an excellent plea, and I see that it is listed as non fiction. You have my best hopes.

I found one phrase that strikes me as wrong: "the path you've wandered away from is only temporary." I don't think this says what you want it to. I believe that you want to say, "Your lost state is temporary," but it doesn't come out like that.

Dave M

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2008

Comment from T.S.J.

Excellent

I will pray for a safe return. That was so beautiful and so well worded. ano TYPE o's no mistakes . Clearly a joy to read and pleasure to review. T.S.J.

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 Comment Written 17-Feb-2008