When Angels Cry
An old Friend That Needs Everyone's Prayers84 total reviews
Comment from Sardinesandsucker
May your cherished friend hear your soul's words of love and comfort. Indeed, I do he/she comes home; home to the light within. Thank you for sharing your heart with us. Peace and long life. Sandina
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2008
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May your cherished friend hear your soul's words of love and comfort. Indeed, I do he/she comes home; home to the light within. Thank you for sharing your heart with us. Peace and long life. Sandina
Comment Written 17-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2008
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thanks so much for the great review. yours, diana
Comment from pugdogy
good job!!! the picture you have chosen to use fits this work beautifully. the poem was well written making it easy to read and to understand. keep up the great writing, (smile) pugdogy
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2008
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good job!!! the picture you have chosen to use fits this work beautifully. the poem was well written making it easy to read and to understand. keep up the great writing, (smile) pugdogy
Comment Written 17-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2008
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thanks so much for the great review. yours, diana
Comment from P1
diana this is lovely and so sad
i have no idea who this is dedicated to
but he or she is in my heart and prayers
i am thinking depression but can be taken
in many ways. thank you for sharing. hugs lynda.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2008
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diana this is lovely and so sad
i have no idea who this is dedicated to
but he or she is in my heart and prayers
i am thinking depression but can be taken
in many ways. thank you for sharing. hugs lynda.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2008
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hi paige...thanks so much for your wonderful thoughts. yours, diana
Comment from Eagle Eye Jerry
Hey Artasylum
I noticed this is non fiction. I hope everything is okay.
This is a nice little piece of hope ou have written for a friend in need. I hope the prayers of people that read it will help them. If this was fiction, I would say well done and I enjoyed it. As it is I'll just say well done and I hope the person this is for gets better.
Eagle Eye
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Hey Artasylum
I noticed this is non fiction. I hope everything is okay.
This is a nice little piece of hope ou have written for a friend in need. I hope the prayers of people that read it will help them. If this was fiction, I would say well done and I enjoyed it. As it is I'll just say well done and I hope the person this is for gets better.
Eagle Eye
Comment Written 17-Feb-2008
Comment from mamaboots
Hello Artasylum,
I found this to be a loving plea to a cherished friend / loved one. The picture is beautiful; the title is what drew me in. I did notice a few grammatical things you might want to change; they are noted below. Since this is listed as non-fiction, I hope you and the subject you have written about will accept my prayers for your well-being. Thank you for sharing, mamaboots
I love your spirit(,) your being(,) and cherish your exquisite words (insert commas as indicated)
.All of those things (even though buried,) anxiously await your return.
( I think this needs to be reworded - "things" can't "anxiously await")
Please come home(.)**** (need ending punctuation)
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Hello Artasylum,
I found this to be a loving plea to a cherished friend / loved one. The picture is beautiful; the title is what drew me in. I did notice a few grammatical things you might want to change; they are noted below. Since this is listed as non-fiction, I hope you and the subject you have written about will accept my prayers for your well-being. Thank you for sharing, mamaboots
I love your spirit(,) your being(,) and cherish your exquisite words (insert commas as indicated)
.All of those things (even though buried,) anxiously await your return.
( I think this needs to be reworded - "things" can't "anxiously await")
Please come home(.)**** (need ending punctuation)
Comment Written 17-Feb-2008
Comment from PUPA
I like the way you have written this piece, trying to encourage and uplift a friend. Your words are strong, coming from the heart. You are awaiting her return from despair and inviting the readers to pray for her. How sincere and loving.
I will keep her in my prayers.
I enjoyed reading your heartfelt words.
Love
Pupa
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I like the way you have written this piece, trying to encourage and uplift a friend. Your words are strong, coming from the heart. You are awaiting her return from despair and inviting the readers to pray for her. How sincere and loving.
I will keep her in my prayers.
I enjoyed reading your heartfelt words.
Love
Pupa
Comment Written 17-Feb-2008
Comment from angel of the quill
an excellent poem
how nice to have a friend who remembers or cares
i understand part of what you write
when you say they feel loss
i myself have written the truth of myself too
and a few may see it and a few may not
it is like a cast of a dice in life sometimes
some of us rise up on happy faces
and some of us don't
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an excellent poem
how nice to have a friend who remembers or cares
i understand part of what you write
when you say they feel loss
i myself have written the truth of myself too
and a few may see it and a few may not
it is like a cast of a dice in life sometimes
some of us rise up on happy faces
and some of us don't
Comment Written 17-Feb-2008
Comment from Dreamdancer
Hello my friend,
You have penned a very loving picture. A very inspirational piece that allows the reader to apply it to there life... Wonderful read my friend and thanks for sharing... Dancing in Dreams
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Hello my friend,
You have penned a very loving picture. A very inspirational piece that allows the reader to apply it to there life... Wonderful read my friend and thanks for sharing... Dancing in Dreams
Comment Written 17-Feb-2008
Comment from lerkun
THAT is absolutely beautiful of all the pieces posing as prayer this is so subtly beautiful it's tactful and thoughtful and the end is superb, how very caring. I am very impressed and that doesn't happen too often...
lovely
b well
lerk
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THAT is absolutely beautiful of all the pieces posing as prayer this is so subtly beautiful it's tactful and thoughtful and the end is superb, how very caring. I am very impressed and that doesn't happen too often...
lovely
b well
lerk
Comment Written 17-Feb-2008
Comment from Jill1970
Beautiful piece. Strong message and eloquently written. I was touched by it and think many people in various situations can also connect to it.
My only suggestion is how you have placed your quotes in the first few lines. You're quoting another person (not yourself), I believe, but the quotations start before 'you're' which is not first person.
Overall, I enjoyed it very much.
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Beautiful piece. Strong message and eloquently written. I was touched by it and think many people in various situations can also connect to it.
My only suggestion is how you have placed your quotes in the first few lines. You're quoting another person (not yourself), I believe, but the quotations start before 'you're' which is not first person.
Overall, I enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2008
