When Angels Cry
An old Friend That Needs Everyone's Prayers84 total reviews
Comment from Dutch
It's short, deep and to the point. You can say more, but I don't know if you really can. Maybe we can bring the light to each other in our tribulations of dark seeking adventures. Every little bit helps a little bit.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2008
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It's short, deep and to the point. You can say more, but I don't know if you really can. Maybe we can bring the light to each other in our tribulations of dark seeking adventures. Every little bit helps a little bit.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2008
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hi there thanks so much for stopping...I apologize for the delay in getting back to you this time of year gets absolutely crazy with Cannes coming up we begin our Key Art push for the movies that will be going to Cannes to be sold...long story short...huff, puff...thanks so much for reading and reviewing...i'm very grateful. yours half asleep...diana
Comment from Bryana
Diana, I'm so sorry about your friend , I hope she gets better. I will say a prayer for her, I promise.
I found this a bit confusing...
Looking deep into your opening (open or opened?) eyes.
I can feel the love and pain you feel for your friend. I hope she gets better and read your essay
Hugs,
Ana
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
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Diana, I'm so sorry about your friend , I hope she gets better. I will say a prayer for her, I promise.
I found this a bit confusing...
Looking deep into your opening (open or opened?) eyes.
I can feel the love and pain you feel for your friend. I hope she gets better and read your essay
Hugs,
Ana
Comment Written 21-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
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it was a metaphor...i was looking into her eyes that were being opened up by the knowledge she was gaining...you have heard the phrase that really opened my eyes or that was a real eye opener...thanks for reading yours, diana
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Thank you Diana, I'm always learning something.
Hugs,
Ana
Comment from Rx kingpen
The feelings are intense in this brief write. It read like a prayer, a heartfelt one at that. I have been broken more times than I care to admit. One never knows when it will hit you with your defenses up or down. Thanks for sharing this, sweetheart. Warm hugs. Sincerely. Zack
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
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The feelings are intense in this brief write. It read like a prayer, a heartfelt one at that. I have been broken more times than I care to admit. One never knows when it will hit you with your defenses up or down. Thanks for sharing this, sweetheart. Warm hugs. Sincerely. Zack
Comment Written 21-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
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it is a prayer of love for my friend and sent to her with nothing but love....yours, diana
Comment from clmccready
Well written. No obviously errors. Such a sad cry written from the heart. Well done. Emotions right on top.
Colleen
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
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Well written. No obviously errors. Such a sad cry written from the heart. Well done. Emotions right on top.
Colleen
Comment Written 21-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
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thanks so much colleen...yours, diana
Comment from Buctar
Artasyum:
Very nice and very touching. I enjoyed the read ant the thought it conveyed.
I have a couple of observations--nothing serious at all. See what you think.
Please hear me when I tell you even though you're feeling lost and alone(;) your lost state is just temporary. (This should be a comma instead of a semicolon. A semicolon separates two main clauses not otherwise separated by a coordinating conjunction. This is a subordinate clause followed by a main clause.)
Lost is only half the coin...found is the other. (I think this is a mixed metaphor. Shouldn't it be "the other side of the coin?" Also, when using ellipses, there should be a space before and after the ellipses.) (?The ellipsis, which consists of three periods with a space before and after each is used in the middle of a sentence of dialogue to indicate halting speech, as if the character were unsure of himself or striving to say precisely the right thing or at the end of dialogue to indicate a voice trailing off.? Page 73 Writing Realistic Dialogue and Flash Fiction?Harvey Stanbrough)
You must believe in yourself ...as God believes in you. (Same ellipses as above.)
You are missed...You are loved...Please come home (Same ellipses as above.)
A good read.
Buctar
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
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Artasyum:
Very nice and very touching. I enjoyed the read ant the thought it conveyed.
I have a couple of observations--nothing serious at all. See what you think.
Please hear me when I tell you even though you're feeling lost and alone(;) your lost state is just temporary. (This should be a comma instead of a semicolon. A semicolon separates two main clauses not otherwise separated by a coordinating conjunction. This is a subordinate clause followed by a main clause.)
Lost is only half the coin...found is the other. (I think this is a mixed metaphor. Shouldn't it be "the other side of the coin?" Also, when using ellipses, there should be a space before and after the ellipses.) (?The ellipsis, which consists of three periods with a space before and after each is used in the middle of a sentence of dialogue to indicate halting speech, as if the character were unsure of himself or striving to say precisely the right thing or at the end of dialogue to indicate a voice trailing off.? Page 73 Writing Realistic Dialogue and Flash Fiction?Harvey Stanbrough)
You must believe in yourself ...as God believes in you. (Same ellipses as above.)
You are missed...You are loved...Please come home (Same ellipses as above.)
A good read.
Buctar
Comment Written 21-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
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hi buctar...thanks kiddo for the help and you are correct...it is truly a mixed metaphor...i seem to be the queen of those things...i will correct and correct ellipses as well...always appreciated. yours, diana
Comment from Graceheart
Asylum,
This is such a genuine touch and embrace of your soft heart...You ahve moved each reader to look inside, get on their knees and pray for this lost soul, this broken winged Angel...Thank you for your faith and love penned...it is beautiful and healing...I pray it will aid in the restoration of this person's shattered heart and being...Wonderful read!!! Love the artwork as well, perfect match!
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
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Asylum,
This is such a genuine touch and embrace of your soft heart...You ahve moved each reader to look inside, get on their knees and pray for this lost soul, this broken winged Angel...Thank you for your faith and love penned...it is beautiful and healing...I pray it will aid in the restoration of this person's shattered heart and being...Wonderful read!!! Love the artwork as well, perfect match!
Comment Written 21-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
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thanks so much darkheart...what an inappropriate name for such a bright spirit...yours, diana
Comment from hydeshouse
I find writing in the second person rarely works. I am not mired in the same darkness as the writer, but I would like to know more about it from a first person or third person perspective.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
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I find writing in the second person rarely works. I am not mired in the same darkness as the writer, but I would like to know more about it from a first person or third person perspective.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
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thanks so much yours, diana
Comment from boberto
Emotion write my dear diana.
Couple of questions/comments.
Why the single quotation marks?
Lost is only half the coin...found is the other.
"half" or "side" ?
In much pain---boberto
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
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Emotion write my dear diana.
Couple of questions/comments.
Why the single quotation marks?
Lost is only half the coin...found is the other.
"half" or "side" ?
In much pain---boberto
Comment Written 21-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
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thanks kiddo...you want me to write something special for you? always a joy...yours, diana
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Do I have to ask?
Comment from iamwrite
The only thing more haunting that this artwork is your prose. If this letter doesn't resonate with the recipient, if won't be for lack of content or feeling. I don't know who the letter is for, but that person is lucky indeed to have a friend like you.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
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The only thing more haunting that this artwork is your prose. If this letter doesn't resonate with the recipient, if won't be for lack of content or feeling. I don't know who the letter is for, but that person is lucky indeed to have a friend like you.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
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hi there i am write...thanks so much for your feedback as ever you are the best yours, diana
Comment from Magpiemazy.
No longer able to find my way, I can't go on and no more love to give are some of the hardest words a person can hear. You wrote this with so much love and tenderness, I wept at the loss of happiness this person felt.
My Dad hit that crossroads and took his own life. I wouldn't change one tiny word in this piece. It's wrenchingly sad and at the same time warm and caring.
Hugs,
Maggie
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
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No longer able to find my way, I can't go on and no more love to give are some of the hardest words a person can hear. You wrote this with so much love and tenderness, I wept at the loss of happiness this person felt.
My Dad hit that crossroads and took his own life. I wouldn't change one tiny word in this piece. It's wrenchingly sad and at the same time warm and caring.
Hugs,
Maggie
Comment Written 21-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
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hi there...thanks so much for reading and yuor wonderful review. yours, diana
