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Comment from Gungalo
Rank! We've humans with nominated, elected annual gods
Alas, no more old creations! We're run by our gods now
No! Our gods are public, independent-in-charge; our
Knot of control, management is scientific, machine run
I believe we have already hit the status of rank and that we are living it daily. Too bad for the part of society that says we have not.
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Rank! We've humans with nominated, elected annual gods
Alas, no more old creations! We're run by our gods now
No! Our gods are public, independent-in-charge; our
Knot of control, management is scientific, machine run
I believe we have already hit the status of rank and that we are living it daily. Too bad for the part of society that says we have not.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
Comment from isurp
I like how you started each stanza with the next word in the title "Shouldn't man achieve human rank status" as well as forming an acrostic. Nicely done! "Alas, no more old creation" made me think the Bible verse, "If any man be in Christ he is a new creation, old things are passed away. Behold, everything has become new!"
-Steve
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I like how you started each stanza with the next word in the title "Shouldn't man achieve human rank status" as well as forming an acrostic. Nicely done! "Alas, no more old creation" made me think the Bible verse, "If any man be in Christ he is a new creation, old things are passed away. Behold, everything has become new!"
-Steve
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
Comment from prayingpoet
I can' decide to laugh or cry when I read your (poems?) There were several good phrases in this one: "rules are obsolete" Yes, I agree there! As long as you keep paying to get reviews, I will keep reviewing!
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I can' decide to laugh or cry when I read your (poems?) There were several good phrases in this one: "rules are obsolete" Yes, I agree there! As long as you keep paying to get reviews, I will keep reviewing!
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
Comment from adewpearl
I don't know what you mean by human rank status - aren't men human by definition?
what is a global ministerial workshop?
How are terrorists and bio scientists involved?
certificates are issued - who is issuing certificates? is this a futuristic story?
I can tell you have some social commentary going on here, and I bet you've given it lots of thought, but I wish you communicated it more clearly so I could follow the message. Brooke
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I don't know what you mean by human rank status - aren't men human by definition?
what is a global ministerial workshop?
How are terrorists and bio scientists involved?
certificates are issued - who is issuing certificates? is this a futuristic story?
I can tell you have some social commentary going on here, and I bet you've given it lots of thought, but I wish you communicated it more clearly so I could follow the message. Brooke
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
ah, now this is a tad better, although
methinks you could prune the rant
somewhat.
in the words of Hawkwind, 'we took the
wrong step years ago...'
as far as i'm concerned, we should've
been satisfied with our cave!
regards, eph.
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ah, now this is a tad better, although
methinks you could prune the rant
somewhat.
in the words of Hawkwind, 'we took the
wrong step years ago...'
as far as i'm concerned, we should've
been satisfied with our cave!
regards, eph.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Fluffyhead
Like your satire rant. It says a mouthful. Where can you get this degree handed out by animals I would love to have one. Have a nice day.
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Like your satire rant. It says a mouthful. Where can you get this degree handed out by animals I would love to have one. Have a nice day.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from dmt1967
This is another cool poem I like the way it made me think about man kind very well structured and planned out thank you for sharing well done
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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This is another cool poem I like the way it made me think about man kind very well structured and planned out thank you for sharing well done
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from Gypsy Starchild
Now this one has something to say.... but we all buy into the government and to all of the brain rot on the TVs and internet... so do we deserve human rank status? As far as I can tell, 99.9% of the people are sheep.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Now this one has something to say.... but we all buy into the government and to all of the brain rot on the TVs and internet... so do we deserve human rank status? As far as I can tell, 99.9% of the people are sheep.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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thanks for excellent and commendable review
Comment from CR Delport
I think if you look at humanity as whole from a distance, it is actually quite scary who we are. Consumption and destruction seem to follow where ever we go.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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I think if you look at humanity as whole from a distance, it is actually quite scary who we are. Consumption and destruction seem to follow where ever we go.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from Galactia
This is very boldn of you and not so easy to do, I really liked your (Shouldn't Man Achieve Human Rank Status) accrostic poem. I would like to of seen this done more poetically, even though you have done it, prety streight forward to me, may be confussing for others, just how you have chosen your wordings or Metaphores.
We are acting like Gods, creating babies in labs, I;m wondering if youyr reffering to buying robots that are like humans on line or reflecting actual humans. I do find the bio scientist part funny.
This part here...
The certified humans are issued under seals?
Are these humanoid robots or humans with chip with identification. I'd really like to know what your reffering to, it's sounds interesting.
I can see in the last stanza your reflecting something along the lines of Rosicrucian, you would rather see the government take hold of the money then the feds. I think most are with you on that.
great job, I'm really interested to here your true interpretation. especially thge certificate man with seal, sounds scarry.
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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This is very boldn of you and not so easy to do, I really liked your (Shouldn't Man Achieve Human Rank Status) accrostic poem. I would like to of seen this done more poetically, even though you have done it, prety streight forward to me, may be confussing for others, just how you have chosen your wordings or Metaphores.
We are acting like Gods, creating babies in labs, I;m wondering if youyr reffering to buying robots that are like humans on line or reflecting actual humans. I do find the bio scientist part funny.
This part here...
The certified humans are issued under seals?
Are these humanoid robots or humans with chip with identification. I'd really like to know what your reffering to, it's sounds interesting.
I can see in the last stanza your reflecting something along the lines of Rosicrucian, you would rather see the government take hold of the money then the feds. I think most are with you on that.
great job, I'm really interested to here your true interpretation. especially thge certificate man with seal, sounds scarry.
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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thanks for detailed commendable review
