Comment from Michael Wayne

Good

The sentiment is interesting, but I could not help thinking through the entire piece that I was reading something that had been translated into English. The broken rhythm here was distracting from the message more often than not.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013

THANKS.

Comment from Caressa_08

Excellent

I believe there are some who this doesn't quite make sense to them..I had to read this at least twice, to try to get a a better understanding & that this poem does make sense, Human, for you is better because it denotes, that we see God & his nature, that should work through us...Man is not the one to see God as he is, because of his own gods that you have written about in this poem distort him..From what can happen in the womb, to the schooling, the Internet, to people in management..Examples given of how this comes about in a manner that is not the right way; God's way..

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2013

Comment from Deniz22

Excellent

Status! Yours is traditional, orthodox, unexplained!
The infinite offers, mystic controls! Enough, thanks!
And the unseen, unwritten systems, rules are obsolete!
The age-old, mysterious, monopoly governance, thanks!
Under our human generation next, we'll enjoy judicious
Systems, the best control measures unlike yours, O God!

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2013

Comment from words

Needs Improvement

This write makes no sense to me.

Man is human from birth ... I don't understand your opening premise.

I have read each line and they do not hang together in a coherent whole.

You seem very passionate about something here, but I have no idea what it is.

It really seems like English is not your native language. Have you put a foreign language poem through an internet translator and just posted it here?

Sorry, I just do not know what you are going for.

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 Comment Written 25-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013

THANKS.

Comment from Selina Stambi

Good

I'm not sure how pigs, dogs, monkeys are awarded certificates.

I wish I could understand exactly what you are trying to say.

I will continue to review, of course.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013

THANKS.

Comment from Child of the King

Excellent

I must honestly comment that this is one I do not completely understand and I hesitate to put in my two cents worth when I may not know what I am talking about and thus get you all riled up. Suffice it to say, that I would learn more sitting at your feet, than reading it on paper.
That is a compliment because I believe you have an I.Q that triples mine. :-) Peace

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2013

Comment from Harlequin

Excellent

A truly thought-provoking and very well written piece of poetry with great imagery and a sadly very recent subject. A great effort and a great poem. Well done and thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2013

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

Oh Life is well written and clever. "Shouldn't man achieve human rank status" with each word starting the stanza and also forming an acrostic. Nicely done!

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2013

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes this is well written my friend and I liked the humor expressed in this work well done this is also well presented regards Jill

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2013

Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran

Excellent

thanks for sharing your well written article. THE WORDS AND THE IMAGERY BLENDED WELL TOGETHER. I ENJOYED READING YOU SCRIPT. tHANKS. MARY

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2013