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Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Shouldn't Man Achieve Human Rank Status?"Experiences of living
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Comment from smudge
I would describe this as bordering on flash fiction. It is something to think about. The stating of the obvious in a more powerful way.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I would describe this as bordering on flash fiction. It is something to think about. The stating of the obvious in a more powerful way.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from Nebukadneser
Wow! Another pearl of wisdom from your heart. This is well written and contains so many gems I read it a few times to get a feel for it so I could absorb all the wisdom it contains.
Well done, my friend
You're a super creation
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Wow! Another pearl of wisdom from your heart. This is well written and contains so many gems I read it a few times to get a feel for it so I could absorb all the wisdom it contains.
Well done, my friend
You're a super creation
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for excellent professional review
Comment from God's Writer
You are very prolific in your writing. Keep writing. I am enjoying your poems very much. You have a very vivid imagination and paint vivid word pictures. Thank you
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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You are very prolific in your writing. Keep writing. I am enjoying your poems very much. You have a very vivid imagination and paint vivid word pictures. Thank you
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from kiwisteveh
I am happy to admit that I am reviewing your poems mostly because I nrrd the member dollars and your pieces are offering big rewards - thank you. You will certainly get noticed by promoting your poems heavily.
However, this poem, like most of your others is very confused, the language is unnecessarily complicated and there is little in the way of poetic devices to keep the reader's attention, especially since the poem is very long (again)
As far as I can make out, your point is that your new way of creating humans is better than the traditional way - whether you are talking about test-tube life or cloning or something else is impossible to tell - most people here will instantly dismiss this as nonsense - perhaps you are being satirical - who can tell?
Steve
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I am happy to admit that I am reviewing your poems mostly because I nrrd the member dollars and your pieces are offering big rewards - thank you. You will certainly get noticed by promoting your poems heavily.
However, this poem, like most of your others is very confused, the language is unnecessarily complicated and there is little in the way of poetic devices to keep the reader's attention, especially since the poem is very long (again)
As far as I can make out, your point is that your new way of creating humans is better than the traditional way - whether you are talking about test-tube life or cloning or something else is impossible to tell - most people here will instantly dismiss this as nonsense - perhaps you are being satirical - who can tell?
Steve
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks
Comment from Dave Russell
Holy smokes! What in the hell was all that? Maybe you believe that you are some kind of existential Einstein or something, but the whole point of writing is to be understood. I found this to be chaotic, rambling, and bizarre.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Holy smokes! What in the hell was all that? Maybe you believe that you are some kind of existential Einstein or something, but the whole point of writing is to be understood. I found this to be chaotic, rambling, and bizarre.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks
Comment from Kingsland
Human beings don't deserve any status. They haven't done anything as of yet to deserve a status rating, unless it's a very bad rating. This was a very interesting piece of poetic art. It was well written with a good vocabulary. I enjoyed reading it... Alien of a suffocating nature who knows the failings of mankind.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Human beings don't deserve any status. They haven't done anything as of yet to deserve a status rating, unless it's a very bad rating. This was a very interesting piece of poetic art. It was well written with a good vocabulary. I enjoyed reading it... Alien of a suffocating nature who knows the failings of mankind.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for nice professional review
Comment from amahra
I would suggest that you use "The Book is dedicated to mankind," as your subtitle; and use your author notes to give a very short (5 sentences) summary of what the poem is about. I think there's a cultural barrier here. And I hate for you to keep getting bad ratings. Hope that helps. I did read it twice by the way.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I would suggest that you use "The Book is dedicated to mankind," as your subtitle; and use your author notes to give a very short (5 sentences) summary of what the poem is about. I think there's a cultural barrier here. And I hate for you to keep getting bad ratings. Hope that helps. I did read it twice by the way.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
"And the unseen, unwritten systems, rules are obsolete!" And we go back to the survival of the fittest. Man could not survive a day without God. It is unfortunate that his ego doesn't let him see that truth.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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"And the unseen, unwritten systems, rules are obsolete!" And we go back to the survival of the fittest. Man could not survive a day without God. It is unfortunate that his ego doesn't let him see that truth.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
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You are welcome. MN :)
Comment from Cornetist
Well, at least you have the acrostic right...but the rest - ??? MAybe I just can't grasp your style but I see nothing but incoherence and I can't find anyplace to suggest corrections or re=writes. Maybe it's a language barrier? Are your poems (?) written in a language other that english and then translated literally? I don't get it!
Cornetist
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Well, at least you have the acrostic right...but the rest - ??? MAybe I just can't grasp your style but I see nothing but incoherence and I can't find anyplace to suggest corrections or re=writes. Maybe it's a language barrier? Are your poems (?) written in a language other that english and then translated literally? I don't get it!
Cornetist
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks
Comment from muezza56
this made an interesting and hard-hitting piece of prose on the frailties of mankind. although i found the flow was a bit chaotic, in a quirky way it supported the subject matter
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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this made an interesting and hard-hitting piece of prose on the frailties of mankind. although i found the flow was a bit chaotic, in a quirky way it supported the subject matter
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
