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Comment from Badger_29
How can I not write a fair review? Your juxtaposition of what's real and what's not real is abounding of flavor and bursting with exuberance and newness of life.
I'm so sorry if I don't read your instructions, or follow your rules real well I'm just a struggling Pilgrim on the spaceship planet earth!
It all comes from the sun, parentheses (Son), and all goodness can be tracked back to that.
Even mushrooms which grow in the dark feed off of decayed material that was once growing in the sun.
So what else is there to say? If He be for us, who can be against us?
Thank you so much for your continued friendship and support here, you are a great mentor mentor or it's spelled it twice this thing really does hear me hear me.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
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How can I not write a fair review? Your juxtaposition of what's real and what's not real is abounding of flavor and bursting with exuberance and newness of life.
I'm so sorry if I don't read your instructions, or follow your rules real well I'm just a struggling Pilgrim on the spaceship planet earth!
It all comes from the sun, parentheses (Son), and all goodness can be tracked back to that.
Even mushrooms which grow in the dark feed off of decayed material that was once growing in the sun.
So what else is there to say? If He be for us, who can be against us?
Thank you so much for your continued friendship and support here, you are a great mentor mentor or it's spelled it twice this thing really does hear me hear me.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
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Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
Comment from Susan Larson
I like your series of questions in this poem, causing the reader to pause for at least a moment after each line. And I love your ending "serve as the sun reaches your doors equally."
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I like your series of questions in this poem, causing the reader to pause for at least a moment after each line. And I love your ending "serve as the sun reaches your doors equally."
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Some fine advice here about what it is to be human and how we can improve our behaviour and give love to our fellow men, much enjoyed . . . love Dolly x
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Some fine advice here about what it is to be human and how we can improve our behaviour and give love to our fellow men, much enjoyed . . . love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
Comment from Janetsue
I wish The Golden Rule was still being taught in public schools. Imagine how wonderful the world would be if everyone would take it personally. You write very interesting free verse poems with strong messages.
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I wish The Golden Rule was still being taught in public schools. Imagine how wonderful the world would be if everyone would take it personally. You write very interesting free verse poems with strong messages.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
Comment from lancellot
Yes, this is free verse, free of rhyme, a modified acrostic and written with an certain artistic license to allow your thoughts to flow freely. And there is nothing wrong with that. The issues comes when the artist wants to communicate those free flowing thoughts to others. For proper communication between people, there must be a shared language and understanding of words and structures.
This style only works effectively if the two minds (speaker and reader) are both on the same page. But, that is almost impossible.
I would recommend a more standard approach if the message you want to share is more important than the method you want to speak.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Yes, this is free verse, free of rhyme, a modified acrostic and written with an certain artistic license to allow your thoughts to flow freely. And there is nothing wrong with that. The issues comes when the artist wants to communicate those free flowing thoughts to others. For proper communication between people, there must be a shared language and understanding of words and structures.
This style only works effectively if the two minds (speaker and reader) are both on the same page. But, that is almost impossible.
I would recommend a more standard approach if the message you want to share is more important than the method you want to speak.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you, thank you and thank you for reading my work and writing your recommendation in your review.
I do appreciate your wisdom, may be you have thought of well, but it is easiest to speak or recommend than doing or giving example, I mean, it is easier said than doing, for we know, example is better than precept.
Somehow you have tried to prove you are wiser but you have neither been able to show nor prove the level or stand of your wisdom by not showing or giving an example with your recommendation.
That is why I appreciate your wisdom apparently though it is not practical; anyway, I thank you once again for offering your wise recommendation but, truly or professionally speaking, I do not understand your recommendation in want of any example, for you have not given any example with the recommendation in a word.
I have no hesitation to write the truth, your recommendation is not practical and sure enough, it is neither fruitful nor helpful.
So, your recommendation without example is meaningless to me, as you being a wise writer would appreciate for I cannot improve my art, style or mode of expression after reading just a casual word without any example.
Please excuse me for writing the true feeling and words with example and illustration or description to help you understand my point.
Wish you every success in your chosen goal,
With the kindest personal regards,
God bless you,
Sincerely yours,
ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
13/06/2021
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Comment from Begin Again
Another lofty presentation for me to try and draw some understanding from. God is first and he created us all equal expecting us to treat all the world as such. We are not to consider ourselves above anyone else. Smiles, Carol
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Another lofty presentation for me to try and draw some understanding from. God is first and he created us all equal expecting us to treat all the world as such. We are not to consider ourselves above anyone else. Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
Comment from Bloomer Burbs
ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
Another classic by your good self. Not really sure what you are trying to say though.
Serve selfless; doesn't the Invisible Eye keep vigil?
Earmark service to international community like the sun
Religion is impersonal; does God certify any 'best'?
Vouch nothing selfishly; Let a dog, ant or pig do
Each humane service is part to your destined mission
Take care, Pete
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ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
Another classic by your good self. Not really sure what you are trying to say though.
Serve selfless; doesn't the Invisible Eye keep vigil?
Earmark service to international community like the sun
Religion is impersonal; does God certify any 'best'?
Vouch nothing selfishly; Let a dog, ant or pig do
Each humane service is part to your destined mission
Take care, Pete
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
Comment from jake cosmos aller
man I love your work. So profound and deep. and the use of language is intense. a couple of lines stand out
Tax nothing immoral; does wind retire or tax you?
No personalization; serve as the sun reaches your doors equally
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man I love your work. So profound and deep. and the use of language is intense. a couple of lines stand out
Tax nothing immoral; does wind retire or tax you?
No personalization; serve as the sun reaches your doors equally
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
Comment from Sandra C. Johnston
Your central is quite understandable. I found some of the word that you use made me lose the feel of 'flow' I believe that you intended interrupted by words that I felt that I had to read over a few times. I ended up trying to get back into the free flow of your ideas by having to start and stop. I found that somewhat irritating and somewhat Chaucerian. I did feel your passion for the subject once I got back into the flow each time. I admire your tenacity.
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Your central is quite understandable. I found some of the word that you use made me lose the feel of 'flow' I believe that you intended interrupted by words that I felt that I had to read over a few times. I ended up trying to get back into the free flow of your ideas by having to start and stop. I found that somewhat irritating and somewhat Chaucerian. I did feel your passion for the subject once I got back into the flow each time. I admire your tenacity.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
Humanity is defined as; compassionate, sympathetic, or generous behaviour: the quality or state of being humane; the quality or state of being human. People become highly educated. But not human! As Gandhi said "Humanity is an ocean; if a few drops of the ocean are dirty, the ocean does not become dirty." Thanks for sharing a philosophical poem.
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Humanity is defined as; compassionate, sympathetic, or generous behaviour: the quality or state of being humane; the quality or state of being human. People become highly educated. But not human! As Gandhi said "Humanity is an ocean; if a few drops of the ocean are dirty, the ocean does not become dirty." Thanks for sharing a philosophical poem.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
