Oh Life!
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "O Bards!"Experiences of living
103 total reviews
Comment from Ira White
really nice work! The imagery is so vivid. The idea of a "white" message being carried mutely by a flower is superb. The mixing of the color white with other senses is effective and evocative.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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really nice work! The imagery is so vivid. The idea of a "white" message being carried mutely by a flower is superb. The mixing of the color white with other senses is effective and evocative.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for nice review
Comment from MizKat
ALCREATOR LITT RAY D - This is a really good poem. It's written well and is interesting too. If that is your picture I pictured you all wrong in my mind. I saw you as a brilliant old man and here you are a brilliant young man. Kat
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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ALCREATOR LITT RAY D - This is a really good poem. It's written well and is interesting too. If that is your picture I pictured you all wrong in my mind. I saw you as a brilliant old man and here you are a brilliant young man. Kat
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from donaldww
The hoary bards of this poem extract whiteness, then give life in words. That amounts to an infinite number of mortal lessons, poured from the tiny petals.
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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The hoary bards of this poem extract whiteness, then give life in words. That amounts to an infinite number of mortal lessons, poured from the tiny petals.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer does a good job of describing the atmosphere of the piece. The writer taps into the mind of the reader forcing the reader to feel the impact of the message. The message is clear and well delivered.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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The writer does a good job of describing the atmosphere of the piece. The writer taps into the mind of the reader forcing the reader to feel the impact of the message. The message is clear and well delivered.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review I like
Comment from mizzkris20
I really like your poem. It is written to express appreciation to the one who made all that we see/have possible. Great job writing this. Smiles!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I really like your poem. It is written to express appreciation to the one who made all that we see/have possible. Great job writing this. Smiles!
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from Perp Ihebom
I like the feel of this poem that is written to express appreciation to the one who made everything we see. I love the third line of the first stanza. It is so very profound. very well done
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I like the feel of this poem that is written to express appreciation to the one who made everything we see. I love the third line of the first stanza. It is so very profound. very well done
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from JM daSilva
Tulip, flowers, interesting how humans never ate them, as far as I know, but they influence us so. Now they are used for perfume. But what about before? They offered beauty.
I don't now whether you care about grammar in poem, but if you do, I have an editing suggestion for you. If you don't, please let me know, I won't do it again.
For awhile
'For a while' or 'awhile', but not 'for awhile'.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Tulip, flowers, interesting how humans never ate them, as far as I know, but they influence us so. Now they are used for perfume. But what about before? They offered beauty.
I don't now whether you care about grammar in poem, but if you do, I have an editing suggestion for you. If you don't, please let me know, I won't do it again.
For awhile
'For a while' or 'awhile', but not 'for awhile'.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for excellent suggestive review
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Welcome.
Comment from amahra
I still think you should use your author notes to help the reader get a grasp on just what it is your trying to convey. Just my opinion.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I still think you should use your author notes to help the reader get a grasp on just what it is your trying to convey. Just my opinion.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks
Comment from Healthyheartpoet
This is a poem that stirs the mind, to search for true meaning in these well crafted words. The work flows well and has a positive cadence. Each individual has to draw his own impression, likely to be diverse.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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This is a poem that stirs the mind, to search for true meaning in these well crafted words. The work flows well and has a positive cadence. Each individual has to draw his own impression, likely to be diverse.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks
Comment from ravenblack
did you win the lotto or something? anyway, this is much more focused than the last poem of yours I reviewed and as such, is a much stronger read. like "...extract whiteness, give life in words". words in poetry are their most sacred usage.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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did you win the lotto or something? anyway, this is much more focused than the last poem of yours I reviewed and as such, is a much stronger read. like "...extract whiteness, give life in words". words in poetry are their most sacred usage.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
