Oh Life!
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Comment from Janet Foor
Interesting and unusual piece.
I have difficulty understanding some of your poems.
They may be at a deeper level than I am comfortable with at this time.
I wish you blessings and peace.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Interesting and unusual piece.
I have difficulty understanding some of your poems.
They may be at a deeper level than I am comfortable with at this time.
I wish you blessings and peace.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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thanks for nice review
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I read this through twice before
I understood it clearly - the
first stanza is rich with imagery
and flows really well.
But wretched minds then busy in occupation, belly earning - excuse my ignorance - but I can't grasp the meaning of this line.
Margaret
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I read this through twice before
I understood it clearly - the
first stanza is rich with imagery
and flows really well.
But wretched minds then busy in occupation, belly earning - excuse my ignorance - but I can't grasp the meaning of this line.
Margaret
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Nebukadneser
How is it possible that I've ran out of six stars for this gem of knowledge shared in poetic language. Whatever life deals to us, we must extract the wisdom and knowledge like the bards do, or else we will stay in darkness,
Well done
you're a star
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
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How is it possible that I've ran out of six stars for this gem of knowledge shared in poetic language. Whatever life deals to us, we must extract the wisdom and knowledge like the bards do, or else we will stay in darkness,
Well done
you're a star
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Mai Mai
This is an interesting piece. It gives pause to thought while displaying a nice duality. Good work and good luck.
Mai Mai
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This is an interesting piece. It gives pause to thought while displaying a nice duality. Good work and good luck.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Papabearua
The struggle between good (white) and evil (black) is older than the story of man himself.
I read you poem several times and found it to be eclectic in its organization. The message is there but it requires some digging to find it.
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The struggle between good (white) and evil (black) is older than the story of man himself.
I read you poem several times and found it to be eclectic in its organization. The message is there but it requires some digging to find it.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from steevie
This is some of the deepest writing that I've read on this site. I kind of get the general gist of it, but it leaves much to the imagination.
steve
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This is some of the deepest writing that I've read on this site. I kind of get the general gist of it, but it leaves much to the imagination.
steve
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Disjointed surreal fractured imagery partakes of the mind where in the forces of white (presumably good) battle the forces of dark, black (presumed to be evil) in the eternal battle of wills raging in all of us. Scratch the skin of any so called 'civilized' man and the 'beast' lurking just below the skin's epidermal layer will be exposed, erupting into lust, greed, and violence. Another great effort.
Regards:
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Disjointed surreal fractured imagery partakes of the mind where in the forces of white (presumably good) battle the forces of dark, black (presumed to be evil) in the eternal battle of wills raging in all of us. Scratch the skin of any so called 'civilized' man and the 'beast' lurking just below the skin's epidermal layer will be exposed, erupting into lust, greed, and violence. Another great effort.
Regards:
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from dmt1967
This is a very good poem I like the way it is presented ad planned out I like the background color and the style that is used thank you for sharing
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This is a very good poem I like the way it is presented ad planned out I like the background color and the style that is used thank you for sharing
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from cvcopac
I had no trouble understanding this one and found the language fresh and creative--style too. A beautiful tribute, a good explanation, and advice. Kenny
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I had no trouble understanding this one and found the language fresh and creative--style too. A beautiful tribute, a good explanation, and advice. Kenny
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Taffspride
Some good imagery here as in "tiny white petals" and:"When bloomed, graced hearts take essence".
I wonder however why you feel the need to use so many exclamation marks (!) They detract significantly from the work. One, or no more than two is more than adequate.
The work would benefit from the use of enjambment. All of your lines read as separate thoughts, which does not make for ease of reading.
I see you have many works highly promoted on this page, perhaps others are better. I shall check them out.
Iechyd da
Taffspride
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Some good imagery here as in "tiny white petals" and:"When bloomed, graced hearts take essence".
I wonder however why you feel the need to use so many exclamation marks (!) They detract significantly from the work. One, or no more than two is more than adequate.
The work would benefit from the use of enjambment. All of your lines read as separate thoughts, which does not make for ease of reading.
I see you have many works highly promoted on this page, perhaps others are better. I shall check them out.
Iechyd da
Taffspride
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
