Oh Life!
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "O Bards!"Experiences of living
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Comment from Doc Holiday
You're losing me again with this one, but I'll give you more for effort on this one with all of your flowery language. It sounds impressive, but doesn't inspire any emotions with more direct meaning.
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You're losing me again with this one, but I'll give you more for effort on this one with all of your flowery language. It sounds impressive, but doesn't inspire any emotions with more direct meaning.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Selina Stambi
I'm beginning to feel like I'm really missing something here, Al.
There are individual phrases that are well strung and vivid.
I wish I understood what I was reviewing.
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I'm beginning to feel like I'm really missing something here, Al.
There are individual phrases that are well strung and vivid.
I wish I understood what I was reviewing.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from write hand blue
The yellow background is well matched with the green font. I've given you five stars this time because I understand some of the lines. But any overall message eludes me...
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The yellow background is well matched with the green font. I've given you five stars this time because I understand some of the lines. But any overall message eludes me...
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from Keri353
Wow, this is a very nice piece. So many minds get lost in "busy occupation" and can lose sight of what is important. Thanks so much for sharing this wonderful piece. Blessings, Keri
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Wow, this is a very nice piece. So many minds get lost in "busy occupation" and can lose sight of what is important. Thanks so much for sharing this wonderful piece. Blessings, Keri
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
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you are welcome
Comment from Dawn Munro
You have strung together some fabulous word choices in this poem, but I am afraid I was unable to understand what it was you were trying to say. Even metaphor should lead your reader to some sort of comprehension, although it might not match the author's. I am wondering, perhaps, if English is not your first language and the poem has suffered in translation. In any event, it is certainly comprised of poetic language and is a wonderful attempt.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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You have strung together some fabulous word choices in this poem, but I am afraid I was unable to understand what it was you were trying to say. Even metaphor should lead your reader to some sort of comprehension, although it might not match the author's. I am wondering, perhaps, if English is not your first language and the poem has suffered in translation. In any event, it is certainly comprised of poetic language and is a wonderful attempt.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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thanks
Comment from Katniss Everdeen
This piece had great flow to it. The language was immaculate and the structure of this poem fit well. I especially liked the line:
When bloomed, graced hearts take essence, oh fate!
Very well done piece.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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This piece had great flow to it. The language was immaculate and the structure of this poem fit well. I especially liked the line:
When bloomed, graced hearts take essence, oh fate!
Very well done piece.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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thanks for nice review
Comment from words
I have a difficult time understanding what you are trying to say in your poem.
It reads like English is not your first language and seems like your original words were put through an online language translator and the translation does not to justice to your intentions.
Have taken a peek at the rest of your posts and thy all seem to suffer from this awkwardness of language. Rather than mark down all of your efforts and, I can see that you have put a lot of time , effort and thought into your work, I will not be reviewing any more of them.
I can tell that you are a well-meaning and thoughtful person who is trying to convey something important ... it is just that you English language skills are not yet at a level where your work can be successful.
Perhaps, if you just posted one poem at a time and concentrated on getting it perfect, you work could progress faster.
I do applaud your efforts.
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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I have a difficult time understanding what you are trying to say in your poem.
It reads like English is not your first language and seems like your original words were put through an online language translator and the translation does not to justice to your intentions.
Have taken a peek at the rest of your posts and thy all seem to suffer from this awkwardness of language. Rather than mark down all of your efforts and, I can see that you have put a lot of time , effort and thought into your work, I will not be reviewing any more of them.
I can tell that you are a well-meaning and thoughtful person who is trying to convey something important ... it is just that you English language skills are not yet at a level where your work can be successful.
Perhaps, if you just posted one poem at a time and concentrated on getting it perfect, you work could progress faster.
I do applaud your efforts.
Hugs, d
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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thanks for trying so hard...
your wisdom sparks from your words...
you must be great reviewer...
with due honour i request you
please stop reviewing my works
please escape me...
i feel sick with your words...
so you have reviewed my works last in your life
please stop reviewing me any more...
wishing you every success in your reviewing goal...
wishing you best of luck...
Comment from CR Delport
A very lovely poem that is well written and very well delivered. Your words are carefully selected to give the right message. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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A very lovely poem that is well written and very well delivered. Your words are carefully selected to give the right message. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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thanks for creative review
Comment from Auroraboreal800
This is a brand new style for me... However, I found it very interesting, with flows and cadence. I really enjoyed it! I think the poem is plentiful and well described.
GOOD JOB Alcreator!
:)
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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This is a brand new style for me... However, I found it very interesting, with flows and cadence. I really enjoyed it! I think the poem is plentiful and well described.
GOOD JOB Alcreator!
:)
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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thanks for excellent review
Comment from FLutterodt
Fragrance, His Gifted Grace, color and beauty
Infinite mortal lessons poured in tiny white petals
O tulip! You carry His White Message, so mute!
A very interesting poem about a tulip; a beautiful flower. It seems metaphorical to me and I will revisit to get its greater meaning. Well done
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Fragrance, His Gifted Grace, color and beauty
Infinite mortal lessons poured in tiny white petals
O tulip! You carry His White Message, so mute!
A very interesting poem about a tulip; a beautiful flower. It seems metaphorical to me and I will revisit to get its greater meaning. Well done
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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thanks for nice review
