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Comment from Lulube
To tell you the truth, I'm not literate enough to fully understand your poem. I do see all the descriptive passages that left me confused. I am not knocking down your poem at all. This is my fault not interpreting the words to do your poem justice.
Sorry
Lulube
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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To tell you the truth, I'm not literate enough to fully understand your poem. I do see all the descriptive passages that left me confused. I am not knocking down your poem at all. This is my fault not interpreting the words to do your poem justice.
Sorry
Lulube
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
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welcome
lulube
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
Beautiful- though bit of a riddle here. You use the white tulip to describe how mankind uses the purity and lesson from God, presented in a tulip. The unwise will not learn anything from this white tulip, going his way, ignoring the beauty, ignoring God- as his only interests lie in earning money and feeding himself on the darker things in life. The wise bard will find the beauty, extracting all it has to offer, sharing his wisdom with all mankind.
Thank you for sharing this. Message received. Betty
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Beautiful- though bit of a riddle here. You use the white tulip to describe how mankind uses the purity and lesson from God, presented in a tulip. The unwise will not learn anything from this white tulip, going his way, ignoring the beauty, ignoring God- as his only interests lie in earning money and feeding himself on the darker things in life. The wise bard will find the beauty, extracting all it has to offer, sharing his wisdom with all mankind.
Thank you for sharing this. Message received. Betty
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for nice excellent review
Comment from Just2Write
I read this poem a few times, and although the words have a feeling of beauty and flow well, I'm not sure I pulled any meaning out of them. More importantly, I'm not sure what the words meant to the writer.
What does " Wise bards drink white to the lee" mean?
Lee is the sheltered side from the wind - is there another meaning?
What does it mean to be busy in belly earning?
Poetry must not only work for the writer, but the reader as well.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I read this poem a few times, and although the words have a feeling of beauty and flow well, I'm not sure I pulled any meaning out of them. More importantly, I'm not sure what the words meant to the writer.
What does " Wise bards drink white to the lee" mean?
Lee is the sheltered side from the wind - is there another meaning?
What does it mean to be busy in belly earning?
Poetry must not only work for the writer, but the reader as well.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from Kit Parker
I am not familiar with this style of poetry so I broke it down into individual lines in an attempt to explore the symbolisms it puts forth.
I recognized the wisdom in the purity of "white," and how it is offered in the beautiful - yet mute - "tulip," which in turn seems to symbolize God's creation - nature in all her splendid glory. The tulip offers insights - even a conduit to God's incredible power and holiness that only nature can convey but that the "wretched minds" (a.k.a. mankind) seem so intent on ignoring.
I especially liked the symbols you used in the second stanza for the man/woman who is so busy earning a living that they miss out on actually living.
Although I am not familiar with the style of poetry you used here I am still impressed with your use of symbolism to convey concepts and ideas. This took a bit of work for me to draw from but I believe I am better off for the effort. Perhaps, like the wise bards in the last stanza, I have managed to extract a bit of whiteness (wisdom) from your words. - PEACE -
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I am not familiar with this style of poetry so I broke it down into individual lines in an attempt to explore the symbolisms it puts forth.
I recognized the wisdom in the purity of "white," and how it is offered in the beautiful - yet mute - "tulip," which in turn seems to symbolize God's creation - nature in all her splendid glory. The tulip offers insights - even a conduit to God's incredible power and holiness that only nature can convey but that the "wretched minds" (a.k.a. mankind) seem so intent on ignoring.
I especially liked the symbols you used in the second stanza for the man/woman who is so busy earning a living that they miss out on actually living.
Although I am not familiar with the style of poetry you used here I am still impressed with your use of symbolism to convey concepts and ideas. This took a bit of work for me to draw from but I believe I am better off for the effort. Perhaps, like the wise bards in the last stanza, I have managed to extract a bit of whiteness (wisdom) from your words. - PEACE -
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks
Comment from robina1978
I keep on stumbling on your poems and they are all equally good. I don't think you use a special form but they sound good. This one about flowers and God.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I keep on stumbling on your poems and they are all equally good. I don't think you use a special form but they sound good. This one about flowers and God.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
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welcome to all. I asked Tom but that got me nowhere, Ine
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi ALCREATOR LITT RAY D
Interesting form and a strong rhythm to this poem. You invoke some interesting imagery in your lines and put your message across very well.
Patrick
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Hi ALCREATOR LITT RAY D
Interesting form and a strong rhythm to this poem. You invoke some interesting imagery in your lines and put your message across very well.
Patrick
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from Black_Oxygen
I like the flow and cadence of this piece. It held
my interest from start to finish. The emotions are
plentiful and well described. Thank Your of sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I like the flow and cadence of this piece. It held
my interest from start to finish. The emotions are
plentiful and well described. Thank Your of sharing.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is very well written my friend some very imagery enclosed based around the tulip well done I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Yes this is very well written my friend some very imagery enclosed based around the tulip well done I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from mauial
What I get from this piecs is that we should work to extract the whiteness or purity of God's clean truth and share it. Nicely written.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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What I get from this piecs is that we should work to extract the whiteness or purity of God's clean truth and share it. Nicely written.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from October21
The tulip is so well-described. Perhaps some artwork of one would have done nicely although the imagery is strong enough without it. You connect with the reader well, enticing them until the end. Loved the religious content also.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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The tulip is so well-described. Perhaps some artwork of one would have done nicely although the imagery is strong enough without it. You connect with the reader well, enticing them until the end. Loved the religious content also.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for fair review
