Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

their children
watch from around the corner---
tearful tears fall

random thought after reading lol

a great senryu
deeply thought-provoking with smooth flow and line connection
i liked the juxtaposition between a storm and a couple fighting
no spag or typos

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2025

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025

Thank you very much 😊

Gypsy

Comment from RJ Heritage

Excellent

I think that no other force in nature explains so well the dynamic of a fight like a storm does. Very well we written poem with good metaphorical expression.
Thanks for sharing.
RJ

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2025

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025

Thank you very much 😊

Gypsy

reply by RJ Heritage on 03-Apr-2025

You're welcome
RJ

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this fine senryu with its imaginative imagery of fiery argument lighting up the room. I like the blending of nature's anger with that of of human nature. Well done! Debbie

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2025

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025

Thank you very much 😊

Gypsy

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

That's so sad. The hardest thing about those "tempestuous storms" between a couple is that often there are kids who are fearing for their future as they hear the fighting of their parents.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2025

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025

That's true. I thought about adding the kids but decided to leave it. So far, all the reviewers came up with the.children conclusion.

Thank you very much, big sister 🙏 💙

Love,

Marival

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

I like how your poem shares the tension of both the storm outside and the emotional storm within. The way you showed nature's fury and the couple's conflict is perfect. The word "tempestuous" sets the tone so well.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2025

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025

Thank you very much 😊

Gypsy