2025 Japanese Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Cold Full Moon".
4 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Many congrats, MariVal, on your latest contest win and I believe you had another. There are no life-giving sunshine rays here. Just a cold moon and a frigid wind (I love that second line) reflecting the death of a love that once held such hope. Beautifully done! Debbie
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Many congrats, MariVal, on your latest contest win and I believe you had another. There are no life-giving sunshine rays here. Just a cold moon and a frigid wind (I love that second line) reflecting the death of a love that once held such hope. Beautifully done! Debbie
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Thank you! I appreciate your encouragement and felicitation 😊
Gypsy
Gypsy 😊
Comment from RJ Heritage
Love that is not reciprocated can indeed be cold like a frigid front of indifference. I like your metaphorical expressions and your use of black and white that bring home the effects quite dramatically.
RJ
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Love that is not reciprocated can indeed be cold like a frigid front of indifference. I like your metaphorical expressions and your use of black and white that bring home the effects quite dramatically.
RJ
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Thank you very much,
Gypsy 😊
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My pleasure
RJ
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem is beautifully written. The wind and the cold moon creates such a chilling atmosphere. I especially love "where my wishful love dies" - it's heartbreaking. The shortness of your poem I think makes it even more powerful. Stunning writing!
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Your poem is beautifully written. The wind and the cold moon creates such a chilling atmosphere. I especially love "where my wishful love dies" - it's heartbreaking. The shortness of your poem I think makes it even more powerful. Stunning writing!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Michael,
Thank you very much for your excellent five stars review and kind words 😊
Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
This flows like a tanka with the setting so perfectly done with the night holding on the wind's "coattails" and the personification of the hiding moon transition to the narrator's plight letting go of the love she knows cannot be.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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This flows like a tanka with the setting so perfectly done with the night holding on the wind's "coattails" and the personification of the hiding moon transition to the narrator's plight letting go of the love she knows cannot be.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words 😊 big sister. It is composition but without syllables limit. I love gogyohka poems
Love,
Marival ❤️
