Insane
Happening in an abandoned asylum26 total reviews
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem has such intensity. This feels like a warning from a cursed place! The progression from "Death" to "Get" gives me a sense of doom. It's well written. I love how you formatted it. And you draw me into its unsettling world. Excellent work!
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Your poem has such intensity. This feels like a warning from a cursed place! The progression from "Death" to "Get" gives me a sense of doom. It's well written. I love how you formatted it. And you draw me into its unsettling world. Excellent work!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Michael,
Thank you for the wonderful review. I am glad you enjoyed this poem. I tried to build the tempo throughout the poem.
Cecilia
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You did a really good job with creating dread and sadness over what this picture represents. I can believe children, who were treated so badly, may feel they will witness the same horror perpetrated upon the next and the next child to use those beds.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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You did a really good job with creating dread and sadness over what this picture represents. I can believe children, who were treated so badly, may feel they will witness the same horror perpetrated upon the next and the next child to use those beds.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Carol,
Thank you for the wonderful review. I let my imagination run wild with this poem. I know conditions back in the day were horrible and I hope I portrayed that.
Cecilia
Comment from Kirsten Shonle
This is a great poem. It is quite sad. Not ever having any hope is indeed a fate I wish for no one. I liked your imagery used in this poem. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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This is a great poem. It is quite sad. Not ever having any hope is indeed a fate I wish for no one. I liked your imagery used in this poem. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Kristen,
Thank you for the great review. Insane asylums back in the day were not a good place to be. I can't believe people would put their family members in these facilities.
Cecilia
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I know. It is such a sad situation. Luckily mental hospitals are far better nowadays.
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Yes, people are treated like human beings now. I guess we learned from the past.
Comment from Begin Again
Now that was a creepy but clear warning...problem is that once someone's mind reaches that stage, they believe that their "savior" lies within those walls (deep in their minds)...how sad.
Hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Now that was a creepy but clear warning...problem is that once someone's mind reaches that stage, they believe that their "savior" lies within those walls (deep in their minds)...how sad.
Hugs, Carol
Comment Written 30-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Carol,
Thank you for the wonderful review. I think back in the day they were treated in a horrible way and maybe it made them sink deeper into their illness.
Cecilia
Comment from evilynne
That is insanely scary and well written. It can give you the chills and maybe nightmares. The picture is frightening. It conveys a type of hopelessness. Yikes! I wish you the best of luck in the club challenge. Evi
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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That is insanely scary and well written. It can give you the chills and maybe nightmares. The picture is frightening. It conveys a type of hopelessness. Yikes! I wish you the best of luck in the club challenge. Evi
Comment Written 30-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Evi,
Thank you for the wonderful review. I would not want to find myself in this institution. Back in the day they were horrible places to be and the people were treated worse than animals.
Cecilia
Comment from Nicki.B
Excellent entry for the little shop of horrors prompt this week!
And you didn't stop at one stanza!
Great structure here and you brought through all the eerie feelings and terror one could imagine from an asylum!
Great work my friend!
Nicki x
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Excellent entry for the little shop of horrors prompt this week!
And you didn't stop at one stanza!
Great structure here and you brought through all the eerie feelings and terror one could imagine from an asylum!
Great work my friend!
Nicki x
Comment Written 30-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Nicki,
Thank you for the wonderful review. Once I got the first stanza down the rest was easy to write. I told you I am a little bit twisted. :)
Cecilia
Comment from Rick Gardner
Will you ever stop, now nightmares and have to count syllables. Can't count that high any more. My IQ is in the same count down, zero is next. Next I will try a poem of infinite syllables, can AI beat that, lets see. Good morning to you, you belong in zoo, you smell like a monkey and look like one too.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Will you ever stop, now nightmares and have to count syllables. Can't count that high any more. My IQ is in the same count down, zero is next. Next I will try a poem of infinite syllables, can AI beat that, lets see. Good morning to you, you belong in zoo, you smell like a monkey and look like one too.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Rick,
Thank you for the wonderful review. I am part of the twisted sista' club where we enjoy giving people nightmares. Love your little ditty at the end of this review. I say look in the mirror you will see a big hairy gorilla looking back. Ha, Ha. Thank you my friend for the good laugh this morning.
Cecilia
Comment from jake cosmos aller
great entry for the contest. I like the way you structured it the last stanza is particularly chilling - the last line sums up the poem nicely yes get out or don' t go in for if you do no one can help you
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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great entry for the contest. I like the way you structured it the last stanza is particularly chilling - the last line sums up the poem nicely yes get out or don' t go in for if you do no one can help you
Comment Written 30-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Jake,
Thank you for the great review. This poem was a easy to write once I got the first stanza. Glad you enjoyed it.
Cecilia
Comment from teafor2
Cecilia, this is pretty dark somber and morbid stuff...In the past, I've visited some facilities, written a report and read articles and witnessed for
myself some sad condition, but nothing like in your picture, Ugh! Good luck with this as your club entry. teafor2
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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Cecilia, this is pretty dark somber and morbid stuff...In the past, I've visited some facilities, written a report and read articles and witnessed for
myself some sad condition, but nothing like in your picture, Ugh! Good luck with this as your club entry. teafor2
Comment Written 29-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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teafor2,
Thank you for the great review. Once I got the first stanza it was easy to write. I am a true crime junkie, so my imagination finds it easy to write poems like this.
Cecilia
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You are welcome. teafor2
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is particularly chilling, Cecilia! I think it's the rather methodical style of the verse, resembling, perhaps the systematic approach a psychopath might have to their victim. A great entry for the club! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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This is particularly chilling, Cecilia! I think it's the rather methodical style of the verse, resembling, perhaps the systematic approach a psychopath might have to their victim. A great entry for the club! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 29-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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Debbie,
Thank you for the great review. This poem was fun to write. Once I had the first stanza it just naturally flowed. I don't know what that says about me. Ha, Ha
Cecilia
