2025 Japanese Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Spring is Woven In Your Hair".
8 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
I really liked your alliterative lines of :
"with wind's whispering whoosh
and whipped whistling boughs"
and your use of onomatopoeia in the "whoosh" !
These days the wind carries pollen and we most likely to be sneezing!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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I really liked your alliterative lines of :
"with wind's whispering whoosh
and whipped whistling boughs"
and your use of onomatopoeia in the "whoosh" !
These days the wind carries pollen and we most likely to be sneezing!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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I love to use onomatopoeia (*+*)
Thank you, Big Sister,
Love,
marival
Comment from kahpot
A womans flowing hair is a wonderful sight, it is peace, calm, alluring, and captivating all at once, love your alliteration as you combine this beauty with that of nature, very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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A womans flowing hair is a wonderful sight, it is peace, calm, alluring, and captivating all at once, love your alliteration as you combine this beauty with that of nature, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 28-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Thank you, Kym,
Gypsy
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Stand aside, Alliteration Queen, Karen Cherry - MariVal has arrived! There are some lovely onomatopoeic and alliterative sounds here, capturing and echoing the advent of spring. I wondered if it would be better with the past participle 'woven' in the first line? An excellent, refreshing verse! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Stand aside, Alliteration Queen, Karen Cherry - MariVal has arrived! There are some lovely onomatopoeic and alliterative sounds here, capturing and echoing the advent of spring. I wondered if it would be better with the past participle 'woven' in the first line? An excellent, refreshing verse! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 28-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Thank you, Debbie, I edited the verb tense.
Gypsy
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
A lovely Gogyohka poem with great alliteration. Nice personification of Spring as a woman. I liked the entire presentation. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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A lovely Gogyohka poem with great alliteration. Nice personification of Spring as a woman. I liked the entire presentation. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Thank you, Marilyn,
Gypsy
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy,....and if my hair was weaved into a season, it'd be winter, because nothing grows and my bald head get to be freezing, and, well I don't like it!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Another fine poem, Gypsy,....and if my hair was weaved into a season, it'd be winter, because nothing grows and my bald head get to be freezing, and, well I don't like it!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Have a great weekend 😊
Gypsy
Comment from shelley kaye
love the W alliteration~
the flow was smooth, wispy, and fun-
cool imagery and presentation-
with no spag or typos-
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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love the W alliteration~
the flow was smooth, wispy, and fun-
cool imagery and presentation-
with no spag or typos-
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 28-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Have a great weekend 😊
Gypsy
Comment from RJ Heritage
Beautiful words with nice metaphorical expression. It is a well written and presented poem. Thank you for sharing. Have a great weekend and a good evening.
RJ
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Beautiful words with nice metaphorical expression. It is a well written and presented poem. Thank you for sharing. Have a great weekend and a good evening.
RJ
Comment Written 28-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the excellent review and kind words. May you have a wonderful weekend. 😊
Gypsy
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You're welcome
RJ
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Really love the presentation. This is beautiful to read and to look at. All of this really enhances the poem. Giving it a light airy feel that matches the theme perfectly. It's a lovely moment captured in just a few lines. Keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Really love the presentation. This is beautiful to read and to look at. All of this really enhances the poem. Giving it a light airy feel that matches the theme perfectly. It's a lovely moment captured in just a few lines. Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the excellent review and kind words. May you have a wonderful weekend. 😊
Gypsy
