You- the 2nd Person
Travels with Charley, Spock and Jimmy B10 total reviews
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Tom,
This is an interest flash fiction story. I don't know how you keep it all straight in your head. I have a hard enough time keeping one subject at a time.
Well done and good luck in the contest
Cecilia
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Tom,
This is an interest flash fiction story. I don't know how you keep it all straight in your head. I have a hard enough time keeping one subject at a time.
Well done and good luck in the contest
Cecilia
Comment Written 28-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Now that you mention it, visiting my mind is sort of like going into Space Mountain at Disney for even after mulitple rides I'd still would duck on the curves not knowing where the rafters are hung too low for comforters and yet the thrill of the ride makes for long lines as the thrill seekers return to stand in lines for hours.
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Now that you mention it, visiting my mind is sort of like going into Space Mountain at Disney for even after mulitple rides I'd still would duck on the curves not knowing where the rafters are hung too low for comforters and yet the thrill of the ride makes for long lines as the thrill seekers return to stand in lines for hours.
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Now that you mention it, visiting my mind is sort of like going into Space Mountain at Disney for even after mulitple rides I'd still would duck on the curves not knowing where the rafters are hung too low for comforters and yet the thrill of the ride makes for long lines as the thrill seekers return to stand in lines for hours.
Comment from Kirsten Shonle
What a great way to write a second person story. I loved all the famous people in this short story. It brings one to real life siting Wikipedia. This was a fun read. I wish you much luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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What a great way to write a second person story. I loved all the famous people in this short story. It brings one to real life siting Wikipedia. This was a fun read. I wish you much luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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and did you catch the wave with the beach scene in the picture, the beach boys, Brian Wilson and Buffet? Maybe it brought you back to the sixties. Thanks for the read and comment. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I happen to have been a Beach Boys and a Jimmy Buffet fan. I enjoyed reading this contest entry. You've made a few good points with this entry. Good luck with this contest.
In winter, they could have skiied Park City, Utah, or baked in (skied)
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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I happen to have been a Beach Boys and a Jimmy Buffet fan. I enjoyed reading this contest entry. You've made a few good points with this entry. Good luck with this contest.
In winter, they could have skiied Park City, Utah, or baked in (skied)
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Yep. Been there and di both, but won't do either at my advanced age any longer.
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
OMGosh this was brilliant, Tom. Virtual six!!! I love this tour to show us what all was sung or said in the magic time in our history. You maybe older than me, but we enjoyed much of the same thing. If I was writing the story I might have ended up on Gunsmoke and had Marshall Matt Dillion telling us to, "Get out of Dodge."
Haha. That is just me though. I did love every part of this and I wish you luck in the contest. What a hoot?? Thanks for the laughs and the big smiles going down Memory Lane. You've been there before, huh? LOL. Love, Debi
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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OMGosh this was brilliant, Tom. Virtual six!!! I love this tour to show us what all was sung or said in the magic time in our history. You maybe older than me, but we enjoyed much of the same thing. If I was writing the story I might have ended up on Gunsmoke and had Marshall Matt Dillion telling us to, "Get out of Dodge."
Haha. That is just me though. I did love every part of this and I wish you luck in the contest. What a hoot?? Thanks for the laughs and the big smiles going down Memory Lane. You've been there before, huh? LOL. Love, Debi
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Well. I appreciate the appreciation in return I also made note of the appreciation noted in your recent release and will contemplate entering after I return from my almost complete MRI. Seems I have been battling head pressure since December and neither my G.P., Optician, E.N.T., Chiropractor, nor Neurologist have a clue. The pain on a scale of ten is constant between a 2-6 but never severe or gone unless I'm asleep. It increases if a bend over or when I cough or sneeze. As a wise man has said... this getting old is getting old.
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Hey Tom, I am praying for you, Big-Time!
Please let me know how you are doing or what you find out, my friend.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Hemingway had a distinct style like no other author and like Marmite, you either love him or hate him as a writer. Not sure who you are emulating here Tom, but your diarised log is unusual and quirky, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Hemingway had a distinct style like no other author and like Marmite, you either love him or hate him as a writer. Not sure who you are emulating here Tom, but your diarised log is unusual and quirky, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Marmite??? Is a yeast substitute, yea? WE haven't it here. Is it used to make beer? Thanks for chiming in. Like Papa H, I am unique in my penmanship, too.
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It is like bovril, something the Aussies love Tom x. It's awful stuff x
Comment from Karen Cherry
That was different. Cleverly done. My favorite writer? Stephen King for horror. He is never boring. Larry Mcmurtry for westerns. Erma Bombeck and Lewis Grizzard for humor. Elizabethan altered history-
Phillipia Gregory. Romance/ suspense -Catherine Coulter,
Thrills and chills- Lawrence Sanders. Spys/ Goverment- Lee childs. Lawyer/ cops-Jonathan Kellerman' Detective- John D, Macdonald, Nero Wolfe. Earl Stanley Gardner. Adventure- Clive Cussler. Straight Mystery- Agatha Christie. Karen
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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That was different. Cleverly done. My favorite writer? Stephen King for horror. He is never boring. Larry Mcmurtry for westerns. Erma Bombeck and Lewis Grizzard for humor. Elizabethan altered history-
Phillipia Gregory. Romance/ suspense -Catherine Coulter,
Thrills and chills- Lawrence Sanders. Spys/ Goverment- Lee childs. Lawyer/ cops-Jonathan Kellerman' Detective- John D, Macdonald, Nero Wolfe. Earl Stanley Gardner. Adventure- Clive Cussler. Straight Mystery- Agatha Christie. Karen
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Wow. You read much more than I ever did. King I could read depending on what he wrote. Tik Tok was the worst. Oh. That was Patterson. I like Evans, and Sparks. and for poetry Wordsworth. Updike was worthy of my time as well. You a swell pal for reading me. Thank you
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Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
I may not always know exactly what you're talking about but I never get bored. Interesting piece about many of my favorite artists. Good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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I may not always know exactly what you're talking about but I never get bored. Interesting piece about many of my favorite artists. Good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Aw. I take that as a compliment. Thank you.
Comment from evilynne
Well, I am pretty stupid and didn't get all of that, but I know at least about travels with Charlie and, of course, Kokomo. And, of course, I enjoyed reading your work. I knew that Kokomo wasn't a place. Evi
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Well, I am pretty stupid and didn't get all of that, but I know at least about travels with Charlie and, of course, Kokomo. And, of course, I enjoyed reading your work. I knew that Kokomo wasn't a place. Evi
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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It was a challenge where I was only to be speaking in the second person (YOU) and so I took what was written in the first person and spoke to me (as you) and it was a trial that I hope would be passable and literate. Maybe not. Thanks for trying.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nicely written 2nd person piece.
Thanks for the touchstone memories: literary, video, and audio.
Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Nicely written 2nd person piece.
Thanks for the touchstone memories: literary, video, and audio.
Good luck in the contest.
(Oops, gotta have more characters to count as a review.)
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Comment from jim vecchio
I enjoyed your "you" story and hope you do well in the contest. I also enjoyed all the name-dropping. One person told me they didn't like script fonts, so I don't use them as much, but your photo and fonts worked together well.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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I enjoyed your "you" story and hope you do well in the contest. I also enjoyed all the name-dropping. One person told me they didn't like script fonts, so I don't use them as much, but your photo and fonts worked together well.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Thanks. As for the fonts Fanstory offers, there are limited favorites I select and many of the cursives fail as the tails are minimized or disappear below the line which is a shame for many of my writings are historically based in the mid-centuries. Thanks Jim for visiting