I beat the reaper
A Short Poem9 total reviews
Comment from Harambe iz ur Daddy
Your entry is surprisingly funny. Maybe it's the simplicity of the idea. But it works, rather effectively.
The text ends with a period, which makes it a sentence, so I would capitalize your first letter "W".
The only other think you might want to look at is the line spacing, as on smaller devices (such as the phone I am reading this on) your text wraps and there are letter collisions due to the somewhat flamboyant script choice. I'm not sure if that is controllable in the "advanced" editor but you can set line spacing with CSS in the basic editor with the line-height attribute.
Best regards and good luck,
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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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Your entry is surprisingly funny. Maybe it's the simplicity of the idea. But it works, rather effectively.
The text ends with a period, which makes it a sentence, so I would capitalize your first letter "W".
The only other think you might want to look at is the line spacing, as on smaller devices (such as the phone I am reading this on) your text wraps and there are letter collisions due to the somewhat flamboyant script choice. I'm not sure if that is controllable in the "advanced" editor but you can set line spacing with CSS in the basic editor with the line-height attribute.
Best regards and good luck,
🦍
Comment Written 29-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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Thank you so very much
Comment from Carasdreams
So simple but made me chuckle out loud. It's sassy, but has a uniqueness due to the choice of pretending to be deaf - the words 'death' and 'deaf' were very clever and added that extra layer to the piece. It would have been easy to choose a different word, but 'deaf' ties in so well.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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So simple but made me chuckle out loud. It's sassy, but has a uniqueness due to the choice of pretending to be deaf - the words 'death' and 'deaf' were very clever and added that extra layer to the piece. It would have been easy to choose a different word, but 'deaf' ties in so well.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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Thank you very much, yes, there were a few choices
Comment from Kirsten Shonle
haha. What a great short poem. I thought "I pretended I was death" was absolutely beautiful. I cannot believe you were able to write such a short poem that has a huge impact. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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haha. What a great short poem. I thought "I pretended I was death" was absolutely beautiful. I cannot believe you were able to write such a short poem that has a huge impact. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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Thank you so very much
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the This is Serious writing prompt. I got a giggle out of this one. :-) A good one liner and I enjoyed the whole presentation.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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An excellent entry for the This is Serious writing prompt. I got a giggle out of this one. :-) A good one liner and I enjoyed the whole presentation.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Thank you very much
Comment from jessizero
You did an excellent job of making something so serious sound so funny! I actually laughed. I also liked your picture. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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You did an excellent job of making something so serious sound so funny! I actually laughed. I also liked your picture. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Wow! thank you so very much,
Comment from ESOSTINE
You have written a very thought provoking poem, one that shows determination to survive despite the devices of the devil. It is well composed, concise and very uplifting. Thanks so much for sharing your inspiration. Remain blessed, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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You have written a very thought provoking poem, one that shows determination to survive despite the devices of the devil. It is well composed, concise and very uplifting. Thanks so much for sharing your inspiration. Remain blessed, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Wow! thank you so very much
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I love how you laugh at such a heavy topic! This is so clever. It's a really bold and emotional line. Keep writing, you've got a strong voice and clearly a great sense of humor!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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I love how you laugh at such a heavy topic! This is so clever. It's a really bold and emotional line. Keep writing, you've got a strong voice and clearly a great sense of humor!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Thank you so very much
Comment from Tim Margetts
Okay mystery poet, maybe I shouldn't admit this, with the subject matter.
But I freely confess to chuckling when I read this.
I have faced the grim reaper three times so far and my kids are convinced I have some sort of get deal with he man in black that I wont bother him if he doesn't bother me.
Tim
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Okay mystery poet, maybe I shouldn't admit this, with the subject matter.
But I freely confess to chuckling when I read this.
I have faced the grim reaper three times so far and my kids are convinced I have some sort of get deal with he man in black that I wont bother him if he doesn't bother me.
Tim
Comment Written 28-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Thank you so very much, I am glad you keep beating him
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I don't think anyone can dodge the reaper when he shows up as we are paralysed with fear, and he can even come when we are asleep. I loved the humour in this post, I laughed, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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I don't think anyone can dodge the reaper when he shows up as we are paralysed with fear, and he can even come when we are asleep. I loved the humour in this post, I laughed, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 28-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Thank you so very much
