Betrayal
The most well known betrayal in history.28 total reviews
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is a beautiful written poem for Easter or any time of the faith of Jesus and of a self examination of our faith. I appreciate how your witness shines here for our Lord.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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This is a beautiful written poem for Easter or any time of the faith of Jesus and of a self examination of our faith. I appreciate how your witness shines here for our Lord.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Thank you Verna for a very thoughtful review. And then you crown it with a six! I am grateful. Again, thanks. Bill
Comment from Barry Penfold
You are so correct in saying that Betrayal is a deep violation of trust. Why does it happen? Often a friend or someone we think was a friend. Nicely put together. Quite powerful. Thanks for sharing.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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You are so correct in saying that Betrayal is a deep violation of trust. Why does it happen? Often a friend or someone we think was a friend. Nicely put together. Quite powerful. Thanks for sharing.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Thanks, Barry, for your review. We don't let our enemies get close enough to betray us. -Bill
Comment from forestport12
Trusting someone with your life and to give it for someone. There's a great contrast here and in the narrative to be betrayed by a kiss, and then comes the perception that he was some how deceived, but then know deceives the Son of God. I like how the poem sets you up to think deeply about the subject. I would call a success.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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Trusting someone with your life and to give it for someone. There's a great contrast here and in the narrative to be betrayed by a kiss, and then comes the perception that he was some how deceived, but then know deceives the Son of God. I like how the poem sets you up to think deeply about the subject. I would call a success.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2025
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It's also a challenge to the reader: How can I apply this to my own life? Thanks for the review. -Bill
Comment from Harambe iz ur Daddy
I don't see any errors to correct in your piece (except the period in your subtitle can be eliminated) so I'm just going to comment on the content itself with some thoughts.
I've never understood how the narrative of Jesus' betrayal by Judas made much sense. Did they not already know who Jesus was? Was he hiding out in the middle of nowhere, trying not to get caught? And since when was Judas so trustworthy that it counted as a betrayal? He'd apparently been stealing from the common purse and Jesus already knew it. It's as if there's a chapter missing somewhere, where he and Jesus become best buddies somehow, the Pharisees had lost track of Jesus and were openly out to kill him, and Jesus had undergone plastic surgery to avoid detection but had let Judas in on his new post-op pics. Maybe those chapters got cut out of the canon. It's always confused me. It's easier for folks to relate to a friend or partner letting them down, or them letting someone down.
The bigger betrayal in the Bible has always seemed Jesus promising his disciples that some of them would still be around when he returned (Matthew 16:28). I keep hearing of old people who are convinced that verse applies to THEM, that Jesus will come back or heal them so they won't have to die. Nope. They always die. Instead of calling that a betrayal, we've adapted our theology accordingly. I truly don't know what to make of it, to be honest. I wonder if Jesus' disciples did either.
From stardust we came, and to stardust we shall return.
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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I don't see any errors to correct in your piece (except the period in your subtitle can be eliminated) so I'm just going to comment on the content itself with some thoughts.
I've never understood how the narrative of Jesus' betrayal by Judas made much sense. Did they not already know who Jesus was? Was he hiding out in the middle of nowhere, trying not to get caught? And since when was Judas so trustworthy that it counted as a betrayal? He'd apparently been stealing from the common purse and Jesus already knew it. It's as if there's a chapter missing somewhere, where he and Jesus become best buddies somehow, the Pharisees had lost track of Jesus and were openly out to kill him, and Jesus had undergone plastic surgery to avoid detection but had let Judas in on his new post-op pics. Maybe those chapters got cut out of the canon. It's always confused me. It's easier for folks to relate to a friend or partner letting them down, or them letting someone down.
The bigger betrayal in the Bible has always seemed Jesus promising his disciples that some of them would still be around when he returned (Matthew 16:28). I keep hearing of old people who are convinced that verse applies to THEM, that Jesus will come back or heal them so they won't have to die. Nope. They always die. Instead of calling that a betrayal, we've adapted our theology accordingly. I truly don't know what to make of it, to be honest. I wonder if Jesus' disciples did either.
From stardust we came, and to stardust we shall return.
🦍
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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My poem has nothing to do with anything you describe. Jesus' story of betrayal is not about what judas did or didn't do. This story of betrayal is about the role God plays in this drama. And the betrayal I have faced is also how God plays in my drama. I don't embrace a God who is there for the good times or for reward or recognition. God is there in my darkest of times. When my daughter betrayed me and tried to humiliate me, God was there. In other words, He did not betray me. That's the message of Judas' betrayal.
I have sat and provided care for more than 400 people who died in my care. Half of them were under the age of 20. I can assure you that all but one of them did not feel betrayed. And that one person was one who called herself a devout Christian. -Bill
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Bill, thank you for explaining. Yes, that's a very different context from how I originally read your piece. Now I'm curious to hear more of your story.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This was beautiful - deep, honest, expressive - and the way it tied into the betrayal of Jesus evoked thoughts for me of the musical G-dspell. Are you familiar with it? I love the music and the scene where Jesus is being carried away. Oy. Your poem here brought all that back to me, so thank you for that.
Best of luck to you at the polls with this stirring piece. xoxo
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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This was beautiful - deep, honest, expressive - and the way it tied into the betrayal of Jesus evoked thoughts for me of the musical G-dspell. Are you familiar with it? I love the music and the scene where Jesus is being carried away. Oy. Your poem here brought all that back to me, so thank you for that.
Best of luck to you at the polls with this stirring piece. xoxo
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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I do remember that musical. Thank you, Rachelle for your wonderful review. -Bill
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Thank you for what inspired it!! xoxox
Comment from nancyjam
this is a beautiful free verse reminding us how the strength of our faith
will see us through the many trials of life especially betrayal which causes much emotional pain. I like how you tell of Christ's dealing with betrayal
by his so-called friend which would lead to His death on the cross.
He trusted in His fathers love and knew all would be ok.
We must have that faith and trust in God to get through the trials of this life
A beautifull piece.
Nancy
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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this is a beautiful free verse reminding us how the strength of our faith
will see us through the many trials of life especially betrayal which causes much emotional pain. I like how you tell of Christ's dealing with betrayal
by his so-called friend which would lead to His death on the cross.
He trusted in His fathers love and knew all would be ok.
We must have that faith and trust in God to get through the trials of this life
A beautifull piece.
Nancy
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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It is strange to use the word trust in a poem on betrayal. Thanks for your wonderful review.-Bill
Comment from Tom Horonzy
The answer to verse one seems easy. How can one be betrayed by an enemy?
As for verse five, he may have had hope but with the divine and his history with Adam and Eve he should have expected disappointment.
Next... Only He and his Father had the faith to make His dream come tru and as He rose from the tomb He made it possible for us to continue to grow in the life to come
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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The answer to verse one seems easy. How can one be betrayed by an enemy?
As for verse five, he may have had hope but with the divine and his history with Adam and Eve he should have expected disappointment.
Next... Only He and his Father had the faith to make His dream come tru and as He rose from the tomb He made it possible for us to continue to grow in the life to come
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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I like your style. Nice way to pull this piece apart. Very good insight.
Thanks for the review. -Bill
Comment from Karen Cherry
When you are married and your faith in your partner is broken. I do not believe there is much worse. You cannot get it back. When one chooses instant gratification as opposed to keeping faith with the promises that were made to you, he broke your contract. He chose to do so.
Your writing was strong and stirred up feelings. Good writing will do that. Karen
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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When you are married and your faith in your partner is broken. I do not believe there is much worse. You cannot get it back. When one chooses instant gratification as opposed to keeping faith with the promises that were made to you, he broke your contract. He chose to do so.
Your writing was strong and stirred up feelings. Good writing will do that. Karen
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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It is a huge issue in American marriages. Many try to justify it.
Thanks for the review. -Bill
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You are welcome.Please pass this message along to everyone. My sister Tammy's second eye operation is not going well. Please send prayers. Karen
Comment from zanya
A most interesting exploration of the idea of'Betrayal' through the betrayal of Jesus-and the almost unanswerable question 'Why is it always a friend?'
thanks for this reflection.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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A most interesting exploration of the idea of'Betrayal' through the betrayal of Jesus-and the almost unanswerable question 'Why is it always a friend?'
thanks for this reflection.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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A six? Really? Thank you, Zanya, for giving this piece such high marks. I am beginning to see how this act in a relationship is deep.
Again, thank you. -Bill
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Beautifully expressed, William, in this poignant free verse. You use the example of Jesus' betrayal by Judas to question whether you too could have the same trust and conviction in your faith when challenged by such a violation. The repeated questions are used to great effect and your unadorned sentiments powerfully strike a chord, relatable to us all. A strong contender! Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Beautifully expressed, William, in this poignant free verse. You use the example of Jesus' betrayal by Judas to question whether you too could have the same trust and conviction in your faith when challenged by such a violation. The repeated questions are used to great effect and your unadorned sentiments powerfully strike a chord, relatable to us all. A strong contender! Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Thank you, Debbie. You are one of the premier personalities on this site. To get your review made my day. -Bill
