F in the Alphabet Soup
Sir Arthur's A Frog16 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
I liked the first ending best. The love of adventure and learning is passed down from Granny to young Franny. This grandma really has a lot to teach her granddaughter!
I found this sentence odd for dialogue because it's much more narration:
"The pages fluttered, and my eyes widened in disbelief."
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I liked the first ending best. The love of adventure and learning is passed down from Granny to young Franny. This grandma really has a lot to teach her granddaughter!
I found this sentence odd for dialogue because it's much more narration:
"The pages fluttered, and my eyes widened in disbelief."
Comment Written 26-Mar-2025
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Dear Carol, what a truly imaginative and inventive write! I'm pretty sure you could go on to write half a dozen more possible endings. I like them both but the second one has more excitement and I'm left in limbo, wanting to know who this other character is. In the build-up to the story, when Gram was referring to being told to go to the study to dust the books, I was reminded of many famous writers who found sanctuary as a child in their father's library and then went on to do great things themselves. Yours is a fairy story that could fit into any age. In short, timeless! Well done, Carol! Debbie
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Dear Carol, what a truly imaginative and inventive write! I'm pretty sure you could go on to write half a dozen more possible endings. I like them both but the second one has more excitement and I'm left in limbo, wanting to know who this other character is. In the build-up to the story, when Gram was referring to being told to go to the study to dust the books, I was reminded of many famous writers who found sanctuary as a child in their father's library and then went on to do great things themselves. Yours is a fairy story that could fit into any age. In short, timeless! Well done, Carol! Debbie
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
Comment from royowen
I think I love the first alternative, only because I'm an incurable romantic at heart, the thought of an unhappy ending to this fabulous story is unthinkable Carol, but you are a fountain of unending stories, well done, blessings Roy
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I think I love the first alternative, only because I'm an incurable romantic at heart, the thought of an unhappy ending to this fabulous story is unthinkable Carol, but you are a fountain of unending stories, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
Comment from Carol Clark2
I like the way Gram gets Franny interested in reading books. I prefer the first ending for children; the second is a bit scary, but leaves it open for an adventure to come. Perhaps a child would write his or her own adventure. Blessings. Carol
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I like the way Gram gets Franny interested in reading books. I prefer the first ending for children; the second is a bit scary, but leaves it open for an adventure to come. Perhaps a child would write his or her own adventure. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This was a really interesting story with two very different endings, one light and sweet, the other dark, scary, and somewhat open ended. Gram did a good job of making the book sound very interesting, enough that Franny was willing to read other books after she checked on Gram's special book. This is an adventure a boy as well as a girl would enjoy.
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This was a really interesting story with two very different endings, one light and sweet, the other dark, scary, and somewhat open ended. Gram did a good job of making the book sound very interesting, enough that Franny was willing to read other books after she checked on Gram's special book. This is an adventure a boy as well as a girl would enjoy.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
Comment from Wendy G
So clever, Carol! You certainly have a wonderful imagination, and your stories are a delight. I did prefer the first ending, but only because the second ending wasn't complete - but I am sure one of your futurestories will pick up th thread - and that tactic will make even the most reluctant of readers want to keep reading!
Wendy
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So clever, Carol! You certainly have a wonderful imagination, and your stories are a delight. I did prefer the first ending, but only because the second ending wasn't complete - but I am sure one of your futurestories will pick up th thread - and that tactic will make even the most reluctant of readers want to keep reading!
Wendy
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
Comment from Douglas Goff
Oh dear is right. The wisdom of Grandmothers is unmatched. I'm sure it will be alright.
Fantastic piece. Just fantastic. You are a talent.
Sorry I have been tied up. Wife was out of state and I had three kids to handle. Wee hoo! (It was fun!)
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Oh dear is right. The wisdom of Grandmothers is unmatched. I'm sure it will be alright.
Fantastic piece. Just fantastic. You are a talent.
Sorry I have been tied up. Wife was out of state and I had three kids to handle. Wee hoo! (It was fun!)
D
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Carol,
This is a wonderful story. I like ending 1 better. It is a happier story than ending 2. If you immerse in make believe it has to have a happy ending.
Well done
Cecilia
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Carol,
This is a wonderful story. I like ending 1 better. It is a happier story than ending 2. If you immerse in make believe it has to have a happy ending.
Well done
Cecilia
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
Comment from Kirsten Shonle
What a great next installment to your book. I believe children would very much like the book. I love the recurring theme of books being magical. They truly are. I loved the first ending to the book. You must write a chapter a day, or is the book already written and you post a chapter at a time? I'm trying to write a chapter a day on my novel and have been succeeding but my chapters are very short. Great read.
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What a great next installment to your book. I believe children would very much like the book. I love the recurring theme of books being magical. They truly are. I loved the first ending to the book. You must write a chapter a day, or is the book already written and you post a chapter at a time? I'm trying to write a chapter a day on my novel and have been succeeding but my chapters are very short. Great read.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
uhoh I have to go with ending one because ending two is just too scary! lol If these stories don't get kids reading books, I don't know what will. Great job on another one, Carol!
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uhoh I have to go with ending one because ending two is just too scary! lol If these stories don't get kids reading books, I don't know what will. Great job on another one, Carol!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
