Comment from Chris Davies

Excellent

Your poem is very cleverly done. I enjoyed reading it and wish you all the best in the contest. I loved the way you kept to the monorhyme scheme. What fun!

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025

Thank you, Chris.

Comment from Harambe iz ur Daddy

Excellent

This definitely has potential and a nice meter. I think it is missing an ending, or that your ending is a bit short currently. For example, here are some ideas for additional lines you might throw in somewhere:

He's made all dirt an afterthought

There's nothing in my flowerpot

Can't find my pills or meth or pot

He'll purge my mind of every thought

Til all acquaintance be forgot

I pray that he will get too hot

And melt into a pile of snot

Food for thought! Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest,

🦍

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2025

Thanks, H. Excellent suggestions.

Comment from Alexandra Trovato

Excellent

This is a very clever monorhyme poem. It tells a full story using the same rhyming sound. I enjoyed reading this and your photo image presentation supports your words well.

Best wishes,

Alex

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2025

Thank you, Alex.

reply by Alexandra Trovato on 23-Mar-2025

You're welcome!