No Going Nowhere
Monorhyme Poem5 total reviews
Comment from Tim Margetts
I like this. :-)
This poem uses monorhyme to strong effect, sticking to a single end sound without sounding overly forced. The rhythm gives it a steady, almost chant-like quality that pairs well with the speaker's simmering frustration. There's an authentic, recognisable voice here-possibly a student resisting authority, caught in a cycle of being misunderstood or overlooked. Lines like "you'll write the report and underscore / how I created an uproar" land with quiet defiance. While a few phrases feel slightly awkward or unclear-"please don't make me anymore", for example-the emotional tone still resonates. The final line could hit harder with a more precise image, but overall the poem captures a relatable sense of alienation and powerlessness without melodrama.
Nicely done and good luck in the contest :-)
Tim
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I like this. :-)
This poem uses monorhyme to strong effect, sticking to a single end sound without sounding overly forced. The rhythm gives it a steady, almost chant-like quality that pairs well with the speaker's simmering frustration. There's an authentic, recognisable voice here-possibly a student resisting authority, caught in a cycle of being misunderstood or overlooked. Lines like "you'll write the report and underscore / how I created an uproar" land with quiet defiance. While a few phrases feel slightly awkward or unclear-"please don't make me anymore", for example-the emotional tone still resonates. The final line could hit harder with a more precise image, but overall the poem captures a relatable sense of alienation and powerlessness without melodrama.
Nicely done and good luck in the contest :-)
Tim
Comment Written 23-Mar-2025
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an excellent monorhyme, full of action and vivid imagery. You tell a story from beginning to end, with emotion. I enjoyed reading this and viewing your supportive image presentation.
Best wishes,
Alex
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This is an excellent monorhyme, full of action and vivid imagery. You tell a story from beginning to end, with emotion. I enjoyed reading this and viewing your supportive image presentation.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 23-Mar-2025
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This girl just does not want to go to school and I have one Grandchild who has felt the same throughout her school days! I enjoyed the rhymes and sentiment here, a fine poem for the contest, love Dolly x
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This girl just does not want to go to school and I have one Grandchild who has felt the same throughout her school days! I enjoyed the rhymes and sentiment here, a fine poem for the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Mar-2025
Comment from lancellot
You have a good rhyme scheme going, for this particular contest. I would recommend looking closer at the context of the poetic story or message. It is not all that clear. You don't want readers wondering.
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You have a good rhyme scheme going, for this particular contest. I would recommend looking closer at the context of the poetic story or message. It is not all that clear. You don't want readers wondering.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2025
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem is so full of energy! The way you shared that strong willed, determined voice really made me smile. I could totally picture that! Digging in and refusing to budge! The ending was perfect too! This was such a fun read!
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Your poem is so full of energy! The way you shared that strong willed, determined voice really made me smile. I could totally picture that! Digging in and refusing to budge! The ending was perfect too! This was such a fun read!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2025
