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The Innocence of Childhood

Can you hear the children play?

2 total reviews 
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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This is a vividly expressed monorhyme verse, filled with energy and fun, in-keeping with the visual. My favourite line is:"With balls and hoops they twist and sway." I don't however, think gray fits with joy. Maybe: Their joy rids life of hues of gray? But an excellent entry for the contest. Well done! Debbie

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2025

reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
    Hi Debbie
    Thank you for your thoughtful and detailed feedback! I appreciate your specific comments, especially about the "hues of gray". Not the best colour but I needed to retain the rhyme!
    Take care.
Comment from BermyBye50
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This is an excellent entry in the Monorhyme poem contest. The subject is beautifully painted in well-chosen words and verses that speak brilliantly of the Innocence of Childhood. The rhyming is perfect and the single compact stanza is well written and flows smoothly when read. Well done.

All the best,

Eugene

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2025

reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
    Thank you so much for your kind words! I'm delighted you found the poem to be a good fit for the contest and that you enjoyed the depiction of childhood innocence. Your feedback about the smooth flow and perfect rhyming is especially appreciated.
    Bless you and stay safe.