Autumn Leaf
3/5/3 Modern Haiku5 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This 3-5-3, Autumn Leaf, has the proper formatting and sees the sorrow involved with the growing seasons ending.
I found this: (slipped) on ice
Happy day.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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This 3-5-3, Autumn Leaf, has the proper formatting and sees the sorrow involved with the growing seasons ending.
I found this: (slipped) on ice
Happy day.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much for your kind review and for your time Bill - very much appreciated/ Bless
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Thank you so much for your kind review and for your time Bill - very much appreciated/ Bless
Comment from Harambe iz ur Daddy
**second update** author has updated the piece to be compliant. It received four votes while noncompliant. The site needs to do a better job of preventing this from happening. I have upgraded the rating from two stars to four. The original piece worked better as a 5-7-5 or 5-7-3, whichever it was originally. It's a little clunky in its shortened form.
**update** author has updated piece but it's still noncompliant, a 3-6-3 when it should be a 3-5-3
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Nice autumn haiku. Just one problem: it is a 5-7-3 and this contest is a 3-5-3. This entry already has received more votes than any other piece. That's unfair to everyone else who has entered this contest. So I'm unable to give it the validation it would otherwise deserve, in a contest appropriate to the form you have chosen.
Best regards,
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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2025
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**second update** author has updated the piece to be compliant. It received four votes while noncompliant. The site needs to do a better job of preventing this from happening. I have upgraded the rating from two stars to four. The original piece worked better as a 5-7-5 or 5-7-3, whichever it was originally. It's a little clunky in its shortened form.
**update** author has updated piece but it's still noncompliant, a 3-6-3 when it should be a 3-5-3
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Nice autumn haiku. Just one problem: it is a 5-7-3 and this contest is a 3-5-3. This entry already has received more votes than any other piece. That's unfair to everyone else who has entered this contest. So I'm unable to give it the validation it would otherwise deserve, in a contest appropriate to the form you have chosen.
Best regards,
🦍
Comment Written 23-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much for your kind and informative review Harambe - very much appreciated - Bless
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Hi author, I saw you edited your piece but it's still one syllable too many (a 3-6-3). I will add back stars if you fix it! Thanks.
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Thank you so much for you kind help, Harambe - Bless You
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Alan,
This short poem evokes longing for the tree the leaf came from and for a past life that is gone for good. I like it being from the leaf's point of view and that it can be metaphoric for many stages of human life.
Hope this did well in its prompt.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy your weekend
Joan
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2025
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Hi Alan,
This short poem evokes longing for the tree the leaf came from and for a past life that is gone for good. I like it being from the leaf's point of view and that it can be metaphoric for many stages of human life.
Hope this did well in its prompt.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy your weekend
Joan
Comment Written 22-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much for your kind review Joan, and for your time -very much appreciated - Bless
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You are most kindly welcome on both counts.
Joan
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I could enjoy the Autumnal season much better if it wasn't followed by winter, but once the leaves start falling I feel a kind of dread as to the thought of winter again, so I can identify with the sadness here, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2025
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I could enjoy the Autumnal season much better if it wasn't followed by winter, but once the leaves start falling I feel a kind of dread as to the thought of winter again, so I can identify with the sadness here, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 21-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much for your kind review, and for your time Dolly - very much appreciated - Bless
Comment from JohnnySnowblind
This 3-5-3 poem is a lovely, concise snapshot of a moment. The image of the leaf 'embracing' the windowpane is particularly evocative, creating a sense of gentle connection and the quiet beauty of nature.
The phrase 'Sad to say goodbye' immediately sets a poignant tone, and the final line, 'green reflection home in spring,' offers a hopeful counterpoint, suggesting a cycle of renewal.
The poem effectively uses the limited syllables to create a miniature narrative arc. The visual image provided complements the poem well, enhancing the sense of a fleeting, beautiful moment.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2025
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This 3-5-3 poem is a lovely, concise snapshot of a moment. The image of the leaf 'embracing' the windowpane is particularly evocative, creating a sense of gentle connection and the quiet beauty of nature.
The phrase 'Sad to say goodbye' immediately sets a poignant tone, and the final line, 'green reflection home in spring,' offers a hopeful counterpoint, suggesting a cycle of renewal.
The poem effectively uses the limited syllables to create a miniature narrative arc. The visual image provided complements the poem well, enhancing the sense of a fleeting, beautiful moment.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much Johnny for your excellent review, and for your time - very much appreciated - Bless
