Oh Life!
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Strike!"Experiences of living
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Comment from OLA THOMAS
I enjoyed your employement of words stringing in this work, binding the thoughts strongly together.This is very strong in your 'Air plays flute, helps finding your foes.', Good use of metaphor.
ola thomas
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I enjoyed your employement of words stringing in this work, binding the thoughts strongly together.This is very strong in your 'Air plays flute, helps finding your foes.', Good use of metaphor.
ola thomas
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Tina McKala
Very interesting and quite engaging structure, it was quite a fresh read with a smooth flow. THe own structure is appreciated :)
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Very interesting and quite engaging structure, it was quite a fresh read with a smooth flow. THe own structure is appreciated :)
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Galactia
This is a lovely poem.
Favourite stanza's...
Why wait? Sow, fruits may late.
What's yours' to lose? What you brought? Why off?
The sun enjoys right kiss.
Shaded moon peeps, pries your miss or kicks.
Birds, trees, hills, sky, good hearts pat you strike.
Let them sing, grab this time or drum fate.
To each choice in life is to each seed we sow and the fruits we reep as rewards. LOVE IT.
To be honest I am lost in the 1st 2 stanza, beautiful image and words, but none of which painted a clear picture, just fragments.
Great job
Regards
Tia
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This is a lovely poem.
Favourite stanza's...
Why wait? Sow, fruits may late.
What's yours' to lose? What you brought? Why off?
The sun enjoys right kiss.
Shaded moon peeps, pries your miss or kicks.
Birds, trees, hills, sky, good hearts pat you strike.
Let them sing, grab this time or drum fate.
To each choice in life is to each seed we sow and the fruits we reep as rewards. LOVE IT.
To be honest I am lost in the 1st 2 stanza, beautiful image and words, but none of which painted a clear picture, just fragments.
Great job
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
Time continues onward, but the time to strike and be ready is now. Those who are wise will heed the signs all around. Those who are not seeing, those who will not hear, will drum fate. Enjoyed!
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Time continues onward, but the time to strike and be ready is now. Those who are wise will heed the signs all around. Those who are not seeing, those who will not hear, will drum fate. Enjoyed!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, alcreator, you did a great job writing this free verse poem, i think it's about the way the colors change throughout the day and they are enjoyed differently by all
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this is very well written, alcreator, you did a great job writing this free verse poem, i think it's about the way the colors change throughout the day and they are enjoyed differently by all
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from jaeladarling
My goodness, you've overtaken the poetry top spots. Maybe you could take a breather and let others have the spotlight a while? A good poem nonetheless, as usual. ;)
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My goodness, you've overtaken the poetry top spots. Maybe you could take a breather and let others have the spotlight a while? A good poem nonetheless, as usual. ;)
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Sanku
A good theme , a good advice -act act when it is time to act -remember Longfellow?-act in the present ant that is more important .Sow now so that you may reap later -well done.
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A good theme , a good advice -act act when it is time to act -remember Longfellow?-act in the present ant that is more important .Sow now so that you may reap later -well done.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from prayingpoet
Sorry, I don't get it at all. Makes no sense, has no rhythm, has no flow. I simply do not get it. Maybe in clear language you can say what it is you are trying to say?
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Sorry, I don't get it at all. Makes no sense, has no rhythm, has no flow. I simply do not get it. Maybe in clear language you can say what it is you are trying to say?
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
Comment from wanderlost
Your poems are very interpretive and artsy. It's a very unique flavor of the free form poetry that I am accustomed to. Interesting piece.
Wanderlost
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Your poems are very interpretive and artsy. It's a very unique flavor of the free form poetry that I am accustomed to. Interesting piece.
Wanderlost
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
Comment from visionary1234
And I have to admit I'm equally mystified by this one as I was with your last one dear!
"Silver, whitish lining woo if failed.
Keep time, kick dark; bring light.
Air plays flute, helps finding your foes" ??? "woo?" why here?
I think I get a "seize the day" message from this one, but I could be totally wrong! :)Sharyn
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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And I have to admit I'm equally mystified by this one as I was with your last one dear!
"Silver, whitish lining woo if failed.
Keep time, kick dark; bring light.
Air plays flute, helps finding your foes" ??? "woo?" why here?
I think I get a "seize the day" message from this one, but I could be totally wrong! :)Sharyn
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for excellent review
