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Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Ray,
Yikes I hate to say this but I can't wrap me old mind around this one. I hope you will tell me the meaning so I don't appear too dumb. You have written a profound and thought provoking poem to say the least. I used to know a poet who writes something like you do and I usually had to ask him what he was writing about because I would have had to get inside his head to understand. I like the words you have used here and the phrasing is unique and intriguing....chey
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Hi Ray,
Yikes I hate to say this but I can't wrap me old mind around this one. I hope you will tell me the meaning so I don't appear too dumb. You have written a profound and thought provoking poem to say the least. I used to know a poet who writes something like you do and I usually had to ask him what he was writing about because I would have had to get inside his head to understand. I like the words you have used here and the phrasing is unique and intriguing....chey
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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thanks for detailed excellent review
Comment from Nebukadneser
To rate and understand a poem like this you have to be inside the poet's head to grasp the full meaning of it. I've often seen, though, should one ask the poet what he/she meant you draw a blank stare. I love your word play and once we sense the wisdom in the poem, we grasp it and then it makes sense , almost like being enlightened.
Well done
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
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To rate and understand a poem like this you have to be inside the poet's head to grasp the full meaning of it. I've often seen, though, should one ask the poet what he/she meant you draw a blank stare. I love your word play and once we sense the wisdom in the poem, we grasp it and then it makes sense , almost like being enlightened.
Well done
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I find this a little disjointed,
and can't seem to grasp the meaning
of it.
I suppose the reader must make his/her own interpretation
of this.
Margaret
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I find this a little disjointed,
and can't seem to grasp the meaning
of it.
I suppose the reader must make his/her own interpretation
of this.
Margaret
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Selina Stambi
Spag:
yours (no apostrophe required)
The first line ... does it mean ... strike while the iron is hot?
The lines are well written and are subject to the readers' interpretation ... I hope. Or I'm being dense today and am feeling a little thick in the head after reading!
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Spag:
yours (no apostrophe required)
The first line ... does it mean ... strike while the iron is hot?
The lines are well written and are subject to the readers' interpretation ... I hope. Or I'm being dense today and am feeling a little thick in the head after reading!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Mai Mai
This is an iterating piece. While I'm mot sure I completely understand (totally my flaw) I like the use of metaphors, leaving it open to interpretation. Good job and good luck.
Mai Mai
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This is an iterating piece. While I'm mot sure I completely understand (totally my flaw) I like the use of metaphors, leaving it open to interpretation. Good job and good luck.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello ALCREATOR LITT RAY D
I like reading poems such as yours (why) I like a poem where I take time to ponder on
Like how an alarm clock wakes you up when you are having a nice dream
and if for some reason the you wind your brain the wrong way you
receive dark vibes
I'm not going to keep on
I like your line about the Unseen eyes
(which you are referring to the Eyes of God)
My last comment--
We as adults should
View nature like a child does with pure delight in natures most simple things
Gert
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Hello ALCREATOR LITT RAY D
I like reading poems such as yours (why) I like a poem where I take time to ponder on
Like how an alarm clock wakes you up when you are having a nice dream
and if for some reason the you wind your brain the wrong way you
receive dark vibes
I'm not going to keep on
I like your line about the Unseen eyes
(which you are referring to the Eyes of God)
My last comment--
We as adults should
View nature like a child does with pure delight in natures most simple things
Gert
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from dmt1967
This is a good poem a bit heavy for me but that's more to do with my preference than your writing I like the no picture theme as well thank you for sharing
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This is a good poem a bit heavy for me but that's more to do with my preference than your writing I like the no picture theme as well thank you for sharing
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Alcreator,
The use of metaphor is extensive leaving this poem open to many interpretations. I find it difficult to find the intended meaning of the story. It is a challenging read.
Curtis
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Alcreator,
The use of metaphor is extensive leaving this poem open to many interpretations. I find it difficult to find the intended meaning of the story. It is a challenging read.
Curtis
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Bryana
There are some verses I don't understand especially
the first stanza, also these lines...
Why wait? Sow, fruits may late
What's yours to lose? What you brought? Why off?
Have a nice day
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There are some verses I don't understand especially
the first stanza, also these lines...
Why wait? Sow, fruits may late
What's yours to lose? What you brought? Why off?
Have a nice day
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Jerry Rauhuff
I've read quite a few of your poems and I can see that you are sincerely concerned for the welfare of mankind. "Shaded moon peeps" I like this line. Well written and I say well done.
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I've read quite a few of your poems and I can see that you are sincerely concerned for the welfare of mankind. "Shaded moon peeps" I like this line. Well written and I say well done.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
