Comment from Harambe iz ur Daddy

Excellent

Haha congrats on your thousandth post! Wow you are way ahead of me on posts. I just hit 350.

This is a decent double entendre. I just have one suggestion: try to keep your lines more intact conceptually. I think "morning glory" works better on its own on line 2 than split across two lines. This would require you get rid of "always", which you don't need anyway as it doesn't add anything.

So then, what to use on line 1? Perhaps...

Steadfast
Monster
The old
Woody's
Rising

I think the last one is probably the best choice, but perhaps you'll find something else even better ; )

Thanks for sharing,

🦍

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025

I was not happy dividing the expression either

Wondrous from the title would be great .. suggestion for the title ???

I can’t just have A…..

wondrous
Glory morning ..

reply by Harambe iz ur Daddy on 16-Mar-2025

Wondrous as the first word sounds like a good choice. I'd still stick with morning glory, not glory morning, in line 2 or you'll lose the innuendo. Your title could be something like "saluting the dawn" or "salute to the down", as it bears reference to "morning salute" (a direct reference to an erection).

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025

I mixed up the two word I meant morning glory .. I’m in bed half asleep 😝

Checkout the edit

Not too happy about the AND in the title

But I like the poem with morning glory ( which is the name of the cloud) on one line.

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025

Can I just put a comma

A Grand,

reply by Harambe iz ur Daddy on 16-Mar-2025

It's a little clunky, but it's also fun and innovative to start the poem in the title like that.

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025

I do it often but like I just mentioned in my last post to you “ I’m no poet I just dabble in this art😝

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

Your poem is short and fun! I love how you packed two meanings into just three lines! The double meaning works so well! It's so funny! I smiled reading it. Great job!

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2025

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A quaint poem with a double meaning as I have never heard of this before. Glad your picture chose a scene rather than the other alternative! Ha ha ha, a fine pose, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2025

Two years ago, on the internet, I learned the slang meaning of morning glory.

Early this morning instead, I learned what a morning glory cloud is ..

I punched in the words "morning glory sunset" because I want to see if such an expression was valid in English .. it was going to be one of the meanings of my poem

unexpectedly, info instead on the morning glory cloud appeared .. so I thought it would be a great pairing for this contest rather than the sunset idea.

I love learning new things.