Comment from mizzkris20

Excellent

This is an interesting poem. I take it as finding hope even in our darkest hours. Great job writing this and thank you so much for sharing your work with us

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for good review

Comment from Antithesis

Good

A very tricky poem to review. All I can really say is that it was quite enjoyable speaking out loud. I shall admit though that it did not manage to entice me as much as it possibly could, without me being completely sure as to why.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

The wording in this piece is interesting. The words get the full effect of this piece. The syllable count is correct as the message is clear and to the point.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for good review

Comment from MidnightWriter4U

Excellent

Few hours is right. Darkness can seem endless in those few hours, however, depending on one's mood or circumstance. Great artwork choice for this work. Very good descriptive word choices. Enjoyed!

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for good review

reply by MidnightWriter4U on 18-Apr-2013

You are very welcome. MN :)

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

This is probably my favourite of your poems that I have read. It fulfils the 5-7-5 structure well, has strong alliteration in line 2 especially and also the interesting idea of black 'glowing'

Steve

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for good review

Comment from poetic1988

Excellent

this is a interesting poem to read
from reading this poem I sense
it is about hope within the deepest of our time in need
and about not giving up

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for good review

Comment from October21

Excellent

Good always wins I guess. I believe that the world needs a balance of both. Your poem read like a tongue twister, but this isn't a bad thing. The alliteration in the second line was fantastic. Great work on all these poems.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for great review

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

Sounds like you've got a 'B' in your bonnet. I think there's more that's not clear here than is. Black seems to be a good thing.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for the feedback

Comment from azulazul

Excellent

ALCREATOR WRITER,

This is most powerful in image projection and compare and contrast is done very well. Such a short by powerful poem. Message comes acreoss. I feel that this is a poem to be read aloud to people who have great appreciation of this art.
Cheers, Azulazul

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for nice professional review
sorry for late

Comment from Diny

Good

The mar black line is a bit confusung I love the last one about dark riegning for only a few hours I could see this being used as a metaphor in many situations- A work of poetry such as this needs to be very strong to remain memorable the last lign was but the rest missed the mark I am afraid... Wonderful picture and I love this idea for your book too- Good luck with your continued efforts REMEMBER 4= excellant- DINY

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2006

Thanks I do remember, the very word 'mar' has been replaced and you may read it now and let me know how do you like the change..

reply by Diny on 20-Aug-2006

It may be just me but that middle line all full of B's reads too much like a toungue twister- but I applaude you for your effort the damn black works better , yes- Write on,,, DINY
4= EXCELLANT