Comment from RJFunston

Excellent

Hello,
You do have a lot of poetry posted. I think out of all the ones I've read so far I like this one the best. Very simple, straight forward, easy flow and great meaning.
Have a good day,
Robert

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for good review

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Hello, alcreator. I must say your works are very diversified. You work with a very intellectual mind. I wish I had your ability. Bravo! Bob

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for nice review

Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER

Excellent

All those 'Bs'...the Alliteration stings..BAM! BAM! RULE! what a way to start..the u vowel is foreboding personified..who has the power? "Damn black...dark reigns", the end of the world perhaps? A poem that is "GLAD' for what? Another word with a harsh 'a' vowel. Rule and Glad...oh those 4 letter words! Well done piece.

Regards:

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for excellent review

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

An amazing 5-7-5 formatted poem about darkness, the black. An incredible string of alliteration centered on B, giving the essence of black. Yes, happy it lasts only a few hours.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for nice review

Comment from Black_Oxygen

Excellent

Rule! Glow good, damn black,
Bleak blurs, blasts, blots or bans bold,
Glad! Dark reigns few hours.

With very few words, this poetry encourages the
reader to move forward; struggle is temporary.
Thank You for your creation.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for excellent review

Comment from donaldww

Good

Yikes! Big blast of alliterative b's in the second line. You did a good job adhering to the 5-7-5 structure. Collectively, the words don't make a point, but that doesn't seem to be what you're going for here.

Thanks for sharing.

DW

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

This seems to be a commentary on the night or darkness. It is a very original piece of poetic art and I found it to be well stated and written. I enjoyed reading this verse... John

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for good review

Comment from ruminative scribbler

Excellent

The "Background" section ends rather abruptly, mid-sentence.

The seventeen syllables of your 5-7-5 poem are also seventeen words, which I think is why it seems much longer.

The first line is very powerful. I like the violent sounding and imaging contrast struck between "glow good" and "damn black".

Second line full of alliteration and contrasting themes once again.

The last line jars with me rather. The incomplete grammar makes it feel like the statutory 5 are being squeezed in against their will somehow...

All in all a good and powerful read.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for nice professional review

Comment from Perp Ihebom

Good

I think you have a problem with communication. I cannot really understand what you want to say here. Maybe you should pay more attention to your grammar. cheers

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks

Comment from 9999pool

Excellent

When the dark comes to haunt and taunt. the eerie feeling can be so unpleasant, sickening, frightening and blasting. darkness and bleakness permeates the mind and body. Nothing is clear nor bright anymore. Luckily this feeling of depression and dullness will not last.
Good write.
Cheerio, Ritchie.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for nice review