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Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello . ALCREATOR LITT RAY D
Aren't you clever in your second line using one syllable words describing how --
Yet from daylight there is--
No light, but rather darkness is visible?
Gert
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Hello . ALCREATOR LITT RAY D
Aren't you clever in your second line using one syllable words describing how --
Yet from daylight there is--
No light, but rather darkness is visible?
Gert
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from dmt1967
This is a good one although I don't quite get it or what it is about very well written though and a good 5-7-5 poem thank you for sharing well done
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This is a good one although I don't quite get it or what it is about very well written though and a good 5-7-5 poem thank you for sharing well done
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Alcreator,
The piece challenges my mind, but I see the message as promoting light and condemning darkness. Society associates light with good and dark with evil. The challenge is to master both.
Curtis
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Alcreator,
The piece challenges my mind, but I see the message as promoting light and condemning darkness. Society associates light with good and dark with evil. The challenge is to master both.
Curtis
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from mauial
Wow the alliteration in this short piece is very powerful. Good rule seldom seen as the bad black dark knight holds power of the world. The Bible itself states at 1 John 5:19 "the whole world is lying in the [power of the] wicked one."
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Wow the alliteration in this short piece is very powerful. Good rule seldom seen as the bad black dark knight holds power of the world. The Bible itself states at 1 John 5:19 "the whole world is lying in the [power of the] wicked one."
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from prayingpoet
I guess this could be taken as night and day or, as a spiritual life of day and night. Not really explained in the poem or in the notes.
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I guess this could be taken as night and day or, as a spiritual life of day and night. Not really explained in the poem or in the notes.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Jerry Rauhuff
Shortest one yet. Second line kind of a tongue twister. Say it five times fast as you can, LOL. Would've made a great contest entry for this style poem. I say well done.
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Shortest one yet. Second line kind of a tongue twister. Say it five times fast as you can, LOL. Would've made a great contest entry for this style poem. I say well done.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Tina McKala
The sound of this poem was good. Words created nice striking sound with lots of energy and the exclamations Rule and glad had a good effect.
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The sound of this poem was good. Words created nice striking sound with lots of energy and the exclamations Rule and glad had a good effect.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Galactia
Great little reflection of day and night and also it can reflect a spiritual level as well, some times you need to understand the dark to walk with in the ligjht.
Great job
Regards
tia
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Great little reflection of day and night and also it can reflect a spiritual level as well, some times you need to understand the dark to walk with in the ligjht.
Great job
Regards
tia
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, alcreator, you did a great job writing a 5 7 5 poem about being glad that darkness is just for a little while. i enjoyed reading this one
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this is very well written, alcreator, you did a great job writing a 5 7 5 poem about being glad that darkness is just for a little while. i enjoyed reading this one
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from jaeladarling
Interesting piece. I'm up way past my bedtime, so I had to read it a couple of times. :) It was nice to see something a little shorter from you though. Good work on this one.
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Interesting piece. I'm up way past my bedtime, so I had to read it a couple of times. :) It was nice to see something a little shorter from you though. Good work on this one.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
