Comment from honeytree

Exceptional

I liked the art work of the tree of the sky.

I found the words were excellent.

If we think that being white on earth

Is better then black, think again?

We are all human beings.

We are born white or born black.

We should be equal regardless of color.

Honey tree

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013

thanks for 6-star rated review
appreciate your wisdom

Comment from Caressa_08

Excellent

This short poem has much depth...Follow the rule, the right living standard & avoid the black side of life, this wrong side of life & it might come, though last a short time...A lot to contemplate though you made it simplified by this writing...

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013

thanks for nice review

Comment from vkmack

Excellent

In the end, the message is simple--the dark terrifies the soul, while the golden light is soothing. Yes, thank goodness we have no more dark than we do. The alliteration here is powerful and almost primitive. This works on many levels. Great job.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013

thanks for nice review

Comment from wanderlost

Excellent

Rule! Glow good, damn black,
Bleak blurs, blasts, blots or bans bold,
Glad! Dark reigns few hours.

Good work, though your alliteration feels forced. Unless you are seeking to make use of specific dialect, improper grammar, to me, does not contribute to effectiveness in prose.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013

thanks for excellent review

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

You have made effective use of every syllable in this 5-7-5 about the limited reign of evil. I know it seems that evil reigns far and wide and really has a hold, but there will be a drastic change, as told of in the book of The Revelation. Good job on the poem

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013

thanks for nice review

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Your poem is in good 5/7/5 syllable count.
Lots of alliteration in your first two lines.
good use of action verbs to add power to your statement in blur/blast/blot/ban/reign
You convey with enthusiasm your message that what is dark and bad in life is short-lived and gives way to the gladness and good that will reign much longer. Brooke

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013

thanks for excellent review

Comment from Nebukadneser

Excellent

The other side of brilliant, my friend. So aptly said and demonstrated in the few words you used with such strenth and courage.
you're a super star
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

Comment from Selina Stambi

Good

I really struggle with rating the "concise" poetic forms.

Still, here goes:

I love the alliteration in the second line: the pounding b's.

The picture helped me understand a little better... I think.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

Comment from trampwatch

Excellent

good use of the tricky 575 structure. my interpretation is that its a study in manic depession. maybe im wrong, but poetry is art i suppose, and all art is subjective.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

Comment from Mai Mai

Excellent

Hmm... Well... Usually I like the economy of words. I'm not sure I get this piece. I will mark the flaw as mine and not penalize you for it.

Mai Mai

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013