Oh Life!
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Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Alcreator,
Your second line is confusing to me and I am not sure what 'bans bold' means. Does it mean the dark has been banned? Another interesting poem....chey
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Hi Alcreator,
Your second line is confusing to me and I am not sure what 'bans bold' means. Does it mean the dark has been banned? Another interesting poem....chey
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Janet Foor
Rule! Glow good, damn black,
Bleak blurs, blasts, blots or bans bold,
Glad! Dark reigns few hours.
Very good use of alliteration with bleak blurs, blasts, blots or bans bold.
Good assonance with "a" in damn black.
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Rule! Glow good, damn black,
Bleak blurs, blasts, blots or bans bold,
Glad! Dark reigns few hours.
Very good use of alliteration with bleak blurs, blasts, blots or bans bold.
Good assonance with "a" in damn black.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Rule! Glow good, damn black,
Bleak blurs, blasts, blots or bans bold,
Glad! Dark reigns few hours.
Forgive my ignorance, but I really don't see this
as a poem - I so want to understand, but I see it
as a list of words which seem rather disjointed.
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Rule! Glow good, damn black,
Bleak blurs, blasts, blots or bans bold,
Glad! Dark reigns few hours.
Forgive my ignorance, but I really don't see this
as a poem - I so want to understand, but I see it
as a list of words which seem rather disjointed.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Curt Mongold
Again, as with most of your works, the meaning is obscured by what appears to be your intent to write in the 15th or 16th century vernacular. The alliteration is nice, but confusing. All I can glean from this is that light is good, dark is not. I prefer to think that it is man's perceptions that mnake that biased opinion, and nothing more.
Curt
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Again, as with most of your works, the meaning is obscured by what appears to be your intent to write in the 15th or 16th century vernacular. The alliteration is nice, but confusing. All I can glean from this is that light is good, dark is not. I prefer to think that it is man's perceptions that mnake that biased opinion, and nothing more.
Curt
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from trailblazer101
I think you're going through and an entire rulership here that starts well, goes dark and then becomes enlightened.
At least that's what I saw.
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I think you're going through and an entire rulership here that starts well, goes dark and then becomes enlightened.
At least that's what I saw.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
you writes prove one thing, ALD, money talks.
you can talk absolute bollocks if you've the
cash. not sure god would approve, mind.
regards, eph.
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you writes prove one thing, ALD, money talks.
you can talk absolute bollocks if you've the
cash. not sure god would approve, mind.
regards, eph.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Doc Holiday
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Nice alliterating lines found within this poem.
Syallable count is good. Meaning is still a little abscure, here.
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Nice alliterating lines found within this poem.
Syallable count is good. Meaning is still a little abscure, here.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Lulube
In the dark of night, out come the nouns. Very descriptive and very loud this poem reads.
Different kind of read for me. I like it.
Lulube
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In the dark of night, out come the nouns. Very descriptive and very loud this poem reads.
Different kind of read for me. I like it.
Lulube
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from Fluffyhead
Like the tounge twister and the explanation and the way the tree and picture go together.Can't wait to read more. Have a good one.
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Like the tounge twister and the explanation and the way the tree and picture go together.Can't wait to read more. Have a good one.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from steevie
The end is nigh, don't wait for a response. Go now while it is not too late. Seek refuge under the tree of life.
steve
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The end is nigh, don't wait for a response. Go now while it is not too late. Seek refuge under the tree of life.
steve
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
